Burn It All Down
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Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your story pulled me in right from the start! I loved the diner and how it set the perfect tone for Alex Dane's encounter. The details you added
made everything feel so real. Alex's personality comes through so clearly. The snowy wilderness scenes were so well done. I could feel the cold and danger closing in. The line on the cabin wall? Absolute chills! For improvement, you might consider tightening the descriptions at the start. This was such a gripping read! The ending left me wanting to know what happens next - can't wait to see more of Alex's story!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025
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Your story pulled me in right from the start! I loved the diner and how it set the perfect tone for Alex Dane's encounter. The details you added
made everything feel so real. Alex's personality comes through so clearly. The snowy wilderness scenes were so well done. I could feel the cold and danger closing in. The line on the cabin wall? Absolute chills! For improvement, you might consider tightening the descriptions at the start. This was such a gripping read! The ending left me wanting to know what happens next - can't wait to see more of Alex's story!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025
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thanks, the second one is up now
