Comment from Wayne Fowler

Excellent

This is an interesting chapter. Well done.
...until the sun broke like yoke over the horizon. - This simile seems off. A yoke is the device that connects two animals or objects. I can't see it as a breaking sun. If you meant yolk, as in an egg, I can see the color and shape as possibly similar to a sunrise in a Van Gogh painting. But when you add the words 'broke like yolk' all I can envision is the breaking of egg yolk in a fry pan, hardly a sunrise.
Best wishes.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024

Thanks Wayne. Valid points.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

This is such exciting stuff my friend, it took Ruth to be a handful even for a hardened bounty hunter that he was, and now after rescuing Ruth, he has the Marshall and his deputy to contend, with, and a way to figure out how to look after the remaining two girls, well done, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024

Always look forward to hearing from you and the review. Blessings ahead.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Luke and Ruth are in a mess. I can't wait to read more and see what's going to happen. I'm glad Ruth is safe for now. Thank you for sharing this with us. You're doing a good job writing it.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024

Thanks Barbara. I'm humbly grateful that you review my projects.

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

I really enjoyed how you built up the tension in your story. The way you described Luke's thoughts while he's on the move kept me hooked. I loved the little details like him talking to his horse. The dialogue between Luke and Ruth felt so real. Your story has this gritty feel that I really liked! Keep it up!

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024

Thanks Michael. You always find something specific that fuels my desire to keep on with the project.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is a very well written chapter to your book. I enjoyed very much reading it. It flows along very well as it is read aloud. You're setting the structure your paragraphing and your punctuation are all very well done may you have a wonderful day. May you also have a very merry Christmas. Patricia.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024

Thanks Pat. I appreciate what you say, and it motivates me to keep on.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Oh no! And now Ruth is responsible for another man's death. I wonder if she would find it funny as we do with his comment of "I'd say most men don't stand much of a chance against you."
Hope no one else has to die while Luke rescues Ruth.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024

Thanks for your patience and continued reviews.

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

It is good she is going to survive but it looks her troubles are over yet. I like your story. You are good Western writer. I don't know how Luke is going to handle two women. This one is putting him in danger.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024

Thanks for the kind review and liking me in this genre.