Come Home
A free verse19 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
HI Jess, oh my sweet friend...this is so
sad...but to many times so true for family's
that have loved ones in the serve...
it's wonderful to know we will see those who
never made it home...in heaven...but there are
those who were left behind...sigh...a lifetime of
pain...we do by the Grace of God go on...and memories
made become smiles...some memories relived...
I love your poem sweet girl...and your picture speaks
for itself...very well written...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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HI Jess, oh my sweet friend...this is so
sad...but to many times so true for family's
that have loved ones in the serve...
it's wonderful to know we will see those who
never made it home...in heaven...but there are
those who were left behind...sigh...a lifetime of
pain...we do by the Grace of God go on...and memories
made become smiles...some memories relived...
I love your poem sweet girl...and your picture speaks
for itself...very well written...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Linds, thank you so much! Xoxoxo:)
Jess
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your sooo welcome Jess...love xxoo
🤗❤️🙏🌼
Comment from Jim Wile
Such a beautiful, sweet-sad poem, Jess, of a woman's great love for her man as she awaits his return home from war that never comes. Then she meets him again at the door to heaven where he's been waiting for her to come home to him.
Much of your free verse reads so much like a rhyming poem because you pay so much attention to the meter. It reads so very well with that 7-5 iambic pattern. Just a wonderful job.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Such a beautiful, sweet-sad poem, Jess, of a woman's great love for her man as she awaits his return home from war that never comes. Then she meets him again at the door to heaven where he's been waiting for her to come home to him.
Much of your free verse reads so much like a rhyming poem because you pay so much attention to the meter. It reads so very well with that 7-5 iambic pattern. Just a wonderful job.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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I'm honored, Jim. Thank you so much for your kind words and appreciation of the meter.
I learned from the best! ;)
Xo
Jess
Comment from Nicki.B
Wow this brought tears to my eyes. Excellent work. So emotional put together so well. The second time I read it I got goosebumps all over my body and I cried...now I'm am hormonal at the moment (lol!) but it's just your way with words, how you told the story it's just beautiful, well done
Best Wishes
Nicki xox
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Wow this brought tears to my eyes. Excellent work. So emotional put together so well. The second time I read it I got goosebumps all over my body and I cried...now I'm am hormonal at the moment (lol!) but it's just your way with words, how you told the story it's just beautiful, well done
Best Wishes
Nicki xox
Comment Written 10-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Nicki, this made me smile BIG! Thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful words! Xoxoxo
Jess
Comment from Tim Margetts
This is a moving whole of life story that reflects the pain and anguish so many went through and then have had to live with since.
War, the senseless waste of life caused by one man's greed for another's toys, using countless more to give their lives in hope of gaining what they wish to steal.
Thank you, Jessica. For sharing this.
Tim
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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This is a moving whole of life story that reflects the pain and anguish so many went through and then have had to live with since.
War, the senseless waste of life caused by one man's greed for another's toys, using countless more to give their lives in hope of gaining what they wish to steal.
Thank you, Jessica. For sharing this.
Tim
Comment Written 10-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Well said, Tim. Thank you so much for your thoughtful words, here.
Xoxo
Jess
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a touching post Jessica and when we are parted from our loved ones, we miss them more than ever. Well chosen words for this free verse and I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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This is a touching post Jessica and when we are parted from our loved ones, we miss them more than ever. Well chosen words for this free verse and I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 10-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Dolly! Xoxo
Comment from lyenochka
It's devastating for the family when the final assessment of a loved one in the military is given just the "Missing" designation. Your poem shows how faithful the wife was to keep waiting and praying. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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It's devastating for the family when the final assessment of a loved one in the military is given just the "Missing" designation. Your poem shows how faithful the wife was to keep waiting and praying. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Thank you so much, Helen! Xoxo
Comment from DonandVicki
A very moving and heart rending poem that brings out feelings of yearning, for a loved one. I get the feeling they both met in Heaven? Well composed poem.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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A very moving and heart rending poem that brings out feelings of yearning, for a loved one. I get the feeling they both met in Heaven? Well composed poem.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Thank you so much! :)
Xo
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very beautifully worded free verse for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest. I enjoyed very much listening to it as it flows very well when it is read aloud. May you have a wonderful week and may God bless you. Merry Christmas. Patricia.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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This is a very beautifully worded free verse for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest. I enjoyed very much listening to it as it flows very well when it is read aloud. May you have a wonderful week and may God bless you. Merry Christmas. Patricia.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Patricia! Xo
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This contest entry is very emotional. You did a great job conveying that emotion. So may spouses have waited for their soldier to return, only to have lost them to a senseless war. Thank you for sharing this entry with us and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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This contest entry is very emotional. You did a great job conveying that emotion. So may spouses have waited for their soldier to return, only to have lost them to a senseless war. Thank you for sharing this entry with us and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Thank you so much, Barbara! :)
Comment from estory
I think you have penned here a very moving, emotional rendition of two lives, even three, that have been separated by a soldier deployment, and that soldier being listed as missing in action. The free verse, broken into these stanzas, captures this broken feel to the relationship, of experience happening in bits and pieces. And you have some powerful images in here. "The little girl/ who knows only the soldier/ in frame" there you have the experience of the daughter who only can relate to her lost father through a picture of him. All that pain of the distance between them, of that lost relationship, is really hammered home there. I also like the part where she is told he is missing and the word invades her pregnant body. You feel that sense of loss striking into the heart of the daughter she carries as well. The light catching the brass buttons on the uniform is also a strong image, and we feel the person there being reduced to this one aspect of him, this soldier, leaving her. Really good work here. estory
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2024
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I think you have penned here a very moving, emotional rendition of two lives, even three, that have been separated by a soldier deployment, and that soldier being listed as missing in action. The free verse, broken into these stanzas, captures this broken feel to the relationship, of experience happening in bits and pieces. And you have some powerful images in here. "The little girl/ who knows only the soldier/ in frame" there you have the experience of the daughter who only can relate to her lost father through a picture of him. All that pain of the distance between them, of that lost relationship, is really hammered home there. I also like the part where she is told he is missing and the word invades her pregnant body. You feel that sense of loss striking into the heart of the daughter she carries as well. The light catching the brass buttons on the uniform is also a strong image, and we feel the person there being reduced to this one aspect of him, this soldier, leaving her. Really good work here. estory
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2024
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I'm honored, estory. Thank you so much for your encouragement. Xoxo