2024 Gypsy's Free Verse
Viewing comments for Chapter 114 "Rain Clouds".
10 total reviews
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi MariVal,
love how this loop poem goes full circle just the way life intended... and what a beautiful way to end it with a next generation, who get to experience the awe of it all.
I grew up in a few different environments, especially when I was young and living with relatives on farms. My uncle and auntie's farm was west of the great dividing range and rainfall was far and few between. Baths had to be shared(not so good if you were fourth down the line!). So when it rained it was a real treat... off came the down pipe and there was my shower. I'm wondering if that's where my love of being in the rain came from. I loved to run in it, I love to play my sports in it... hell, I still go out in it every chance I get. I guess it revitalises me.
Beautifully composed, presented and delivered!
With our thoughts we create...
the eternal circle.
Kindest regards,
James.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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Hi MariVal,
love how this loop poem goes full circle just the way life intended... and what a beautiful way to end it with a next generation, who get to experience the awe of it all.
I grew up in a few different environments, especially when I was young and living with relatives on farms. My uncle and auntie's farm was west of the great dividing range and rainfall was far and few between. Baths had to be shared(not so good if you were fourth down the line!). So when it rained it was a real treat... off came the down pipe and there was my shower. I'm wondering if that's where my love of being in the rain came from. I loved to run in it, I love to play my sports in it... hell, I still go out in it every chance I get. I guess it revitalises me.
Beautifully composed, presented and delivered!
With our thoughts we create...
the eternal circle.
Kindest regards,
James.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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I tried to answer four times and for some unknown reason my response doesn't save. I sent you an email and message with it.
hugs
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All's good, super busy at present.
Just when you think things are settling... there's not! Had a disastrous day yesterday, but I'll email when I can and fill you in on it.
Un abrazo de vuelta querida y dulce amiga.
Jaime.
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Okay, James, I'm sorry about the bad day, that sucks.
Besitos y abrazos
Comment from kahpot
Very well done, I really like the way your loop poem not only follows the required last word first word need, but your entire poem is a loop from start to finish, starting from the clouds and ending with the sky (clouds)
so very well written and presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Very well done, I really like the way your loop poem not only follows the required last word first word need, but your entire poem is a loop from start to finish, starting from the clouds and ending with the sky (clouds)
so very well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 06-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Thank you very much 😊
gypsy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this loop poem with us. I enjoyed reading. Loop poems are fun to read, especially out loud. Your presentation and poem are especially good.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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Thank you for sharing this loop poem with us. I enjoyed reading. Loop poems are fun to read, especially out loud. Your presentation and poem are especially good.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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Thank you very much 😊
Gypsy
Comment from RJ Heritage
Well connected verses in thus modified Loop poem, of course we can call appreciate the connectivity of nature in the lives of us humans and the universe.
Thanks for sharing.
RJ
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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Well connected verses in thus modified Loop poem, of course we can call appreciate the connectivity of nature in the lives of us humans and the universe.
Thanks for sharing.
RJ
Comment Written 06-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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Thank you very much 😊
Gypsy
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You're welcome
RJ
Comment from shelley kaye
last line suggestion: "face looking up at the clouds"
to loop the poem back to the first word... just a thought...
other than that, good smooth loops
and i love the imagery of
"ocean in a drop drop down on the child's face"
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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last line suggestion: "face looking up at the clouds"
to loop the poem back to the first word... just a thought...
other than that, good smooth loops
and i love the imagery of
"ocean in a drop drop down on the child's face"
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
Comment Written 06-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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I like it the way it is.
Thank you very much 😊
Gypsy
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy------the full-circle life of a raindrop told in a very imaginitive and entertaining way, a way that I usually don't think about while I'm busy cursing the wet bastards!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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Another fine poem, Gypsy------the full-circle life of a raindrop told in a very imaginitive and entertaining way, a way that I usually don't think about while I'm busy cursing the wet bastards!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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LoL 😆 wet bastards ...
Thank you very much 😊
Gypsy
Comment from Neonewman
I've always found loop poetry fascinating. This is a beautiful piece that comes full circle from the beginning. I remember looking up and letting the rain hit my face as a child. Now, I duck and cover, lol. Thank you for sharing, Gypsy.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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I've always found loop poetry fascinating. This is a beautiful piece that comes full circle from the beginning. I remember looking up and letting the rain hit my face as a child. Now, I duck and cover, lol. Thank you for sharing, Gypsy.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 06-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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I loved walking in the rain when I was a kid.
Thank you very much 😊
Gypsy
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My pleasure. Me too.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A lovely circular loop poem that flows well and charms us with the refreshing charm of rain. Love the drip, drop and its reiteration later in the verse. Well done, Gypsy. Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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A lovely circular loop poem that flows well and charms us with the refreshing charm of rain. Love the drip, drop and its reiteration later in the verse. Well done, Gypsy. Take care Debbie
Comment Written 06-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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Thank you very much 😊
Gypsy
Comment from BethShelby
I like this. I didn't notice it was loop poem until I finished reading it. usually, the repetition annoys me but not with this on. You presented the cycle of water as it goes from stage to another in a lovely way.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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I like this. I didn't notice it was loop poem until I finished reading it. usually, the repetition annoys me but not with this on. You presented the cycle of water as it goes from stage to another in a lovely way.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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That is why I prefer free verse. Rhyming it's more strict.
Thank you very much 😊
Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
I like how your poem made it full circle just like all the looping in the poem! I think this type of looking is more natural than the one that requires a rhyme scheme and the looping. Great job with this!
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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I like how your poem made it full circle just like all the looping in the poem! I think this type of looking is more natural than the one that requires a rhyme scheme and the looping. Great job with this!
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Thank you, big sister. I am happy you like it. How are you?
Love,
marival ❤️
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We're good. Just really busy! 💖 How are you?