The Prisoner Waits
A condemned man's life is spared seconds before execution2 total reviews
Comment from Sallyo
This is a good piece of flash, but it needs a proper proof reading to fix up a couple of syntax and punctuation errors.
Frank's heart pounding, as he thought of the
Frank's heart pounded, as he thought of the
Frank blinked his heart racing, uncertain of what this second chance might bring.
Frank blinked; his heart racing, uncertain of what this second chance might bring.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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This is a good piece of flash, but it needs a proper proof reading to fix up a couple of syntax and punctuation errors.
Frank's heart pounding, as he thought of the
Frank's heart pounded, as he thought of the
Frank blinked his heart racing, uncertain of what this second chance might bring.
Frank blinked; his heart racing, uncertain of what this second chance might bring.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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Hi Sallyo
Many thanks for your review and for your helpful observations.
I have made the corrections, which I fully agree with
Take care and stay safe.
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Hi Sallyo
Many thanks for your review and for your helpful observations.
I have made the corrections, which I fully agree with
Take care and stay safe.
Comment from RJ Heritage
Well told and complete story in such a brief criteria. Your imagery is strong and the atmosphere creates one of intrigue. Cleverly written short story. Thank you for sharing.
RJ
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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Well told and complete story in such a brief criteria. Your imagery is strong and the atmosphere creates one of intrigue. Cleverly written short story. Thank you for sharing.
RJ
Comment Written 25-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your lovely review.
Take care and stay safe.
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You're welcome
RJ