Morning Metamorphosis
A thick fog rises and changes to wind tossed cloud puffs23 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Beth.
This is a well illustrated poem. I like the dueling metaphors for the clouds and how they form.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Hope you had a nice Thanksgiving.
Joan
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2024
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Hi Beth.
This is a well illustrated poem. I like the dueling metaphors for the clouds and how they form.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Hope you had a nice Thanksgiving.
Joan
Comment Written 29-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Joan. I'm appreciate the congratulations and comments.
Beth
Comment from harmony13
The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line
says it all! I find watching the clouds is an amazing experience! Thank
you for the definition of metamorphosis! The artwork is perfect and
compliments the words of this poem.
Hi Beth, have a Wonderful Thanksgiving! Maria
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line
says it all! I find watching the clouds is an amazing experience! Thank
you for the definition of metamorphosis! The artwork is perfect and
compliments the words of this poem.
Hi Beth, have a Wonderful Thanksgiving! Maria
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the nice review on my poem. I'm so glad you liked it.
Beth
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Amazing what those wind currents can accomplish! ;) A wonderful offering for the contest here, Lady Beth! ;) One formatting suggestion: instead of the period at the end (way too abrupt for the 'haiku' you've written!), you should replace it with a tilde (that little squiggle) as a smooth, thoughtful transition to your satori line... :-) :-) Love the visual even with the well-matched pic here! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Amazing what those wind currents can accomplish! ;) A wonderful offering for the contest here, Lady Beth! ;) One formatting suggestion: instead of the period at the end (way too abrupt for the 'haiku' you've written!), you should replace it with a tilde (that little squiggle) as a smooth, thoughtful transition to your satori line... :-) :-) Love the visual even with the well-matched pic here! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 23-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Yvette. I appreciate the suggestion. I didn't even realize I'd put a period in there. I've heard haikus are supposed to be punctuated.
Comment from Jacob1395
I loved the imagery here of the morning fog rising, it is amazing how it can suddenly come upon you, but dangerous as well, even if you are just out walking. A well written piece, Beth, I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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I loved the imagery here of the morning fog rising, it is amazing how it can suddenly come upon you, but dangerous as well, even if you are just out walking. A well written piece, Beth, I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Jacob. I love the clouds and I was happy the fog had lifted. It was really thick earlier.
Beth
Comment from royowen
I think I was confronted by a heavy mist in the morning is Switzerland some years ago, and it amazed me to see the mist lift very quickly when the sun came out, beautifully written Beth, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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I think I was confronted by a heavy mist in the morning is Switzerland some years ago, and it amazed me to see the mist lift very quickly when the sun came out, beautifully written Beth, blessings Roy
Comment Written 22-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Roy. Switzerland is beautiful place. TJe snow covered mountains were amazing against the deep blue sky.
Beth
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Thank you, Roy. Switzerland is beautiful place. TJe snow covered mountains were amazing against the deep blue sky.
Beth
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They are indeed Beth
Comment from Charles D Ezell
I love when the clouds do this. Reminds me of cotton balls so soft and gentle. so inviting. You did good with this poem; I hope you do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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I love when the clouds do this. Reminds me of cotton balls so soft and gentle. so inviting. You did good with this poem; I hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Chuck. I enjoy looking at clouds. I appreciate the six stars.
Beth
Comment from jim vecchio
A very good entry for the 5-7-5 contest. God sure makes some pretty designs in the sky. Sorry I missed those clouds, but I'm glad I missed the dentist. Best wishes!
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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A very good entry for the 5-7-5 contest. God sure makes some pretty designs in the sky. Sorry I missed those clouds, but I'm glad I missed the dentist. Best wishes!
Comment Written 22-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Jim. I appreciate the review. It is never fun to go to a dentist.
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Amen to that!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
You are so good at these, Beth, and this is no exception. It's really good. I love to find things in clouds, and this really does look like powder puffs in the sky. And what better place to watch the changes of clouds, than from the destist chair!? It keeps your mind off other not so nice things happening at the same time. :)) Well done and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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You are so good at these, Beth, and this is no exception. It's really good. I love to find things in clouds, and this really does look like powder puffs in the sky. And what better place to watch the changes of clouds, than from the destist chair!? It keeps your mind off other not so nice things happening at the same time. :)) Well done and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 22-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Sandra, I appreciate you saying that. I rather write a longer poem that something short.
Beth
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Even your font looks like puff balls here - well done. I like how your first and last lines rhyme in this 5-7-5, and I appreciate how you took something as simple as a trip to the dentist and turned it into art.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Even your font looks like puff balls here - well done. I like how your first and last lines rhyme in this 5-7-5, and I appreciate how you took something as simple as a trip to the dentist and turned it into art.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 22-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Pam. I don't think the lines are supposed to rhyme and didn't mean to rhyme but I can't seem to avoid it. I like rhymes. Thanks for the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from Wendy G
I hope those beautiful clouds were a good distraction from the dental work! This is a lovely poem and it is beautifully presented although the heavy font is hard tor read. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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I hope those beautiful clouds were a good distraction from the dental work! This is a lovely poem and it is beautifully presented although the heavy font is hard tor read. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 22-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Wendy. I was happy to have something interesting to look at while I got tortured. I appreciate your review.
Beth