Colorful Memories
Like watercolor paintings from little hands...8 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Yvette,
This poem shows how rainbows can even bring adults hope in their simple beauty and their bringing of hope. The artwork seems metaphoric of how hope and beauty are intertwined in a rainbow. And how everything is always flowing
Keep writing and stay healthy
I hope this did well in the prompt.
Have a happy holiday season.
Joan
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
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Hi Yvette,
This poem shows how rainbows can even bring adults hope in their simple beauty and their bringing of hope. The artwork seems metaphoric of how hope and beauty are intertwined in a rainbow. And how everything is always flowing
Keep writing and stay healthy
I hope this did well in the prompt.
Have a happy holiday season.
Joan
Comment Written 03-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
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Hey there, Joan! Thanx so much for stopping in for a review on this one, my lady -- love reading your reviews as you truly take time in your analysis! ;-) Don't think it placed well, but I enjoy these short form challenges... :-) Enjoy the rest of the week! ;) Yvette
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You're very welcome, Yvette. Thanks for the wishes for and enjoyable week.
Joan
Comment from June Sargent
A waterfall of joy rushing over the edge of youth as time flies - to form pools of memories from which we fish now and then - to recapture a glimpse of those colorful, petulant days of long ago. Great imagery in a few short lines!
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2024
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A waterfall of joy rushing over the edge of youth as time flies - to form pools of memories from which we fish now and then - to recapture a glimpse of those colorful, petulant days of long ago. Great imagery in a few short lines!
Comment Written 22-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2024
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Thank you for this encouraging review!
Comment from Mrs. KT
Beautifully created, both in message and display, Mystery Writer.
Sometimes those rainbows are, indeed, "petulant."
I seem to see more of them the older I get...
Thank you for sharing!
Best wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Beautifully created, both in message and display, Mystery Writer.
Sometimes those rainbows are, indeed, "petulant."
I seem to see more of them the older I get...
Thank you for sharing!
Best wishes!
diane
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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You are not the only one... Thank you for your review, Mrs. KT!
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
This is a nice 5-7-9 poem. The words are powerful. Reminding us of a childhood past. The picture is spot on for this poem.
Great job and good luck in your contest.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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This is a nice 5-7-9 poem. The words are powerful. Reminding us of a childhood past. The picture is spot on for this poem.
Great job and good luck in your contest.
Cecilia
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Thanks for your review!
Comment from Rick Gardner
Very good. brings back fond memories, joyful times with friends and family. Hopefully we all will be able to give these feelings to our children and hopefully our grandchildren. Their laugh, their smile, giggle, voice are the sounds from Heaven.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Very good. brings back fond memories, joyful times with friends and family. Hopefully we all will be able to give these feelings to our children and hopefully our grandchildren. Their laugh, their smile, giggle, voice are the sounds from Heaven.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Thanks for your review!
Comment from Patrick Bernardy
Hello!
I must commend you on your visual presentation. The image of the swirl of spectrum colors is very pleasing to the mind and invites one into your words.
---"Petulant rainbows" --This is such a loaded phrase that is very effective in setting the tone. Wistful? Nostalgic? Maybe something a little more bitter?
---"childhood's edge" --Many poets might choose another word, but "edge" is perfect! It connotes, again, a little bitterness at aging, insinuates the sharpness of a blade.
---"youthful joy" --And here is the object of the poem, the meaning of what is longed for.
This is an exquisite short poem about growing old, nostalgia, and possibly regret. Very well done! Good luck in the contest!
Patrick
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Hello!
I must commend you on your visual presentation. The image of the swirl of spectrum colors is very pleasing to the mind and invites one into your words.
---"Petulant rainbows" --This is such a loaded phrase that is very effective in setting the tone. Wistful? Nostalgic? Maybe something a little more bitter?
---"childhood's edge" --Many poets might choose another word, but "edge" is perfect! It connotes, again, a little bitterness at aging, insinuates the sharpness of a blade.
---"youthful joy" --And here is the object of the poem, the meaning of what is longed for.
This is an exquisite short poem about growing old, nostalgia, and possibly regret. Very well done! Good luck in the contest!
Patrick
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Thanks so much for your review, Patrick - so good to read such thoughtful analysis!!
Comment from kiwisteveh
A colorful glimpse of a rainbow metaphor. Sadly your very first word spoils it for me, seeming very out of place in the context of the poem. 'petulant' is a very negative word, although your last line suggests your intent is much more positive. Perhaps you could find a more appropriate beginning word and I would be happy to revise my rating for the rest of the poem flows well.
Steve
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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A colorful glimpse of a rainbow metaphor. Sadly your very first word spoils it for me, seeming very out of place in the context of the poem. 'petulant' is a very negative word, although your last line suggests your intent is much more positive. Perhaps you could find a more appropriate beginning word and I would be happy to revise my rating for the rest of the poem flows well.
Steve
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Yes, it is a negative word. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the 5-7-9 writing prompt. I love the term petulant rainbows. The artwork with its vivid colors is perfect for the presentation of your poem. Good luck.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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An excellent entry for the 5-7-9 writing prompt. I love the term petulant rainbows. The artwork with its vivid colors is perfect for the presentation of your poem. Good luck.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Thanks so much for your review!