The Cradle
The resting moon15 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Hi Lea, this a wonderful tanka poem. I like the sentiment that is created within. I would have a look at the haiku portion. The two first lines have to be grammatically linked. Also, exhausted moons should be moon's.
Now lastly, a tanka is always written in lower case. All best of luck. Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Hi Lea, this a wonderful tanka poem. I like the sentiment that is created within. I would have a look at the haiku portion. The two first lines have to be grammatically linked. Also, exhausted moons should be moon's.
Now lastly, a tanka is always written in lower case. All best of luck. Ulla xcx
Comment Written 14-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Thank you Ulla! I appreciate it's a great tip and the reminders about cap's lock and the apostrophe. Thanks for the great review.I'm super glad you enjoyed this poem! You find reading and your great comments and your time all valuable to me! Wishing you and yours. A wonderful holiday and a great evening. Thank you again!
Comment from royowen
An excellent tanka entry in this poetry contest Lea, there is an excellent pivot line to connect the first two and fourth and fifth lines. As you generally write darkish themes, this and outstanding example of these short forms, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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An excellent tanka entry in this poetry contest Lea, there is an excellent pivot line to connect the first two and fourth and fifth lines. As you generally write darkish themes, this and outstanding example of these short forms, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 14-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Well you found me out Roy. I do write darkish themes. Lol. As always, I'm grateful and thankful for review. You always hit the nail on the head every time! Thanks for your great writing and your time.Most of all.Wishing you an awesome holiday!
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Well done
Comment from Monica Chaddick
This is a beautiful, well written poem. You did a wonderful job. The selected artwork is absolutely beautiful. Great job overall.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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This is a beautiful, well written poem. You did a wonderful job. The selected artwork is absolutely beautiful. Great job overall.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Thank you so much, Monica! I'm really glad you liked it. Awesome to receive your review and for your time as well as the great rating, I am grateful! I am pleased. Most of all, that the poem resonates and I hope that you and yours have a wonderful holiday, and a grand evening.Thank you again!
Comment from EILEEN LAW
Interesting writing. You draw the reader in with the imagery as well. You should keep writing. Have you ever done a happy poem?? One with rainbow?
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
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Interesting writing. You draw the reader in with the imagery as well. You should keep writing. Have you ever done a happy poem?? One with rainbow?
Comment Written 14-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
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Rainbows and ribbons and puppy dogs tales.I've never been in that kind of writer. I've done a couple of funny ones epic, like I did one on troy, and uh, I did a couple of kids poems. Put mostly I like to write abstract. Thank you so much for your review. I appreciate your kind rating and for your time. As well, I hope that your holiday is amazing.You get everything you wish for nice again!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is a carefully coordinated tanka that seems to personify the moon. Of course I may not have read that right. I get 'Night orb' also refers to the moon. This reminds me how I always see a female face in the moon, too. Very nice illustration choice and presentation.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
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This is a carefully coordinated tanka that seems to personify the moon. Of course I may not have read that right. I get 'Night orb' also refers to the moon. This reminds me how I always see a female face in the moon, too. Very nice illustration choice and presentation.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
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Thank you so much! I'm completely glad that you liked it. Thank you, and you see very well, your insight I mean is great! Thanks for your kind words too I appreciate it very much! I'm wishing you and yours a wonderful holiday and that it brings you everything you wish and deserve. Thank you again.Hope you're having a great evening!
Comment from kahpot
If I had to ask one thing, it would be to have your first line in the same font size as the rest, (to me) it distorts the presentation, and distracts from smooth reading and the message within, none the less, the connection between the moon and branches/arms and the approaching darkness is excellent, very well done, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
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If I had to ask one thing, it would be to have your first line in the same font size as the rest, (to me) it distorts the presentation, and distracts from smooth reading and the message within, none the less, the connection between the moon and branches/arms and the approaching darkness is excellent, very well done, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 14-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
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Wow thank you!!! It's such an honor to receive this. Because you're an excellent writer, i've always thought so. I made the correction for some reason every time. I do a poem with defaults to that. Not to physically make the change, and yet. For the font size, it says default on both.So who knows how I was able to fix it by skipping a line. Thank you so much for your excellent review. And for this, whopping fabulous rating your comments, your time are important to me.I wish you all a wonderful holiday.You endorse, I hope you're enjoying your night.Thank you again!
Comment from Barry Penfold
Nice poem and fantastic image. Thanks for sharing and all the best in the competition. I must read more about the Tanka Poetry. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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Nice poem and fantastic image. Thanks for sharing and all the best in the competition. I must read more about the Tanka Poetry. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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Barry, thank you kindly for this great review. I'm happy you enjoyed it.
I thank you for your time too. And you're great rating, your thoughtful comments are awesome! I hope that you and yours have a wonderful holiday. Santa brings you everything you'd like. Enjoy your evening thanks again!
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Thanks Lea. Same to you regarding the Christmas period. An always busy period. Hope you have a safe and Happy New Year as well.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
nice poem about looking at the full moon light up the night sky filled with wonder and light I like the image chosen and I like the last two lines the best
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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nice poem about looking at the full moon light up the night sky filled with wonder and light I like the image chosen and I like the last two lines the best
Comment Written 13-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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Hi Jake! thank you so much! I always enjoy your perspective and your understanding of what i've written is impeccable. I appreciate you and your time and your fine rating. Your kind comments, thank you.I hope you're having a great day!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. The flow of this entry is remarkable. I want to wish you luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. The flow of this entry is remarkable. I want to wish you luck with the contest.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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Wow! A fine compliment. Thank you so much for that, as always.I'm grateful to you for your review. I think you're one of the best writers out there! So your thoughts and your comments are important to me because you are that. And much more. Thank you, Barbara, I hope you're having a great day!
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very nicely written TANK a poem and I very much enjoyed listening to it. I wish you the very best with your writing. I also wish you the best in the contest. May you have a lovely day and have a very merry Christmas. Patricia
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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This is a very nicely written TANK a poem and I very much enjoyed listening to it. I wish you the very best with your writing. I also wish you the best in the contest. May you have a lovely day and have a very merry Christmas. Patricia
Comment Written 13-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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Thank you and you too! Congratulations on your accomplishment! No finer person deserves it! as always, I appreciate your review and your kind remarks! that's valuable to me. HOHOHO and all that good stuff! Thank you again. I really hope that you do have an awesome holiday.And you're having a great day too!