2024 Gypsy's Haiku
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Comment from RJ Heritage
Many a time, I have held a conch shell to my ear and hear the sound of the windy sound of the sea. Of course, as I grew older I know that it was not actually that, but even now I still lose myself in the feeling from time to time.
Beautiful haiku.
RJ
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
Many a time, I have held a conch shell to my ear and hear the sound of the windy sound of the sea. Of course, as I grew older I know that it was not actually that, but even now I still lose myself in the feeling from time to time.
Beautiful haiku.
RJ
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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Thank you very much 😊
Gypsy
Comment from shelley kaye
the sound of sea remains -- as i was reading, i kept trying to put a 'the' before the sea. . . or it could be just me lol- just thought i'd mention it...
also, concha - that's spanish, right? should be conch if you want it in english... though it does sound kinda cool "concha"
anyway, just some thoughts i had...
a great haiku with nice imagery and cool pics
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
the sound of sea remains -- as i was reading, i kept trying to put a 'the' before the sea. . . or it could be just me lol- just thought i'd mention it...
also, concha - that's spanish, right? should be conch if you want it in english... though it does sound kinda cool "concha"
anyway, just some thoughts i had...
a great haiku with nice imagery and cool pics
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Thank you very much, did write the Spanish word lol I chanced it.
With haiku we aim to right as brief as possible and I don't want 2 "the" so closed together. I don't think I need the second the.
Gypsy 😊
Comment from GWHARGIS
I was convinced when I was young that you could, in fact, hear the ocean when you put your ear to a sea shell. You have described a wonderful childhood memory. Great job. Gretchen
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
I was convinced when I was young that you could, in fact, hear the ocean when you put your ear to a sea shell. You have described a wonderful childhood memory. Great job. Gretchen
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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Thank you very much 😊
Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
That's the fun part. I love that we can imagine the sea in the seashell. Of course, it works just by cupping our hands over our ears but it's more fun using a seashell. Great use of alliteration in your poem!
That's the fun part. I love that we can imagine the sea in the seashell. Of course, it works just by cupping our hands over our ears but it's more fun using a seashell. Great use of alliteration in your poem!
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024