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The left lane is for passing only

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Comment from Jim Wile
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Clyde's risky and unusual approach seems to be paying off in raising the consciousness of the trucking industry. At least he's got the conversation going. Let's just hope the results don't prove fatal for someone.

I love Thurmon's role in the story as one of the good truckers and a good family man too. He certainly has the pulse of the situation and of Clyde's thinking. This was well written and clear.

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 25-Oct-2024
    Thank you very much. Believe it or not, Thurmon was a late addition. The story was done. Then I wrote Thurmon and tried to synchronize it in.
reply by Jim Wile on 26-Oct-2024
    You've done a good job with him, and I think he strengthens the story and is an important character to show a balance.
Comment from Ric Myworld
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I guess everyone has a soft side, but most times, it's only when things are pertaining to theirs and themselves. "Happy Trails," and then again as most always you go and add something that brings back lots of memories.
Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
    smiley face here
    Thank you for your very fine review.
Comment from Begin Again
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I like Thurmon and his family and how they look to their faith to pray not only for themselves but also for others, including Clyde. I hope Clyde has a change of heart before he kills someone. Maybe Thurmon could meet him and make an impression. I guess I will have to wait and see.
Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
    Thank you for your very nice review.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
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"unexplained billet hole" - make "bullet"

"that still leave ten very angry car drivers ..." - "leaves"

closed quotes after "saying grace before meals

I never thought I'd say that I'd be reading, and enjoying, a story about a disgruntled old guy getting even with truckers, but I am. The "Thurmon" part of the story adds another perspective and the importance of family in our everyday lives. Clyde seems to have forgotten all about his family, as he seems to have a single purpose these days.

But, is he having a change of heart here? We shall see!

Good chapter, Wayne.

xo
Pam

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
    Last minute edits are my nemesis. I don't give them second (or third) looks.
    Thank you for your great review.
Comment from lyenochka
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Aww. Now Thurmon is a true Christian and knows that even enemies could be really hurting people. It seems that Clyde is thinking a whole lot more and that could change him. Still hoping that he and Thurmon will become friends.

He was chagrinned to note (chagrined) at least that's what one dictionary says but it doesn't have the red underlining so I guess it's okay.

Hope you post the last chapter on the weekend! But this one I'll be busy with out of town guests but will look for your post.


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
    Thank you very much. I so appreciate your reviews.
Comment from Wendy G
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That's a worrying ending - three of those white F150s nearby. He's a responsible driver and a good faamily man. Great chapter, a fine read. A couple of edits as below.
Wendy
Edit: or sporting an unexplained billet (bullet) hole.
that PBS aired ,he (comma after aired)
about five, foot nine (remove comma)

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
    Thank you.
    Last minute edits are my nemesis (among many other things). I don't think hard enough or give them second looks.
Comment from jim vecchio
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Another great chapter, Keeping me wanting more, especially your final line. Also, for my idol, Roy Rogers, who came along when I had extra stars. Will Clyde ride off into the sunset? Or will he make the mistake that will spell doom?

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
    Thank you for your great review and for the fabulous six stars!
reply by jim vecchio on 23-Oct-2024
    You deserved them!
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
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I think you should have Clyde meet Thurmis the reason he decides to stop his spree. Love to you and yours. Enjoy the weeks. Nice weather here but overcast. Thurmon telling of his love for Sara and the children stops Clyde in his tracks. Karen

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
    Thank you. I appreciate your very nice review.
reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 22-Oct-2024
    Ideas flow out of my head. I am waiting to see what you got comong. Karen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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This is a really great chapter showing how Thurmon and his family feel about the danger he goes into every day as a trucker. Clyde hasn't killed anyone yet, but he could do it at any time.

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
    Thank you for your very nice review.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
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Hi Wayne,
Great story. This is the last chapter of your book, however I was able to pick-up on the jest of book. I found one sentence that doesn't make sense to me-Had Clyde seen the FBI interview that PBS aired he would have learned that they had narrowed the search his state:" Should there be a {to} in there?
Cecilia

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
    Thank you very much. I appreciate your terrific review.
    (But there is one chapter remaining)
reply by Cecilia A Heiskary on 22-Oct-2024
    Your welcome