Marilyn found the cave
Yep! It's a cave.29 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This story sounds like a wise decision was reached after a short evaluation of risk and reward. The reward would likely be death from exposure, so the risk would probably be not being found.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
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This story sounds like a wise decision was reached after a short evaluation of risk and reward. The reward would likely be death from exposure, so the risk would probably be not being found.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
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As we age hopefully, our common sense outweighs our sense of adventure. I still read adventure. I love Clive Cussler, old Jack Higgins, Jules Verne, Robert Louis Stevenson, and I have never had a problem re-reading books. I appreciate the read. Karen
Comment from Jim Wile
Great statement about aging and the loss of the sense of adventure from when we were younger. Now the practicality of the situation takes over and the negatives far outweigh the positives, and the wisdom we have attained through the years improves our judgment.
There is a constant weighing that we must do as we age. Is this or that going to be worth the effort and likely discomfort that will arise, and will the enjoyment be enough to make it worth it. Increasingly, the answer becomes no. This was a great reminder of that.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2024
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Great statement about aging and the loss of the sense of adventure from when we were younger. Now the practicality of the situation takes over and the negatives far outweigh the positives, and the wisdom we have attained through the years improves our judgment.
There is a constant weighing that we must do as we age. Is this or that going to be worth the effort and likely discomfort that will arise, and will the enjoyment be enough to make it worth it. Increasingly, the answer becomes no. This was a great reminder of that.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2024
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Gosh! That sounds rather depressing. I still yearn and want. I just try to channel it away for athletics. Thanks for the read.
Comment from Gayla putnam
Such humorous descriptions of yourself. I loved the second paragraph. I imagine you as still feisty and adventuresome, just smart enough to stay out of caves, and who doesn't love a long bath at Best Western? My only criticism is your beginning paragraph. The sentence starts out, "I asked her if she thought that dozens of crews filled with people with good bodies............." That sentence doesn't read as well as the rest of your fun story--just a suggestion. gayla
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2024
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Such humorous descriptions of yourself. I loved the second paragraph. I imagine you as still feisty and adventuresome, just smart enough to stay out of caves, and who doesn't love a long bath at Best Western? My only criticism is your beginning paragraph. The sentence starts out, "I asked her if she thought that dozens of crews filled with people with good bodies............." That sentence doesn't read as well as the rest of your fun story--just a suggestion. gayla
Comment Written 25-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2024
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I fiddled with it, see what you think. Thanks for the read. Also, your ideas and edits. Karen
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PERFECT...
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Thanks again, Karen
Comment from DonandVicki
A flash fiction that caught my attention, I use to explore caves in my youth on Guam, Arizona and others. Quite a dangerous sport, if you can call it a sport.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024
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A flash fiction that caught my attention, I use to explore caves in my youth on Guam, Arizona and others. Quite a dangerous sport, if you can call it a sport.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much for the read. As a girl scount we walked on the ground floor of a few caves, but no tunneling. My Momma was not gonna crawl through cob webs and what not she had just had her hair done! Karen
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Thank you so much for the read. As a girl scount we walked on the ground floor of a few caves, but no tunneling. My Momma was not gonna crawl through cob webs and what not she had just had her hair done! Karen
Comment from F. William Lester
I'm with Mildred. I like my naps and sitting in front of my computer or the TV or just sitting. I love the way she sees herself. Very honest. If I have one comment, albeit minor, I don't think you need a question mark at the end of the second paragraph. It sounds like she's relating a question she asked as opposed to directly asking the question. Nice work, Karen. I love your humor. Be well, Frank
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024
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I'm with Mildred. I like my naps and sitting in front of my computer or the TV or just sitting. I love the way she sees herself. Very honest. If I have one comment, albeit minor, I don't think you need a question mark at the end of the second paragraph. It sounds like she's relating a question she asked as opposed to directly asking the question. Nice work, Karen. I love your humor. Be well, Frank
Comment Written 24-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024
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Thank you very much for the read. I will go take a look at your suggested edit. Have a good weekend. Karen
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You're welcome, Karen, and you have one as well.
Comment from Ric Myworld
I like reading stories which come from prompts, writing from a sentence that starts a story. But it isn't something that would come easy for me.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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I like reading stories which come from prompts, writing from a sentence that starts a story. But it isn't something that would come easy for me.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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I sat with the idea for a while, then, it took me a while to find a picture, then I sat down and it came. I talked about why I didn't want to go in the cave. I thought it would be funny. Thanks for the read. Karen
Comment from Brenda Strauser
Hi Karen, I like the way you wrote this story. It is surely a different take. I am going to post the same topic, but mine is completely different. I was surprised by the ending. Great job.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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Hi Karen, I like the way you wrote this story. It is surely a different take. I am going to post the same topic, but mine is completely different. I was surprised by the ending. Great job.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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Different is good. I thought about getting wedged in a tunnel , but, since that has actually happenend to people, It wouldn't really be funny. Thanks for the read. Karen
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written and it was a pleasure to listen to. I wish you the very best with your writing. I also enjoyed your story very much but 70 is not old when you get to be 86 and 70 is still young. Patricia.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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This is very well written and it was a pleasure to listen to. I wish you the very best with your writing. I also enjoyed your story very much but 70 is not old when you get to be 86 and 70 is still young. Patricia.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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When I can barely make it to the front door, my body feels plenty old. Besides which , I , myself am not yet 70. I have all original parts. Though some are missing. You are now an Energizer Bunny. I am the tortise. Thanks for the read. Karen
Comment from Kahlani
That's a good idea. Bad things happen inside the caves. I've enjoyed this writing topic. I like how you personalized the story (in the first person). Are you talking about Marilyn from the Little Shop of Horrors? Thanks for a lovely read.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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That's a good idea. Bad things happen inside the caves. I've enjoyed this writing topic. I like how you personalized the story (in the first person). Are you talking about Marilyn from the Little Shop of Horrors? Thanks for a lovely read.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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Yep, She write 50 word stories, limericks, and horror. I write about pretty much anything, except I cannot seem to write a western yet. I write a lot of different kinds of poetry, crime with humor, ironic twists. slapstick , and nostalgia. Short storries are my favorite , but they take longer. You will find your best voice on here. I found out that the reason I was having trouble writing my crime stories was because I had been holding back my humor. Lots of nice people on here. A few bad ones like anyplace else in the world. Have fun and keep writing. Thanks for the read. Karen
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Karen,
this was an interesting post. I myself wouldn't enter a cave for love nor money. The caves back in Hoonah had bears in them sometimes. My younger son worked for Green's Creek Mine on Admiralty Island. I wouldn't go into a mine either. Too many bad things can happen there. Good luck in the contest gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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Hello Karen,
this was an interesting post. I myself wouldn't enter a cave for love nor money. The caves back in Hoonah had bears in them sometimes. My younger son worked for Green's Creek Mine on Admiralty Island. I wouldn't go into a mine either. Too many bad things can happen there. Good luck in the contest gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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Thanks so much for the read. I think voting starts today. I try to vote in at least one contest every time I get on. The more we vote, the more honest we make them. Karen