Our Forever Love Story
true love blooms anew3 total reviews
Comment from karenina
I do enjoy a well-written acrostic! Yours flows so well and never seems to be "reaching" for a word to fit the next needed letter in your words. ALMOST every line has a matching rhyming line... I found it intriguing that line three and the final line did not!
Tell me, was there a special reason for this?
My mind kept going back, thinking:
"Rivers whisper secrets, divine ~"
(Or something similar)
That would leave your final line as the only unrhymed line, which seems fitting!
(You know I'm always thinking when I read your work!)
Just riffing, my friend.
:)
Karenina
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
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I do enjoy a well-written acrostic! Yours flows so well and never seems to be "reaching" for a word to fit the next needed letter in your words. ALMOST every line has a matching rhyming line... I found it intriguing that line three and the final line did not!
Tell me, was there a special reason for this?
My mind kept going back, thinking:
"Rivers whisper secrets, divine ~"
(Or something similar)
That would leave your final line as the only unrhymed line, which seems fitting!
(You know I'm always thinking when I read your work!)
Just riffing, my friend.
:)
Karenina
Comment Written 26-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
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Karen,
Thank you again for your insightful review. the missing rhyme in line 3 was a easy miss. But thanks to your eagle eye and excellent suggestion it has been revised as follows:
Rivers whisper our secrets, divine.
All the best,
Eugene
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Comment from Shirley Ann Bunyan
This is such a beautiful love poem. Written in acrostic form it unfolds using charming statements of an enduring love between two people with carefully chosen and effective rhymes. Excellent. Well done x
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This is such a beautiful love poem. Written in acrostic form it unfolds using charming statements of an enduring love between two people with carefully chosen and effective rhymes. Excellent. Well done x
Comment Written 19-Oct-2024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a warm romantic post and I enjoyed your loving words of togetherness and long lasting love here. We all hope that our love lasts forever, love Dolly x
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This is a warm romantic post and I enjoyed your loving words of togetherness and long lasting love here. We all hope that our love lasts forever, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Oct-2024