Time Shall Betray Us All
A Quatern21 total reviews
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I enjoyed reading your poem. I look at the mirror and I don't look like the same person. Gray hair, more weight. The poem has a good description of getting older. Well written.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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I enjoyed reading your poem. I look at the mirror and I don't look like the same person. Gray hair, more weight. The poem has a good description of getting older. Well written.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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I am delighted you enjoyed my poem, Brenda, and appreciate the praise. Rod
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
No gentle reminder here - your poem tells it like it is! Time is, indeed, a cruel master, leaving wrinkles, weakness, and arthritic pain, but with faith, we look forward one day to perfect bodies in heaven!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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No gentle reminder here - your poem tells it like it is! Time is, indeed, a cruel master, leaving wrinkles, weakness, and arthritic pain, but with faith, we look forward one day to perfect bodies in heaven!
Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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Oh, Verna, you have sermonized the theme of my poem beautifully and added your own benediction. Many thanks! Rod
Comment from cupa tea
I think I'm at this point in your poem and my life.
We'll join a gym to keep in shape,
to tone our muscles, hone the waist.
Time shall betray us all some day.
Our faith in workouts all misplaced.
I think you hit the nail on the head with this poem. Very well thought out and wrote.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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I think I'm at this point in your poem and my life.
We'll join a gym to keep in shape,
to tone our muscles, hone the waist.
Time shall betray us all some day.
Our faith in workouts all misplaced.
I think you hit the nail on the head with this poem. Very well thought out and wrote.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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I hope you have not lost your faith in work-outs. "Keep moving" has become my creed at the gym. Many thanks for your kind praise of my Quatern. Rod
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I go to the gym for exercise and to keep my old body moving. So, nope I go with faith and enjoy myself.
Comment from bob cullen
How true this is. But there is another side to that coin.
Hardship can belt us in the face
A fall can mean we wear a brace
But hope allows us to explore
Things we never thought before
Giving up ain't how to win
Have a plan 'fore you begin
Don't give in there's one sure choice
In your mind, find your voice
It's not easy, I'm not saying that
This world is round, it's sure ain't flat
Science discovers more each day
An' maybe, just maybe, God leads the way
I'm not sayin' we all need to change
An' I'm not plannin' to rearrange
But now an' then, I start to search
Think tonight, I might go to Church.
Perhaps, that just might be a good beginning.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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How true this is. But there is another side to that coin.
Hardship can belt us in the face
A fall can mean we wear a brace
But hope allows us to explore
Things we never thought before
Giving up ain't how to win
Have a plan 'fore you begin
Don't give in there's one sure choice
In your mind, find your voice
It's not easy, I'm not saying that
This world is round, it's sure ain't flat
Science discovers more each day
An' maybe, just maybe, God leads the way
I'm not sayin' we all need to change
An' I'm not plannin' to rearrange
But now an' then, I start to search
Think tonight, I might go to Church.
Perhaps, that just might be a good beginning.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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Wow! I have never had a reviewer give me his poem as feedback. I like yours, Bob. Many thanks for sharing mine. Rod
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Your poem is a very good example of betrayal. As I wrote in a poem several years ago, "time is not our master, it's our measure." Of all the things we have in life to overcome, time is one we are unable to conquer. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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Your poem is a very good example of betrayal. As I wrote in a poem several years ago, "time is not our master, it's our measure." Of all the things we have in life to overcome, time is one we are unable to conquer. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 15-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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Thank you very much, Robert, for the encouraging review of my quatern.
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You're welcome.
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You're welcome.
Comment from lancellot
This is very good. You have chosen a different poetic format than the other entries. I think that choice and the relatable theme sets your poem apart from the others. This should do very well.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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This is very good. You have chosen a different poetic format than the other entries. I think that choice and the relatable theme sets your poem apart from the others. This should do very well.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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I am delighted you like my approach to this theme, lancellot. Many thanks for your kind praise.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
an epic poem about getting old. something that happens to us all. I can relate as I am turning 69 in two weeks
I like the last stanza the best
And Time's sadistic, very cruel.
Our joints and bones become her prey;
and often memories are robbed.
Time shall betray us all some day.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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an epic poem about getting old. something that happens to us all. I can relate as I am turning 69 in two weeks
I like the last stanza the best
And Time's sadistic, very cruel.
Our joints and bones become her prey;
and often memories are robbed.
Time shall betray us all some day.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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Thank you very much, Jake. Just think young and you will remain so.
Comment from Begin Again
Time marches forward with its own set of rules and regardless of how we try to slow the clock or change the rules, time will run out for all of us. Mine is already ticking down.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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Time marches forward with its own set of rules and regardless of how we try to slow the clock or change the rules, time will run out for all of us. Mine is already ticking down.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 15-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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You phrase this truth very well, Carol. My clock is ticking down too. Many thanks for sharing my poem.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We battler agains the signs of ageing, but we will not win the war, but we can make progress and retain a few small wins along the way. Your poem is well rhymed and metered and I adored the sentiment here, a skilful post and a joy to read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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We battler agains the signs of ageing, but we will not win the war, but we can make progress and retain a few small wins along the way. Your poem is well rhymed and metered and I adored the sentiment here, a skilful post and a joy to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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Thank you very much, Dolly, for the marvelous review.
Comment from June Sargent
Ain't that the ugly truth. But, we can't just let Time or the passage of time just roll over us. These muscles can be toned only to a point nowadays. And the old bones ache no matter what I do . But I dread the day when I don't feel anything anymore. So, Time can take a back seat- for now.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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Ain't that the ugly truth. But, we can't just let Time or the passage of time just roll over us. These muscles can be toned only to a point nowadays. And the old bones ache no matter what I do . But I dread the day when I don't feel anything anymore. So, Time can take a back seat- for now.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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My third attempt to reply. Thank you very much, June.