A beautiful Night
Peacefulness4 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao!
I live near a pine forest and chestnut woods so your poem speaks to me.
I could never live in a city along side all that deafening noise, traffic fumes, and general bad odor.
I have cool crystal clear stream I can dip my feet in come Summer , the air is clean and I have birds greeting me with their merry song at dawn.
When I am in Mother Nature's embrace, I feel at peace and I can hear my own thoughts and speak to God.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Ciao!
I live near a pine forest and chestnut woods so your poem speaks to me.
I could never live in a city along side all that deafening noise, traffic fumes, and general bad odor.
I have cool crystal clear stream I can dip my feet in come Summer , the air is clean and I have birds greeting me with their merry song at dawn.
When I am in Mother Nature's embrace, I feel at peace and I can hear my own thoughts and speak to God.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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That is awesome sounds like a wonderful peaceful place. Thanks for the visual and the feedback. Best wishes
Comment from Jewell Hermann
Overall good poem
Ways it could be improved.
1. The line (And other sounds) takes me out of the poem, is unnaasary and implies that
Stars make sounds.
2.All I know about the speakers immediate surroundings is that theirs gress, so considering adding more visual description to the poem to paint a better picture in head of the reader.
3.Something feels off about the last 4 lines of the poem, maybe it could be changed to (maybe you to will find your soul at ease, and you're peace amongst nature.
My favorite lines in the poem are
(The hustle bustle of daily life can steal your peace and ruin your Nights).
Again the poem is good but with some changes it could be great.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Overall good poem
Ways it could be improved.
1. The line (And other sounds) takes me out of the poem, is unnaasary and implies that
Stars make sounds.
2.All I know about the speakers immediate surroundings is that theirs gress, so considering adding more visual description to the poem to paint a better picture in head of the reader.
3.Something feels off about the last 4 lines of the poem, maybe it could be changed to (maybe you to will find your soul at ease, and you're peace amongst nature.
My favorite lines in the poem are
(The hustle bustle of daily life can steal your peace and ruin your Nights).
Again the poem is good but with some changes it could be great.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Thank you. I appreciate the insight and feedback. Best of Wishes to you.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really enjoyed your poem! You do such a wonderful job of showing a tranquil country night. I love how you showed that as well as teh hustle and bustle of daily life. For me this poem felt like a reminder to find moments of peace. Your message about communing with nature and God is so touching. Keep up the wonderful work!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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I really enjoyed your poem! You do such a wonderful job of showing a tranquil country night. I love how you showed that as well as teh hustle and bustle of daily life. For me this poem felt like a reminder to find moments of peace. Your message about communing with nature and God is so touching. Keep up the wonderful work!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much. I really am thankful that you enjoyed it and took something from it. I wish the very best to you.
Comment from F. William Lester
A beautiful poem. It's simple thoughts and structure emphasize its message. A couple of minor items: I believe "souls" should be "soul's" since it's a contraction of "soul is". The other item is the line beginning with "The hustle and bustle...", which according to your poem's structure, should be broken into two lines. This may be a quirk of the system. Nice work. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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A beautiful poem. It's simple thoughts and structure emphasize its message. A couple of minor items: I believe "souls" should be "soul's" since it's a contraction of "soul is". The other item is the line beginning with "The hustle and bustle...", which according to your poem's structure, should be broken into two lines. This may be a quirk of the system. Nice work. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Thank you I appreciate the insight and the kind words Best Wishes
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You're very welcome.