Lolita La Lota
She's a gal!5 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Brilliant Shirley! Congrats on your win! You've nailed it again and this is absolutely hilarious! I love her and each stanza endears her to me more:)) This is deserving of a 6 at the very least and yet again sadly I have none. The only slightest of quibbles is the last line which slightly fades as it's lacking one syllable. Perhaps "I (still) haven't had my go yet." Take care Debbie xx
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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Brilliant Shirley! Congrats on your win! You've nailed it again and this is absolutely hilarious! I love her and each stanza endears her to me more:)) This is deserving of a 6 at the very least and yet again sadly I have none. The only slightest of quibbles is the last line which slightly fades as it's lacking one syllable. Perhaps "I (still) haven't had my go yet." Take care Debbie xx
Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Debbie. I wasn't sure how this would go down in a predominantly American arena. Must have been the pidgeon!!!
Comment from F. William Lester
I have to give this a six just for the humor. I laughed through the entire poem. Great work, and the poetry is good too. Nicely done. The poetry and humor went together perfectly. Thanks for sharing it and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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I have to give this a six just for the humor. I laughed through the entire poem. Great work, and the poetry is good too. Nicely done. The poetry and humor went together perfectly. Thanks for sharing it and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Haha Thank you, William. I'm glad it gave you a laugh. Cheers for the sixer!
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You're very welcome.
Comment from EeanBlack
You were the mean girl at primary. Now you are the mean girl at Fanstory. Her arse in a tight pair of leggings. Best ever! Here in the US, we are too prissy to write seriously funny stuff like this. But, I'm learning from some of the best. Oh, and you. LOL. You are one of the best.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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You were the mean girl at primary. Now you are the mean girl at Fanstory. Her arse in a tight pair of leggings. Best ever! Here in the US, we are too prissy to write seriously funny stuff like this. But, I'm learning from some of the best. Oh, and you. LOL. You are one of the best.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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I thought you might like Lolita!
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I did. I did.
Comment from ESOSTINE
Lolita La Lota loitered around the world drinking and having fun until her last breath. Lolita's character was in deed a funny one. The poem is vividly presented with image of Lolita stamped on my eyes. Thanks for sharing your creative fun poem. Well done, and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Lolita La Lota loitered around the world drinking and having fun until her last breath. Lolita's character was in deed a funny one. The poem is vividly presented with image of Lolita stamped on my eyes. Thanks for sharing your creative fun poem. Well done, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Esotine. I'm glad you 'got' the humour!
Comment from patcelaw
This is well written for the no restrictions poetry contest and I wish you the very best in the contest. May you have a lovely weekend and may God bless your writing. Patricia.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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This is well written for the no restrictions poetry contest and I wish you the very best in the contest. May you have a lovely weekend and may God bless your writing. Patricia.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Pat.