Crossing the River Styx
A poem of faith.33 total reviews
Comment from victortouche
Holy Commoley Batman is this good. I am at a jaw dropping moment. Seriously.
I SELDOM read something this good. (unless I wrote it, of course) lol
Very very well done.
Doug
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2024
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Holy Commoley Batman is this good. I am at a jaw dropping moment. Seriously.
I SELDOM read something this good. (unless I wrote it, of course) lol
Very very well done.
Doug
Comment Written 27-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Doug, the six was totally unexpected and thank you also for the generous comments.
Comment from Senyai
Hi DonandVicki,
Wonderful poem with a most delightful last line! Inspired writing that took the reader on the boat ride to the most dreadful place of all, but the all encompassing power of
God transcends to all parts of the known world. The River Styx included... and down to the Underworld itself.
Congratulations on your win, well deserved for such inspired writing!
Stay well,
Senyai
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2024
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Hi DonandVicki,
Wonderful poem with a most delightful last line! Inspired writing that took the reader on the boat ride to the most dreadful place of all, but the all encompassing power of
God transcends to all parts of the known world. The River Styx included... and down to the Underworld itself.
Congratulations on your win, well deserved for such inspired writing!
Stay well,
Senyai
Comment Written 25-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2024
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You are so very generous, Senyai
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is a good poem. It is thoughtful and concise. It is definitely worthy of the prize it won for its use of language. Also the ending is fantastic.
Little fixes or suggestions on fixes in punctuation, in case other reviewers did not point them out:
Yet in his latter days
he found a narrower way,
he thought it best taken
before it became too late.
I suggest using a semi-colon instead of a comma after the word way; you have two independent clauses here.
At long last he finally arrived
at a destination we all will find,
the ominous river Styx.
where he met a boatman there.
I suggest replacing the period after Styx with a comma.
Boarding the skiff
the boatman asked:
"Are you afraid of what's
on the other side?"
I suggest inserting a comma after the word skiff.
"Why should I be afraid?"
The weary traveler asked,
I would un-capitalize The and put a period after asked.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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This is a good poem. It is thoughtful and concise. It is definitely worthy of the prize it won for its use of language. Also the ending is fantastic.
Little fixes or suggestions on fixes in punctuation, in case other reviewers did not point them out:
Yet in his latter days
he found a narrower way,
he thought it best taken
before it became too late.
I suggest using a semi-colon instead of a comma after the word way; you have two independent clauses here.
At long last he finally arrived
at a destination we all will find,
the ominous river Styx.
where he met a boatman there.
I suggest replacing the period after Styx with a comma.
Boarding the skiff
the boatman asked:
"Are you afraid of what's
on the other side?"
I suggest inserting a comma after the word skiff.
"Why should I be afraid?"
The weary traveler asked,
I would un-capitalize The and put a period after asked.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello, DonandVicki!
Congratulations on your exceptional free verse poetic offering.
As a former teacher of mythology, I surely enjoyed your referencing the "River Styx," and your ending was sublime.
Thank you for sharing!
And Welcome Back!
diane
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Hello, DonandVicki!
Congratulations on your exceptional free verse poetic offering.
As a former teacher of mythology, I surely enjoyed your referencing the "River Styx," and your ending was sublime.
Thank you for sharing!
And Welcome Back!
diane
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Thank you Diane so very much for the kind and generous review. It is sooo good to be back. Don
Comment from Gayla putnam
A beautiful ending and a glance at the other side. Congratulations on your win. I could almost feel the cold mist and see the boatman as he rowed across the river Styx. gayla
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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A beautiful ending and a glance at the other side. Congratulations on your win. I could almost feel the cold mist and see the boatman as he rowed across the river Styx. gayla
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Thank you so very much for the kind and generous review. Don
Comment from Ric Myworld
I don't know much about or read a lot of poetry, but sometimes, I run across one that just sort of speaks to me and are a real pleasure to read. Thanks for for sharing and congratulations on your big blue ribbon! And it's also nice to see names I haven't seen in a while, and who I've always enjoyed reading.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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I don't know much about or read a lot of poetry, but sometimes, I run across one that just sort of speaks to me and are a real pleasure to read. Thanks for for sharing and congratulations on your big blue ribbon! And it's also nice to see names I haven't seen in a while, and who I've always enjoyed reading.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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It is good to be back, and thank you for the review and complment.
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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I am so very humbled, you vote of confidence has brought poetic tears to my eyes. Don
Comment from Begin Again
Awesome! Yes, in the end when our time comes, either we have accepted the word of the Lord or we haven't, but if we have, there will be no fear. Well written. Thank you for sharing.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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Awesome! Yes, in the end when our time comes, either we have accepted the word of the Lord or we haven't, but if we have, there will be no fear. Well written. Thank you for sharing.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 15-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much Carol.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and presentation.
-A well written poem with effective imagery.
-A very good opening line including alliteration.
-The traveler found a better way and
arrived at "the river Styx."
-Effective use of dialogue and questions
between boatman and traveler.
-A very good opening ended conclusion.
-A very good entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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-Very nice artwork and presentation.
-A well written poem with effective imagery.
-A very good opening line including alliteration.
-The traveler found a better way and
arrived at "the river Styx."
-Effective use of dialogue and questions
between boatman and traveler.
-A very good opening ended conclusion.
-A very good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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Thank you so very much for the kind review.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from nomi338
This reminds me of a sermon I once heard delivered by Aretha Franklin's father. It involves a train caught up in a dangerous storm. The passengers were in fear of being injured or possibly even losing their lives. A little girl was on the floor playing, a passenger said why are you not afraid? The little girl said, "My father is driving this train and he knows I am on board. So I am not afraid." Now, I ask you, is that not inspiring?
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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This reminds me of a sermon I once heard delivered by Aretha Franklin's father. It involves a train caught up in a dangerous storm. The passengers were in fear of being injured or possibly even losing their lives. A little girl was on the floor playing, a passenger said why are you not afraid? The little girl said, "My father is driving this train and he knows I am on board. So I am not afraid." Now, I ask you, is that not inspiring?
Comment Written 15-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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Truly inspiring Nomi. Worthy of a short story or poem in it's self.
