Ill Met On A Western Hillside
entry for co-existing worlds14 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery writer, you now have 16 votes.
Very inventive and entertaining .
You nicely combined two very different worlds/times:
the past ( western)
and the future( where time travel is possible).
Your ending made me think of the scene where Indian Jones ( who has a pistol like those in the far west ) and the Arab swordsman who wields his weapon and Indy shoots him.
Anyway , I love films where main characters of the past find themselves in the future.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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Ciao mystery writer, you now have 16 votes.
Very inventive and entertaining .
You nicely combined two very different worlds/times:
the past ( western)
and the future( where time travel is possible).
Your ending made me think of the scene where Indian Jones ( who has a pistol like those in the far west ) and the Arab swordsman who wields his weapon and Indy shoots him.
Anyway , I love films where main characters of the past find themselves in the future.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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Many thanks, pardner!
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Many thanks and may all your trails be happy ones!
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Thank you!😐
Congratulations on your well deserved win!🥇
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Thank you so much for your kindness!
Comment from TPAC
A strange story, detailing an encounter, loving the cross mix of conceptions: facing this union. It drifts, a little, holding tight on defining each sequence; between these two parties: that occurred
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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A strange story, detailing an encounter, loving the cross mix of conceptions: facing this union. It drifts, a little, holding tight on defining each sequence; between these two parties: that occurred
Comment Written 12-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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Things like that occur all the time on my trails!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well done.
...and saw you, so I called you here- You're in the future!" - Not sure about the dash. With it, You're shouldn't be capitalized.
But why did Clint Eastwood kill the doctor?
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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Well done.
...and saw you, so I called you here- You're in the future!" - Not sure about the dash. With it, You're shouldn't be capitalized.
But why did Clint Eastwood kill the doctor?
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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He killed him because he saw a man with a stethoscope. And when man with a rifle sees a man with a stethoscope...
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I've not heard of that saying before, but I know when the men in white come looking for you then you're in trouble. A fun post and I was entertained here, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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I've not heard of that saying before, but I know when the men in white come looking for you then you're in trouble. A fun post and I was entertained here, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 12-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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Clint Eastwood spoke it, about when a man with a pistol sees a man with a rifle
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Well you've certainly intermingled two worlds here and even I wasn't sure of which world I was in. Your story is original and well structured to fit the brief. And the punch-line is a definite winner! Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Well you've certainly intermingled two worlds here and even I wasn't sure of which world I was in. Your story is original and well structured to fit the brief. And the punch-line is a definite winner! Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 11-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Thnk you so much!
Comment from phill doran
Hello Anon,
This is a great piece. If anything, I found it short - I'm not sure if your contest has a word limit, but the juxtaposition of the two characters has great scope for expansion (if you ever wanted to look at that)
Lovely closure too!
I spotted a couple of nit (don't shoot me)
"Aint nobody (I think it is ain't)
" Got me a squaw. (remove the extra space between the " and Got)
But apart from these, I thought this a tight and creative and witty piece.
I wish you well with your continued writing.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Hello Anon,
This is a great piece. If anything, I found it short - I'm not sure if your contest has a word limit, but the juxtaposition of the two characters has great scope for expansion (if you ever wanted to look at that)
Lovely closure too!
I spotted a couple of nit (don't shoot me)
"Aint nobody (I think it is ain't)
" Got me a squaw. (remove the extra space between the " and Got)
But apart from these, I thought this a tight and creative and witty piece.
I wish you well with your continued writing.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 11-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Thanks for the suggestion and thank you for your review.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This creates a bit of a mystery: ""My name is Doctor Winslow Ferguson. And you are the subject of my Probe." "Aint nobody probin' me, Mister. I'm all b'ar and twice as toothy!" I love this phrase: ""You tetched, man?" A funny ending
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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This creates a bit of a mystery: ""My name is Doctor Winslow Ferguson. And you are the subject of my Probe." "Aint nobody probin' me, Mister. I'm all b'ar and twice as toothy!" I love this phrase: ""You tetched, man?" A funny ending
Comment Written 10-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Thank you. I like to do a little humor now and then.
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This day and age it is welcome.
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My main problem is sleep. Too little of it.
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My main problem is sleep. Too little of it.
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Ooof... I awake around between 3 and 4:00 sometimes earlier and then I take a gummy tell me if you have to wait 2 hours, i'm finally I can go to sleep.
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I have been thirsty all through the day. I just can't seem to sleep in some position all night. And I take lasix which makes me urinate all through the night.
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I used ptoducts for the night. I was a teacher 20 some ideas and we had to hold our urine because so I don't know if that's why but I have overactive bladder. It is kind of messy as you probably know for the night. Lots of towels underneathAnd I also am using those chucks.
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Wow! That really describes my nights now!
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you too? If I've gotten enough towels & chucks down...everything stays dry. Those waterproof underwear from tena are very secure feeling
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The waterproof ones don't fit me well, but normal boxers and pads still end up drenched. Sorry to be talking like this to a lady.
Comment from zanya
Yes interesting encounter here -some great dialogue here that really engages the reader - nice succinct exchanges - no need for long speeches - is that really an old adage?? Haven't got 6 left but its a 6 in my estimation.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Yes interesting encounter here -some great dialogue here that really engages the reader - nice succinct exchanges - no need for long speeches - is that really an old adage?? Haven't got 6 left but its a 6 in my estimation.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your kind words which I relish even more than stars.
Comment from royowen
Heh heh, oh yes, the man with the stethoscope doesn't stand a chance against the man with the rifle, but then what sliding door did he walk through! Beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Heh heh, oh yes, the man with the stethoscope doesn't stand a chance against the man with the rifle, but then what sliding door did he walk through! Beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 10-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Thank you@! I just like to do a little inoffensive humor now and then.
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Well done
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Many thanks
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
You certainly achieved the objective of merging Co-Existing Worlds. It took me a minute, but I finally realized the direction of the story. I was a bit shocked by the ending but that brought the story to a bit of a surprising ending. Who thought Clint Eastwood would be the bad guy. Very enjoyable read with a surprise ending. Good luck in the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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You certainly achieved the objective of merging Co-Existing Worlds. It took me a minute, but I finally realized the direction of the story. I was a bit shocked by the ending but that brought the story to a bit of a surprising ending. Who thought Clint Eastwood would be the bad guy. Very enjoyable read with a surprise ending. Good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 10-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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I recently viewed the movie again, so it was fresh in my mind.
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