A Fishy Tale
Attic entry for the Picture This club31 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Clever use of numbers. This has a nice tongue-in-cheek humor to it. Your walls probably looked a little fishy also. This is a clever fish story. It's good you made it out alive.
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Clever use of numbers. This has a nice tongue-in-cheek humor to it. Your walls probably looked a little fishy also. This is a clever fish story. It's good you made it out alive.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2024
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Jim,
I enjoyed your poem! Imagine the thought process of eating human flesh... cannibalism! The first time I ran across the idea was when I read Robinson Crusoe. A native escaped being killed and eaten by cannibals, and he was taken in by Crusoe who named him "Friday". The novel was written by Daniel Defoe, and published in 1719.
I remember when the soccer team from Uruguay crashed in the Andes in 1972. Forty-five men with nothing to eat. Two months in the frozen mountains, and they ventured into cannibalism. The problem was that many of the dead bodies were teammates or family members.
It's a terrible thing, and not easy to live with, I would assume.
I really liked the beginning of your poem,
"In my attic
Is a haddock" ... love the near-rhyme of "attic/haddock"!
Quite a story in that lifeboat!
Nicely penned!
Cheers,
Kimbob
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Hi Jim,
I enjoyed your poem! Imagine the thought process of eating human flesh... cannibalism! The first time I ran across the idea was when I read Robinson Crusoe. A native escaped being killed and eaten by cannibals, and he was taken in by Crusoe who named him "Friday". The novel was written by Daniel Defoe, and published in 1719.
I remember when the soccer team from Uruguay crashed in the Andes in 1972. Forty-five men with nothing to eat. Two months in the frozen mountains, and they ventured into cannibalism. The problem was that many of the dead bodies were teammates or family members.
It's a terrible thing, and not easy to live with, I would assume.
I really liked the beginning of your poem,
"In my attic
Is a haddock" ... love the near-rhyme of "attic/haddock"!
Quite a story in that lifeboat!
Nicely penned!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 08-Oct-2024
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, A Fishy Tale, presented with thirty-two rhyming couplets, explains why there is a fish in the man's attic. This is not the common fish tail, but one that contains murder and a possible exaggeration of boat space.
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This poem, A Fishy Tale, presented with thirty-two rhyming couplets, explains why there is a fish in the man's attic. This is not the common fish tail, but one that contains murder and a possible exaggeration of boat space.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2024
Comment from Nicki.B
I really enjoyed this story as I read through the stanzas I was giggling away! What a terrible boat trip they had, but you brought great humour through it. My favourite has to be Honest Halbert who even love his mother in law, hilarious!
Well done,
Best wishes
Nicki
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I really enjoyed this story as I read through the stanzas I was giggling away! What a terrible boat trip they had, but you brought great humour through it. My favourite has to be Honest Halbert who even love his mother in law, hilarious!
Well done,
Best wishes
Nicki
Comment Written 08-Oct-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Before I played the video, Jim, I'd been thinking that your magnum opus verse deserves to be put to music. It's a bizarre but very enjoyable tale of 15 men going fishing, meeting some unfortunate ends. I like the circular nature of the story back to the attic. And there's nothing like a celebratory stuffed tomato! Well done, Jim. My heads spinning a bit but I found one edit:
Tried to use it as (as) spoon
Take care Debbie
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Before I played the video, Jim, I'd been thinking that your magnum opus verse deserves to be put to music. It's a bizarre but very enjoyable tale of 15 men going fishing, meeting some unfortunate ends. I like the circular nature of the story back to the attic. And there's nothing like a celebratory stuffed tomato! Well done, Jim. My heads spinning a bit but I found one edit:
Tried to use it as (as) spoon
Take care Debbie
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
Comment from judiverse
A whale of a tale. Reminds me of some of my father-in-law's exploits while fishing with his buddies in Canada. He did come back with a stuffed and mounted fish, which I later discovered among my late husband's collection of oddities. I enjoyed the way you told your story. You did a great job of describing the other men and the plight of hunger. Driven to cannibalism! Great job with the rhyme. Great entry for the club. judi
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A whale of a tale. Reminds me of some of my father-in-law's exploits while fishing with his buddies in Canada. He did come back with a stuffed and mounted fish, which I later discovered among my late husband's collection of oddities. I enjoyed the way you told your story. You did a great job of describing the other men and the plight of hunger. Driven to cannibalism! Great job with the rhyme. Great entry for the club. judi
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Jim.
This is quite an interesting tale of a fishing trip. There's quite a lot of action in this single poem. As the names of the fishermen passed by, it was apparent each had a different experience and a different outcome. The story works well as an "action flick." In the end, you win, and you got a stuffed tomato. Good job.
Robert
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Hello Jim.
This is quite an interesting tale of a fishing trip. There's quite a lot of action in this single poem. As the names of the fishermen passed by, it was apparent each had a different experience and a different outcome. The story works well as an "action flick." In the end, you win, and you got a stuffed tomato. Good job.
Robert
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
Comment from Katiemae1977
Thoroughly enjoyed this tale Jim. I had a little trouble with the font you used but I got past it.
Your fishy tale is quite enjoyable. Your rhymes are perfect and the poem flows smoothly.
Take care Jim.
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
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Thoroughly enjoyed this tale Jim. I had a little trouble with the font you used but I got past it.
Your fishy tale is quite enjoyable. Your rhymes are perfect and the poem flows smoothly.
Take care Jim.
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written poem and I enjoyed it very much. I also enjoyed the music video that you put with it. It was a fun thing to listen to. I wish you the very best for the week and may God bless you.
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This is a very well written poem and I enjoyed it very much. I also enjoyed the music video that you put with it. It was a fun thing to listen to. I wish you the very best for the week and may God bless you.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
Comment from talented150
That was a very creative tale with a countdown of crew members who perished. Your rhyming was very unique and very well-done. You started your poem mentioning the Haddock and ended it with the Haddock. Very
nice and humorous!
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That was a very creative tale with a countdown of crew members who perished. Your rhyming was very unique and very well-done. You started your poem mentioning the Haddock and ended it with the Haddock. Very
nice and humorous!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024