Halloween is Here
An eerie Halloween night27 total reviews
Comment from gansach
This is a good entry for the Halloween Poetry competition. It has a great atmosphere and presentation. I like the artwork which is perfect for the subject. It is very descriptive and sensory. Well done!
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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2024
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This is a good entry for the Halloween Poetry competition. It has a great atmosphere and presentation. I like the artwork which is perfect for the subject. It is very descriptive and sensory. Well done!
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Comment Written 27-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2024
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Thank you.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Kahlani,
You've done a fine job of setting the stage for Halloween entertainment.
The lines I especially enjoyed...
"wee creatures scuttle for cover."
and,
"Wolves begin their moonlight howl."
One spot to look at.
"The be(witch)ing hour has arrived,
bringing (witches), demons, and ghosts." ... (instead of using "witch" twice in close quarters, you could use "werewolves", for example)
Suggestions,
"Branches pulled from side to side." ... ( I suggest, to catch some alliteration,
Branches slapping side to side.)
"Brambles strain against the wind." ... ( I suggest, only because you just used "winds" in the previous couplet,
Brambles strain against the breeze.)
"The horizon swallows up the sun
and blankets the earth in darkness." ... ( I suggest,
The horizon swallows the sun,
blanketing the earth in darkness.)
I hope some of this helps. But remember, I'm just a reviewer. You are the author.
Nicely penned for Halloween, my second favorite occasion of the entire year!
Thanks for sharing.
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2024
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Hi Kahlani,
You've done a fine job of setting the stage for Halloween entertainment.
The lines I especially enjoyed...
"wee creatures scuttle for cover."
and,
"Wolves begin their moonlight howl."
One spot to look at.
"The be(witch)ing hour has arrived,
bringing (witches), demons, and ghosts." ... (instead of using "witch" twice in close quarters, you could use "werewolves", for example)
Suggestions,
"Branches pulled from side to side." ... ( I suggest, to catch some alliteration,
Branches slapping side to side.)
"Brambles strain against the wind." ... ( I suggest, only because you just used "winds" in the previous couplet,
Brambles strain against the breeze.)
"The horizon swallows up the sun
and blankets the earth in darkness." ... ( I suggest,
The horizon swallows the sun,
blanketing the earth in darkness.)
I hope some of this helps. But remember, I'm just a reviewer. You are the author.
Nicely penned for Halloween, my second favorite occasion of the entire year!
Thanks for sharing.
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 27-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2024
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Kimbob, thank you so much for your feedback. I always welcome any suggestions. I would love to nominate you but I have no more to give. Sorry.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Kahlani
This is well done free verse in couplets that paints an eerie scene for Halloween. The kind of weather the witches, werewolves and other creatures like. Though I hope it is warm and clear on Halloween so the young ones can enjoy trick or treating.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a good day.
Joan
P S If I haven't told you yet, I have just published a book titled "The Interloper and other stories in prose and poetry", which is available on Amazon.com
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2024
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Hi Kahlani
This is well done free verse in couplets that paints an eerie scene for Halloween. The kind of weather the witches, werewolves and other creatures like. Though I hope it is warm and clear on Halloween so the young ones can enjoy trick or treating.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a good day.
Joan
P S If I haven't told you yet, I have just published a book titled "The Interloper and other stories in prose and poetry", which is available on Amazon.com
Comment Written 27-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Joan. I will check out your book.
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No problem, Kahlani. Thanks for checking out my book.
Joan
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
A bit on the long side for a contest. They usually prefer short and snappy. You do create the Halloween feeling. But, I feel no rhythm in the poetry. The lines do not feel anchored. The font is great. The background would feel creepier if it were darker.
My opinions only. Karen
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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A bit on the long side for a contest. They usually prefer short and snappy. You do create the Halloween feeling. But, I feel no rhythm in the poetry. The lines do not feel anchored. The font is great. The background would feel creepier if it were darker.
My opinions only. Karen
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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I usually prefer to write shorter poems because I think you can say much more with fewer words. This is one of my longer pieces.
Comment from Elizabeth Facey
I do not personally celebrate Halloween, but I think this piece gives the perfect description of what those who are huge fanatics would look for around this season.
I have always as a kid watch all of the Halloween movies. Thank you for sharing. One final thought, I like the font style that you used.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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I do not personally celebrate Halloween, but I think this piece gives the perfect description of what those who are huge fanatics would look for around this season.
I have always as a kid watch all of the Halloween movies. Thank you for sharing. One final thought, I like the font style that you used.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Elizabeth. I don't celebrate Halloween either.
Comment from Gayla putnam
You transported me to a crisp Halloween night. I enjoyed the line, "The horizon swallows up the sun and blankets the earth in darkness." That line evoked so many emotions, of anticipation and even a shiver of fear on All Hallows Eve. The picture added to the mood. gayla
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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You transported me to a crisp Halloween night. I enjoyed the line, "The horizon swallows up the sun and blankets the earth in darkness." That line evoked so many emotions, of anticipation and even a shiver of fear on All Hallows Eve. The picture added to the mood. gayla
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Then I did my job! Thank you for your lovely feedback. I appreciate your time.
Comment from lyenochka
Enjoyed the descriptions in your poem! I could hear the crescendo of sounds starting from the silent 'unsettled dust' to the shifting branches to the "frenzied roar". Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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Enjoyed the descriptions in your poem! I could hear the crescendo of sounds starting from the silent 'unsettled dust' to the shifting branches to the "frenzied roar". Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much for your lovely feedback, Iyenochka. I want to learn from the best, so any critique is welcome. Always.
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I'm really not an expert in Halloween poetry! 😊🎃
Comment from Barry Penfold
You certainly captured the Halloween mood. Great image and descriptions. Thanks for sharing and all the best in the competition. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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You certainly captured the Halloween mood. Great image and descriptions. Thanks for sharing and all the best in the competition. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much for your lovely comments, Barry. I wish you all the best, too.
Comment from mermaids
Your vivid two line verses well describe all the elements of Halloween. A clear feel and picture of Halloween is seen in your words. "Ghostly shadows move across the sky" is my favorite line. It gives an eerie feel to the scene. Excellent use of words and poetic form.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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Your vivid two line verses well describe all the elements of Halloween. A clear feel and picture of Halloween is seen in your words. "Ghostly shadows move across the sky" is my favorite line. It gives an eerie feel to the scene. Excellent use of words and poetic form.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your amazing feedback. It made my day. I wish you all the best in the contests.
Comment from ESOSTINE
You have penned a great poetic work, painting a true and horrifying image of Halloween where darkness, death and destruction gleefully roam the world. I am not a fan of Halloween for I am under the impression that it is a celebration of everything dark and evil in the universe. Thanks for sharing your creative work. Good luck in the contest, dear Kahlani.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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You have penned a great poetic work, painting a true and horrifying image of Halloween where darkness, death and destruction gleefully roam the world. I am not a fan of Halloween for I am under the impression that it is a celebration of everything dark and evil in the universe. Thanks for sharing your creative work. Good luck in the contest, dear Kahlani.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Thank you Esostine. I'm not a fan of Halloween, either.