The Devil's in the Details
Sometimes, less is more3 total reviews
Comment from royowen
My wife studied Goethe as part of her masters degree in languages some years, so she would be totally aware of his literature and I think everyone would know a little about Voltaire, and Luther became the enemy of Rome, rejecting indulgences, and discovered one could be saved by grace through faith, and producing the modern German language, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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My wife studied Goethe as part of her masters degree in languages some years, so she would be totally aware of his literature and I think everyone would know a little about Voltaire, and Luther became the enemy of Rome, rejecting indulgences, and discovered one could be saved by grace through faith, and producing the modern German language, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 19-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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Thanks for the encouraging review :)
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Well done
Comment from lancellot
A very interesting story. I like how the answers went. They didn't tell her about her, they told her about people in general. But I think that last letter, invited her to write her own story, or purpose.
Suggestion:
"My name is Mephisto. You sent for me. I'm here to help you."
-change to-
"You may call me, Mephisto. You sent for me. I here to help."
-In magical world, names have power. A demon or the devil, would never reveal their real name. Also, the devil doesn't lie. (sort of)
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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A very interesting story. I like how the answers went. They didn't tell her about her, they told her about people in general. But I think that last letter, invited her to write her own story, or purpose.
Suggestion:
"My name is Mephisto. You sent for me. I'm here to help you."
-change to-
"You may call me, Mephisto. You sent for me. I here to help."
-In magical world, names have power. A demon or the devil, would never reveal their real name. Also, the devil doesn't lie. (sort of)
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Thanks for the constructive comments and the much-appreciated rating. I think you are probably right regarding demons and their names, in general, but in the story which provided some of the inspiration for this little tale (Goethe's "Faust"), the demon/devil Mephistopholes is not backward about introducing himself by name. So I think, maybe in this case, it's OK.
Comment from phill doran
Hello Anon,
This is a super story. I think you'll be missing a trick if you don't expand upon it at some point: what a great premise. It's Faustian but with a great, great twist. New light through an old window, indeed.
It is well executed, flows really well (too fast - as I say, you could flesh this out if you wished to).
And with some lovely humour (She resisted the urge to write "I hope this finds you well.")
All in all, a very enjoyable read and a great result, using the quote as your springboard. Refreshing and inventive: good traits, both.
I wish you well with this and your continued writing.
cheers
phill
"Knowledge". Mephisto's eyes almost... (full stop should be inside the quote marks)
one letter to each five persons,... (this is a bit awkward - one letter to five people might be plainer.)
After a few minute's thought... (I think this should be minutes' not minute's)
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Hello Anon,
This is a super story. I think you'll be missing a trick if you don't expand upon it at some point: what a great premise. It's Faustian but with a great, great twist. New light through an old window, indeed.
It is well executed, flows really well (too fast - as I say, you could flesh this out if you wished to).
And with some lovely humour (She resisted the urge to write "I hope this finds you well.")
All in all, a very enjoyable read and a great result, using the quote as your springboard. Refreshing and inventive: good traits, both.
I wish you well with this and your continued writing.
cheers
phill
"Knowledge". Mephisto's eyes almost... (full stop should be inside the quote marks)
one letter to each five persons,... (this is a bit awkward - one letter to five people might be plainer.)
After a few minute's thought... (I think this should be minutes' not minute's)
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Thanks so much for your lovely comments, the good wishes and the delightful rating. I have looked at the glitches you brought forward, and agree with you on every point. I've made the changes required.
Much appreciate you taking the time to review.
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Also, just wanted to let you know I'll be sending a reviewer vote your way for your helpful punctuation fixes. I won't do it before the contest is over, as I think that might break the rules by revealing authorship. Cheers.
