Lady Luck
Haiku poem - Ladybird on a leaf5 total reviews
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Congrats on your first post! It's a beautiful haiku! The inclusion of the ladybird in the final line adds a wonderful touch. For me your poem shares a sense of wonder for nature. Your ability to share so much emotion and imagery in 17 syllables is impressive. It leaves me with a warm feeling and an appreciation in the beauty in small moments. Beautifully done!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Congrats on your first post! It's a beautiful haiku! The inclusion of the ladybird in the final line adds a wonderful touch. For me your poem shares a sense of wonder for nature. Your ability to share so much emotion and imagery in 17 syllables is impressive. It leaves me with a warm feeling and an appreciation in the beauty in small moments. Beautifully done!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your lovely words.
Comment from royowen
Oh yes a most attractive creature, a boon to the human eye and a favourite to humans, as is the butterfly, but a mortal enemy to tha aphid, beautifully written and composed, welcome to fanstory, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Oh yes a most attractive creature, a boon to the human eye and a favourite to humans, as is the butterfly, but a mortal enemy to tha aphid, beautifully written and composed, welcome to fanstory, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your poetic words. Are you Australian?
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I am indeed
Comment from NanaGaye
I love Lady Birds and Haiku. Can you check line two I think it only has six syllabi and should be seven. I'm no expert but I heard that writers should avoid using two many additives All the best NanaGaye
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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I love Lady Birds and Haiku. Can you check line two I think it only has six syllabi and should be seven. I'm no expert but I heard that writers should avoid using two many additives All the best NanaGaye
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Thank you, NanaGaye. I double-checked that foliage has three syllables.
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Yes you are right
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ladybirds bring the colour and they are delightful beetles and I enjoyed your personification of their magic here, I also welcome you to the Fanstory community, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Ladybirds bring the colour and they are delightful beetles and I enjoyed your personification of their magic here, I also welcome you to the Fanstory community, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your lovely words, Dolly.
Comment from Todd Bourgeois
Wow! That's powerful. Right from the first word through to the last. Well done! You actually had me looking up the word "tawny". I love that. Way to make a statement on your first post. Welcome. Great job!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Wow! That's powerful. Right from the first word through to the last. Well done! You actually had me looking up the word "tawny". I love that. Way to make a statement on your first post. Welcome. Great job!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your kind words.
