Real Poetry
Off and On rhyme contest entry17 total reviews
Comment from gansach
This is a great entry for the Off and On rhyme writing prompt competition. It has a wonderful presentation and I like the change in font to emphasize the smooth, flowing rhymed stanzas against the plain, rough unrhymed one. Well done!
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2024
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This is a great entry for the Off and On rhyme writing prompt competition. It has a wonderful presentation and I like the change in font to emphasize the smooth, flowing rhymed stanzas against the plain, rough unrhymed one. Well done!
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your complimentary comments. John
Comment from mermaids
I like the comparison of poetry to fine wine, it is a vivid image that appeals to the senses. Excellent use of words, alternating verses of rhyme and non-rhyme. You have created a poem that brings forth a good feeling for a poem that rhymes.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2024
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I like the comparison of poetry to fine wine, it is a vivid image that appeals to the senses. Excellent use of words, alternating verses of rhyme and non-rhyme. You have created a poem that brings forth a good feeling for a poem that rhymes.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2024
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Thank you. I appreciate your review and complimentary comments. John
Comment from Wendy G
An excellent poem, with a super presentation, and meaningful words. Your topic lends itself to what you say about poets who write "junk" with no rhyme. Cleverly done. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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An excellent poem, with a super presentation, and meaningful words. Your topic lends itself to what you say about poets who write "junk" with no rhyme. Cleverly done. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 29-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your kind words and best wishes.
Comment from F. William Lester
Well said. I really like the stark difference between the rhyming and non-rhyming stanzas. It emphasizes your disapproval/dislike of the more eccentric forms of poetry. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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Well said. I really like the stark difference between the rhyming and non-rhyming stanzas. It emphasizes your disapproval/dislike of the more eccentric forms of poetry. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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Actually, I wrote it with a bit of sarcasm and more than a touch of envy for those who can put free verse masterpieces together. I appreciate your kind words and best wishes. From one veteran to another, thank you.
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My pleasure. Have a wonderful day. Which branch? I'm Air Force. Retired in '91.
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Army. Drafted in '68 for 2 years. Combat Engineer in Vietnam.
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I was a FAC '71-'72. My son is a Combat Engineer. Thanks for your service.
Comment from June Sargent
I know where you're coming from. I find free verse difficult to write and often difficult to understand. I much prefer rhythm and rhyme. Your poem highlights both forms in an amusing, but accurate way.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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I know where you're coming from. I find free verse difficult to write and often difficult to understand. I much prefer rhythm and rhyme. Your poem highlights both forms in an amusing, but accurate way.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and presentation.
-I like how you used different fonts
for the two styles of poetry.
-I have never tried free verse,
but you did an excellent job with both.
-The interesting thing is seeing the contrast.
-Your poetry flows with beautiful imagery
with "words that sing." I also like the
sailboat comparison.
-The free verse is done well, and it shows
the difference in the two styles very well,
and I agree with your last line in that verse.
-An excellent concluding verse with
more great images like "graceful lines" and
the final two lines, as well.
-This is an excellent entry; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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-Very nice artwork and presentation.
-I like how you used different fonts
for the two styles of poetry.
-I have never tried free verse,
but you did an excellent job with both.
-The interesting thing is seeing the contrast.
-Your poetry flows with beautiful imagery
with "words that sing." I also like the
sailboat comparison.
-The free verse is done well, and it shows
the difference in the two styles very well,
and I agree with your last line in that verse.
-An excellent concluding verse with
more great images like "graceful lines" and
the final two lines, as well.
-This is an excellent entry; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Pam. You have made a most thorough and descriptive review of my poem. I appreciate the nice compliments and especially the sixth star. Thanks too for the good luck wish.
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars, review, and good wishes.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
You are a BRILLIANT poet, and this poem is exceptional. You really answered the prompt with panache and aplomb. I fully expect to see this masterpiece in the Winner's Circle. Best of luck to you!!
xoxox
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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You are a BRILLIANT poet, and this poem is exceptional. You really answered the prompt with panache and aplomb. I fully expect to see this masterpiece in the Winner's Circle. Best of luck to you!!
xoxox
Comment Written 29-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Rachelle. All my life I've striven to be considered panache and aplomb, and, low and behold, here I am! I had to, however, scurry to the dictionary to find the meaning of both. I appreciate your "BRILLIANT" review and good luck wish.
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Hahahaha. Alright, you little sassy thing!! Now I want you to look up "Eddie Haskell from Leave It to Beaver." xoxo
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Ahhh!...the "Eddie Haskel Effect."
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Yep!! Thank you, Mrs. Cleaver. You're looking beautiful today in that lovely shade of green...
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On occasion, I have to go back and read some of your whacky, but endearing, reviews. They're my favorites. They always make me laugh out loud, or in the nouveau jargon of the present day social media, "lol." Keep in touch...
Eddie
Comment from tempeste
Ciao!
When I subscribed I was given the title of poet. This still makes me laugh cause I just dabble.
Finding the right artwork to showcase my work is as important to me as the poem itself.
True poets want to move hearts solely with words and not with the help of an eye catching photo.
That said, I suppose your second stanza refers to some poets who win in the booth despite their work is not up to scratch.
Unfair play, favouritism or just simply what might appeal to one member may not appeal to another?
I personally appreciate the effort some members make to present their poem.
I love your presentation, the colour combination and the beautiful font that flows just like true poetry should.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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Ciao!
When I subscribed I was given the title of poet. This still makes me laugh cause I just dabble.
Finding the right artwork to showcase my work is as important to me as the poem itself.
True poets want to move hearts solely with words and not with the help of an eye catching photo.
That said, I suppose your second stanza refers to some poets who win in the booth despite their work is not up to scratch.
Unfair play, favouritism or just simply what might appeal to one member may not appeal to another?
I personally appreciate the effort some members make to present their poem.
I love your presentation, the colour combination and the beautiful font that flows just like true poetry should.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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I totally agree with you, Tempeste. I'm just a dabbler in poetry myself. I wrote this poem with a modicum of sarcasm and a boatload of envy for those true poets who can switch from rhyme to free verse like changing shirts. Likewise, I have to rely on "eye-catching" photos to get people to notice my work. Unfortunately, I don't have that many fans on this site who review all my posts. I really appreciate your honest exchange and kind comments. Thank you.
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Ciao , you now have 6 votes
Best of luck!🍀
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
I agree with much of what your poem says. I'm not big on a lot of free verse style poetry although I am finding an appreciation for Haiku and similar styles. Your poem was smooth flowing and had nice rhymes. Good job.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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I agree with much of what your poem says. I'm not big on a lot of free verse style poetry although I am finding an appreciation for Haiku and similar styles. Your poem was smooth flowing and had nice rhymes. Good job.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Marilyn. I appreciate your review and kind comments.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I'm just learning about poetry. I thought your poem was written well. It flowed nicely. Well chosen picture. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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I'm just learning about poetry. I thought your poem was written well. It flowed nicely. Well chosen picture. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Brenda. I appreciate your review and good luck wish. I wish you the best as you delve into the wonderful world of poetry.
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Thank you. I never realized how many different types of poems there are.