lips like strawberry wine
memories of another age7 total reviews
Comment from Michele Harber
Jim, you are absolutely amazing at creating characters. Your specialty is the lonely elderly man, and you seem to take every ounce of personal experience, and your own personality, and invest them into creating incredibly believable and sympathetic characters. This is no exception.
You also always seem to manage to bring up things from my childhood that I hadn't thought of in ages. I can't tell you how many summer vacations were spend in the Borscht Belt when I was little, enjoying what had, at one time, been known as the land-bound cruise ships, for their unlimited food. I have wonderful memories of the hotels and bungalow colonies, and I'm sorry my daughter never got to experience them. Thank you for reminding me of a pleasant memory.
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Jim, you are absolutely amazing at creating characters. Your specialty is the lonely elderly man, and you seem to take every ounce of personal experience, and your own personality, and invest them into creating incredibly believable and sympathetic characters. This is no exception.
You also always seem to manage to bring up things from my childhood that I hadn't thought of in ages. I can't tell you how many summer vacations were spend in the Borscht Belt when I was little, enjoying what had, at one time, been known as the land-bound cruise ships, for their unlimited food. I have wonderful memories of the hotels and bungalow colonies, and I'm sorry my daughter never got to experience them. Thank you for reminding me of a pleasant memory.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2024
Comment from royowen
Oh yes, there are times in our lives that we wish had never been, I've never quite ruined the life of a sweet young thing, and I've been with my wife for fifty four years, and somehow God looked after me all those despite my ugly young life, beautifully written Jim, there's truth in fiction, great job, blessings Roy
Typo : not where you(r) father can see us.
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Oh yes, there are times in our lives that we wish had never been, I've never quite ruined the life of a sweet young thing, and I've been with my wife for fifty four years, and somehow God looked after me all those despite my ugly young life, beautifully written Jim, there's truth in fiction, great job, blessings Roy
Typo : not where you(r) father can see us.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
First of all, congratulations on your 750th post Jim, your pen has been busy. I doubt that one drink would have tempted this girl to become an alcoholic and most people dislike the taste of alcohol at first. I enjoyed your historic story, it had a real authentic American vibe, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
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First of all, congratulations on your 750th post Jim, your pen has been busy. I doubt that one drink would have tempted this girl to become an alcoholic and most people dislike the taste of alcohol at first. I enjoyed your historic story, it had a real authentic American vibe, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 27-Sep-2024
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Oh man! What a terrible ending. Surely Chrissie wasn't ruint completely. Not by one night of drinking?
Sounds like that beauty ;'was' attainable. All he had to do was get a job.
Best wishes.
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Oh man! What a terrible ending. Surely Chrissie wasn't ruint completely. Not by one night of drinking?
Sounds like that beauty ;'was' attainable. All he had to do was get a job.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2024
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Jim,
This passionate story set in old comedians' time is an excellent read. I like the dreary ambiance you paint in the beginning of it.
Suggestions: space between husbands and showing off," the next night don't start off too good" should be 'well.'
Your work is really a true gem, a toast to that bygone era.
Best wishes,
Cindy
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Jim,
This passionate story set in old comedians' time is an excellent read. I like the dreary ambiance you paint in the beginning of it.
Suggestions: space between husbands and showing off," the next night don't start off too good" should be 'well.'
Your work is really a true gem, a toast to that bygone era.
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 27-Sep-2024
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Congratulations on your 750-milestone post. This is a great post to receive that on. After reading, I had to pause and wonder how many people could tell this story. A few things might change but the basic story would remain the same. Thank you for sharing.
The next night didn't start off too good. (The following night)
When we got some distance away, I yelled to her.
"What's your name?" (comma after 'her' and move the next line closer to 'her')
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Congratulations on your 750-milestone post. This is a great post to receive that on. After reading, I had to pause and wonder how many people could tell this story. A few things might change but the basic story would remain the same. Thank you for sharing.
The next night didn't start off too good. (The following night)
When we got some distance away, I yelled to her.
"What's your name?" (comma after 'her' and move the next line closer to 'her')
Comment Written 27-Sep-2024
Comment from John Cranford
Okay...okay...okay. I don't normally read and review lengthy stuff because I can't focus long enough to get to the end. I would say it's because of you, my friend, that I read your story, but I would be lying. The title sucked me in. When I read it, I said there's a song in here somewhere. But you made me read the whole thing to get to it. Your mind has a reservoir of words and experiences that leave me in awe! Compared to you, I'm a mere dwarf in the grand world of writing. Keep writing, my man! Your work is amazing, You have so much to offer, and I have so much to learn. John
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Okay...okay...okay. I don't normally read and review lengthy stuff because I can't focus long enough to get to the end. I would say it's because of you, my friend, that I read your story, but I would be lying. The title sucked me in. When I read it, I said there's a song in here somewhere. But you made me read the whole thing to get to it. Your mind has a reservoir of words and experiences that leave me in awe! Compared to you, I'm a mere dwarf in the grand world of writing. Keep writing, my man! Your work is amazing, You have so much to offer, and I have so much to learn. John
Comment Written 27-Sep-2024