He Said/She Said
A True5 total reviews
Comment from Julie Helms
This was a very interesting story to read. You really honed in on the differences and yet they were clearly devoted to each other. Your references to events in history give the story a strong foundation to understand where they are coming from.
Thanks for sharing!
Julie
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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This was a very interesting story to read. You really honed in on the differences and yet they were clearly devoted to each other. Your references to events in history give the story a strong foundation to understand where they are coming from.
Thanks for sharing!
Julie
Comment Written 26-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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Thank you Julie.
Comment from Aiona
What a cool story. I think I found a typo:
"She loved Chock-full-of-nuts pumpernickel bread and cream cheese sandwiches, Yankee Doodles and Ring Dings."
I wasn't sure if the pumpernickel bread had Chock-full-o-nuts inside of it. If it's a separate thing, there should be commas to separate them. But again, I'm not sure! Maybe the sandwich DID have coffee in it.
In which case, maybe hyphens will help: "Chock-full-o-nuts-pumpernickel-bread." And now.... I'm wondering if I should make pumpernickel with coffee in it too!
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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What a cool story. I think I found a typo:
"She loved Chock-full-of-nuts pumpernickel bread and cream cheese sandwiches, Yankee Doodles and Ring Dings."
I wasn't sure if the pumpernickel bread had Chock-full-o-nuts inside of it. If it's a separate thing, there should be commas to separate them. But again, I'm not sure! Maybe the sandwich DID have coffee in it.
In which case, maybe hyphens will help: "Chock-full-o-nuts-pumpernickel-bread." And now.... I'm wondering if I should make pumpernickel with coffee in it too!
Comment Written 25-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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That's a good point. Chock full of nuts was the name of the restaurant and they served a sandwich of pumpernickel bread with cream cheese.
this is my first story. don't exactly know if I can edit or if you can even read this post. do I press send?
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Hi, there's an button somewhere on your post, that says "Edit." Click it, and it will take you to a screen very much like the one you wrote the post with. You can change the text of the post. Then click on something else to re-publish it corrected.
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thank you.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Congratulations on your first milestone and welcome on board! That's funny because I've read a post by Victortouche today with a similar theme about the incompatibility of couples that actually holds them together. I enjoyed reading your original style of writing which conveyed this theme so well in all its detail and complexity of human nature. The poignancy and realism of the ending was all the more powerful and emotional. No errors noted. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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Congratulations on your first milestone and welcome on board! That's funny because I've read a post by Victortouche today with a similar theme about the incompatibility of couples that actually holds them together. I enjoyed reading your original style of writing which conveyed this theme so well in all its detail and complexity of human nature. The poignancy and realism of the ending was all the more powerful and emotional. No errors noted. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 25-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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thank you!
Comment from Begin Again
Congratulations on your first post and welcome to FanStory. I hope you enjoy yourself. Happy writing!
They say opposites attract, and in this story, you prove that to be true. But it's also obvious that they were very much in love. I hope they are standing in heaven, holding hands and smiling down on you.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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Congratulations on your first post and welcome to FanStory. I hope you enjoy yourself. Happy writing!
They say opposites attract, and in this story, you prove that to be true. But it's also obvious that they were very much in love. I hope they are standing in heaven, holding hands and smiling down on you.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 25-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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thanks so much. I miss them both, especially around the holidays.
Comment from Esther Brown
For a first post you nailed it! I wish you the very best in the contest. I noticed a pronoun error: copied here. He asked me to call him. You used "she" and "her" elsewhere. This was so well written. I want to read more of your writing. Esther
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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For a first post you nailed it! I wish you the very best in the contest. I noticed a pronoun error: copied here. He asked me to call him. You used "she" and "her" elsewhere. This was so well written. I want to read more of your writing. Esther
Comment Written 24-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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thanks so much.
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Good luck!