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His Silence

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Why did a 14 year old boy murder his parents?

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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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She has told a really elaborate lie that seems like it will not work out. Won't she have to call home sometime and won't her location show up on the phone? You might want to explain how that will work. Another suggestion: Emma asks me(,)

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2024

reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
    Thank you, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from lancellot
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Well, I guess this had to happen for the story to continue, just like in the horror movies where the couple stays in the haunted house, in spite of all the warning signs.

notes:

I hate lying to her, but what other choice {to} I have?
-do

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2024

reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
    Thank you for spotting that error, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Thank you for sharing this addition with us. I enjoyed reading. At the beginning I was a little confused who Emma was talking with. You don't make it clear. You may want to look at that area again.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2024

reply by the author on 16-Sep-2024
    Thank you Barbara, I'll go back to that section and see what I can do to change it. I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from BethShelby
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It seems they are actually going to do it. I'm sure Callum wishes they weren't. He doesn't exactly feel welcome there but he wasn't to support Danielle. I'm anxious to find out what they will learn about these people.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2024

reply by the author on 16-Sep-2024
    Thank you Beth, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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This is going to be problematic now that Emma has requested photographs. But it all cleverly adds to the tension and intrigue of Danielle's plan. Excellent! Thanks for sharing Debbie

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2024

reply by the author on 16-Sep-2024
    Thank you Debbie, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
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I really enjoyed the tension you've built in this chapter! I love how you hint at the truth using inner thoughts while maintaining a calm exterior. The characters feel real, and you can sense the weight of their decisions. I'm hooked! Looking forward to seeing where this story goes!

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2024

reply by the author on 16-Sep-2024
    Thank you, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Begin Again
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And the "adventure" or should that be labeled "days of doom" begin? I think Daniele is taking this all to lightly, considering she knows nothing of these people except Harvey (the convicted murderer) sent her there. A few loose screws rolling around upstairs, I think! Can't wait to see what happens....
Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2024

reply by the author on 16-Sep-2024
    Thank you Carol, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.