judgement day
a reminder on Friday the 13th2 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
When I first joined Fanstory, I learned there were so many rules about what makes a haiku. This one feels more like a senryu than a haiku. You could argue that plantain harvest is a reference to a season and "birthed for judgment" does have a "satori" effect but I don't think that's what they are looking for. Without the picture, it's not clear if plantains or humans are the subject.
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When I first joined Fanstory, I learned there were so many rules about what makes a haiku. This one feels more like a senryu than a haiku. You could argue that plantain harvest is a reference to a season and "birthed for judgment" does have a "satori" effect but I don't think that's what they are looking for. Without the picture, it's not clear if plantains or humans are the subject.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
Comment from papa55mike
Watch out for those banana peels that will trip you up and lead to a falling away. It took me a minute to get the picture. What a wonderfully written poem. Good luck in the contest! Have a great day, and God bless/
mike
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Watch out for those banana peels that will trip you up and lead to a falling away. It took me a minute to get the picture. What a wonderfully written poem. Good luck in the contest! Have a great day, and God bless/
mike
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024