Comment from
Aiona
It was really hard to read this poem, with the dark text against a dark-purple background. However, I really like the poem itself. It followed the required 2-4-6-8 syllable count in the writing prompt. I love that it also has some rhyme. I prefer poems that rhyme. I also like poems that make me smile, and this one definitely made me smile with a memory of burying my dad in the sand at Virginia Beach!
Comment Written 15-Sep-2024
Comment from
RodG
The Speaker sounds like a mother singing a song to her child as they climb a hill together, then race down it to the sandy beach. Your camera records this mother/child experience very well. Rod
Comment Written 10-Sep-2024