Darkness of Desire
An eclipse haiku for the club12 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Thank you for participating in the Haiku Club Eclipse event. Great entry for with a good syllable count and connection between lines. Beautiful presentation and imagery.
Good job,
Gypsy
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Thank you for participating in the Haiku Club Eclipse event. Great entry for with a good syllable count and connection between lines. Beautiful presentation and imagery.
Good job,
Gypsy
Comment Written 15-Sep-2024
Comment from karenina
I'm not sure what an eclipse haiku is...but if it's meant to be haunting and ethereally dark; you've succeeded! This image is PERFECT for your words,
June. It seems any wish made in this scenario would be doomed!
Wow. Impactful!
Karenina
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I'm not sure what an eclipse haiku is...but if it's meant to be haunting and ethereally dark; you've succeeded! This image is PERFECT for your words,
June. It seems any wish made in this scenario would be doomed!
Wow. Impactful!
Karenina
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A passionate embrace can draw us into that world of desire and we fall into the arms of lust and crave satisfaction, I enjoyed your dark mysterious poem June, love Dolly x x x
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A passionate embrace can draw us into that world of desire and we fall into the arms of lust and crave satisfaction, I enjoyed your dark mysterious poem June, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
Comment from Sugarray77
Although you have presented this in an evocative manner, the premise holds true no matter what temptation comes our way... we become obsessed if we don't use self discipline. You did a fine job in the execution of this form. :)
Melissa
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Although you have presented this in an evocative manner, the premise holds true no matter what temptation comes our way... we become obsessed if we don't use self discipline. You did a fine job in the execution of this form. :)
Melissa
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Melissa. Anything can get out control when we let our emotions take over. I appreciate your feedback, which is spot on.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very nice haiku for the club event and I wish you the very best with all of your writing. May you have a wonderful week and may God bless you. Patricia
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This is a very nice haiku for the club event and I wish you the very best with all of your writing. May you have a wonderful week and may God bless you. Patricia
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
Comment from Aussie
Great illustration. Once we are hooked on a person, it is hard to walk away. Every encounter that gets our blood boiling is not always true love, rather true lust. Thanks for sharing. K XX
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Great illustration. Once we are hooked on a person, it is hard to walk away. Every encounter that gets our blood boiling is not always true love, rather true lust. Thanks for sharing. K XX
Comment Written 10-Sep-2024
Comment from Mark D. R.
June,
You have created a fine entry for this club contest. Of course, I favor alliteration in sound, which you have penned especially in lines 1 and 3.
Lines 2 and 3 are nicely linked to emphasize your concluding line.
Nice overall presentation!
Mark
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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June,
You have created a fine entry for this club contest. Of course, I favor alliteration in sound, which you have penned especially in lines 1 and 3.
Lines 2 and 3 are nicely linked to emphasize your concluding line.
Nice overall presentation!
Mark
Comment Written 10-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Thanks for reading and sharing your insights. I'm glad you enjoyed this haiku on the darker side of love that can eclipse all reason.
Comment from royowen
I think most of will be hit by desire and the darkness thereof, as someone who was an alcoholic, a smoker and a compulsive gamvpbler, and to leave those things behind, they are devilish in their desire to kill, well done, blessings Roy
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I think most of will be hit by desire and the darkness thereof, as someone who was an alcoholic, a smoker and a compulsive gamvpbler, and to leave those things behind, they are devilish in their desire to kill, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 10-Sep-2024
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought this was very enjoayble. I thought you rpoem shared the struggle between desire and reason. You shared a powerful emotional conflict. I love how you've managed to express such a deep thought in just a few lines. Excellent work!
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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I thought this was very enjoayble. I thought you rpoem shared the struggle between desire and reason. You shared a powerful emotional conflict. I love how you've managed to express such a deep thought in just a few lines. Excellent work!
Comment Written 10-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Thanks for reading and sharing your insights. I'm glad you enjoyed this haiku on the darker side of love that can eclipse all reason.
Comment from Begin Again
I'm not good at interpreting poems because we all see and feel things differently. I see darkness and grief overtaking and possessing the troubled soul, refusing to let go. I'm probably all wrong, but then when am I not.
Smiles, Carol
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I'm not good at interpreting poems because we all see and feel things differently. I see darkness and grief overtaking and possessing the troubled soul, refusing to let go. I'm probably all wrong, but then when am I not.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 10-Sep-2024
