Comment from Rachelle Allen

Excellent

I so appreciate your entering this contest. Thank you for adding your talents to the ranks and raising the standards big time. You did a fantastic job with this challenge and have given us a fun, entertaining choice. Good luck at the polls! xoxox

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2024

Many thanks, Rachelle.

reply by Rachelle Allen on 16-Sep-2024

My pleasure!

Comment from Julie Helms

Excellent

Wow, what a challenge you've accomplished here, telling a full story! This could not have been easy. It was fun to read, too.
The only issue I saw is with:
Bye and bye
I'm pretty sure the expression is by and by.
Well done!
Julie

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2024

So kind, Julie. Thanks. Duly amended.

reply by Julie Helms on 09-Sep-2024

It's got to be a homonym, not the same word...maybe work the word 'buy' in there somehow?

Comment from Marilyn Hamilton

Excellent

As if a loop poem wasn't difficult enough now they have gone and twisted it! You did an amazing job with this. It reads clearly and doesn't sound contrived. Very good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2024

Thank you, Marilyn.

Comment from way2gokevs

Excellent

A unique way of putting a poem together. I don't profess to understand fully but I think your work is very good. To me it flows with a twist, keep up the good work and best of luck in the contest. Cheers, Kev.

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2024

Thanks, Kev.