Out of Gas on the Grass
a poem6 total reviews
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest. May you have a lovely day. Your presentation is beautiful. Have a wonderful week and may God bless you. Patricia.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024
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This is very well written for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest. May you have a lovely day. Your presentation is beautiful. Have a wonderful week and may God bless you. Patricia.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Patricia
Comment from royowen
I really like this, it ranks with the story, of men and mice, sometimes the futility of life, the thought that despite our good intentions, things can countermand those things, an excellently written verse, good flow, theme, and a great lesson, great poem my friend, well done, good luck, blessings Roy,
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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I really like this, it ranks with the story, of men and mice, sometimes the futility of life, the thought that despite our good intentions, things can countermand those things, an excellently written verse, good flow, theme, and a great lesson, great poem my friend, well done, good luck, blessings Roy,
Comment Written 08-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Roy
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Most welcome
Comment from F. William Lester
Interesting. I've never looked at a lawn like that. :) When I'm out mowing our lawn and the temperature is in the triple digits, my only thought is to finish and get something cold to drink. Now, with your unusual perspective, I see my lawn in a different light. Nice work. Good luck in the contest and have a great week. Stay well.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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Interesting. I've never looked at a lawn like that. :) When I'm out mowing our lawn and the temperature is in the triple digits, my only thought is to finish and get something cold to drink. Now, with your unusual perspective, I see my lawn in a different light. Nice work. Good luck in the contest and have a great week. Stay well.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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Thank you, FW, for giving this a look.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Those mowers are a Godsend on a filed of grass and you made me smile with this unique and entertaining tale here, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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Those mowers are a Godsend on a filed of grass and you made me smile with this unique and entertaining tale here, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 08-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Dolly
Comment from phill doran
Hello Anon
This is excellent; weed steed, indeed.
It is a wonderful sustained metaphor (if you want to look at it that way) and an off-beat imagining of the other world of another type of life. Uplifting? Yes, its own way, nature trumping the machine. Walt Whitman did well with Leaves of Grass, why not Bil...erm, whoever (sorry, but your style is distinctive, it is difficult to pretend).
Anyway, Doris, I wish you well in your contest. This is a great piece.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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Hello Anon
This is excellent; weed steed, indeed.
It is a wonderful sustained metaphor (if you want to look at it that way) and an off-beat imagining of the other world of another type of life. Uplifting? Yes, its own way, nature trumping the machine. Walt Whitman did well with Leaves of Grass, why not Bil...erm, whoever (sorry, but your style is distinctive, it is difficult to pretend).
Anyway, Doris, I wish you well in your contest. This is a great piece.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 08-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Phil, for the kind review. Doris
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This is so funny. The grass is oppressed! Love your sense of humor. he way you describe the mower's temporary halt as a potential victory for nature was terrific. The final lines beautifully share sense of nature's enduring spirit. Well done!
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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This is so funny. The grass is oppressed! Love your sense of humor. he way you describe the mower's temporary halt as a potential victory for nature was terrific. The final lines beautifully share sense of nature's enduring spirit. Well done!
Comment Written 07-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Michael.