Body of a Horse, Heart of a Man
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "The Daughter of Zeus"A modern twist on Greek Mythology.
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Comment from Ulla
Hi Rhonda, so here I am reading the first chapter of the very first chapter of the the first book. I really liked it. I find Eudora pretty pushy..I wish she would take a step back. I don't particularly like her. A hug, Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Hi Rhonda, so here I am reading the first chapter of the very first chapter of the the first book. I really liked it. I find Eudora pretty pushy..I wish she would take a step back. I don't particularly like her. A hug, Ulla xcx
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Hi Ulla!!!
Thank you for reading!! Yeah, Eudora won't be a character for long. She will exit stage left very soon. This chapter was actually part of my original prologue, but it was too long for one post. I'll have one more, then the real story will begin.
So good to see you back,
Love and hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from rspoet
Hello Rhonda,
An excellent beginning to your book on the many tiers of lesser and greater Greek gods, or immortals, as Phoebus points out. They sound much like humans, teenage mortals, except they have much longer lives. Ironic that the immortal gods are the creation of mortal beings.
Eudora could be a spoiled human teenager, debutante, princess.
Phoebus is in her sights, but he has his own strength and good lineage.
This should be fun.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
PS
I like Athena's temple, and the Parthenon, but I guess Eudora doesn't appreciate human architecture.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
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Hello Rhonda,
An excellent beginning to your book on the many tiers of lesser and greater Greek gods, or immortals, as Phoebus points out. They sound much like humans, teenage mortals, except they have much longer lives. Ironic that the immortal gods are the creation of mortal beings.
Eudora could be a spoiled human teenager, debutante, princess.
Phoebus is in her sights, but he has his own strength and good lineage.
This should be fun.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
PS
I like Athena's temple, and the Parthenon, but I guess Eudora doesn't appreciate human architecture.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
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Hi Robert,
Thank you for the six star review on my slightly juvenile post. It will make sense why I made it so teenagerish in the next chapter. She is spoiled and he does have a great lineage, but Zeus trumps Poseidon, lol.
Yeah, I love the temple architecture, too, but Eudora is only impressed with herself, lol.
Thanks again
Rhonda
Comment from Pam (respa)
Very nice artwork and story to go with it, Rhonda. I enjoyed reading it. The characters are developed very well. Eudora is young and headstrong not understanding that Phoebus needs to prove himself skillful in raising horses and doing well with them in races. He doesn't want things given to him because of his status, background and who he knows. What he knows is the most important.
I like how you make these characters relatable even though they are not part of the world as we know it, but they still have their own issues to work out, as in relationships with each other. I think Phoebus would get more than he bargained for with Eudora.
Very well done, my friend. I was surprised to see another story from you so soon. Hope you had a good Labor Day.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Very nice artwork and story to go with it, Rhonda. I enjoyed reading it. The characters are developed very well. Eudora is young and headstrong not understanding that Phoebus needs to prove himself skillful in raising horses and doing well with them in races. He doesn't want things given to him because of his status, background and who he knows. What he knows is the most important.
I like how you make these characters relatable even though they are not part of the world as we know it, but they still have their own issues to work out, as in relationships with each other. I think Phoebus would get more than he bargained for with Eudora.
Very well done, my friend. I was surprised to see another story from you so soon. Hope you had a good Labor Day.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Hi Pam,
Thank you so much for the six stars, and for the encouraging review. I waited two weeks before posting again, lol. I didn't want to let myself slip back into inactivity. You know how I am!!
This chapter was really part of the prologue, but couldn't just keep having prologues parts 1, 2, and 3. So, it will switch gears soon.
I am still trying to make the characters relatable. It's what I strive for, that and making all the dialogue sound natural.
Thanks again,
Rhonda
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Rhonda. I think you are doing a great job with your writing, and I am enjoying it.
Comment from AliMom
An entertaining chapter. I think you do a great job of capturing Eudora's personality. She's very forward and pushy; bossy in fact. But then, she is the daughter of Zeus. Your immortals seem very human. They own the pettiness and jealousies of the humans they are supposed to care for like in the Greek myths of old but their language and speech are less than other worldly. Phoebus is heroic, gallant, and a little weak as a character. I understand she is Zeus' daughter but he sounds a little whiny explaining the same thing over and over to this persistent young goddess. In truth, I liked the prologue better than the chapter. It sounds a little like a teen novel.
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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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An entertaining chapter. I think you do a great job of capturing Eudora's personality. She's very forward and pushy; bossy in fact. But then, she is the daughter of Zeus. Your immortals seem very human. They own the pettiness and jealousies of the humans they are supposed to care for like in the Greek myths of old but their language and speech are less than other worldly. Phoebus is heroic, gallant, and a little weak as a character. I understand she is Zeus' daughter but he sounds a little whiny explaining the same thing over and over to this persistent young goddess. In truth, I liked the prologue better than the chapter. It sounds a little like a teen novel.
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Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Thank you for the review, AliMom. It is a teen novel. I'm glad you noticed.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Eudora does not sound like a pleasant person to disappoint. I suspect she has some power of her own that she may decide to get even with Phoebus and it will be a very unpleasant experience.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Eudora does not sound like a pleasant person to disappoint. I suspect she has some power of her own that she may decide to get even with Phoebus and it will be a very unpleasant experience.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Hi Carol!! I'm glad you read my prequel chapter!! Don't worry, Phoebus won't let her turn his head...unfortunate for him...
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from Mike Stevens
A fine beginning chapter, Rhonda....and I enjoy you nove based on classic mythology, you found your niche. Looking forward to new adventures. A promising beginning!
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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A fine beginning chapter, Rhonda....and I enjoy you nove based on classic mythology, you found your niche. Looking forward to new adventures. A promising beginning!
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Hi Mike,
Thanks for following this book as well. Yes, I do like Greek Mythology, even if I do tend to spin it the way I want. My apologies to Mythology purists, lol.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from royowen
Like I've observed, it's funny man made the Greek gods in his own image, but generally proud and arrogant, like men, only some much worse, a young idealist like Phoebus don't fit but ill tempered Zeus like a human father might be fairly petulant with the atypical reaction by the young god, heh heh, interesting story Rhonda, but always so well written, blessings toy
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Like I've observed, it's funny man made the Greek gods in his own image, but generally proud and arrogant, like men, only some much worse, a young idealist like Phoebus don't fit but ill tempered Zeus like a human father might be fairly petulant with the atypical reaction by the young god, heh heh, interesting story Rhonda, but always so well written, blessings toy
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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It is true they did, and its why I'm able to personify them, myself, for the purpose of getting my points across. I'm glad you're continuing to follow these yarns!!
Take care,
Rhonda
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Well done
Comment from lyenochka
Oh, you started another book already! And you know about teenagers as you have them in your class. You might even have a few who think they are "lesser gods." Lol.
I'll try to keep in touch but it's going to be busy for the rest of the year as I'm sure it is for you! Have a great school year!
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Oh, you started another book already! And you know about teenagers as you have them in your class. You might even have a few who think they are "lesser gods." Lol.
I'll try to keep in touch but it's going to be busy for the rest of the year as I'm sure it is for you! Have a great school year!
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Hi Helen!!
Yes, I started another because if I don't, I get lazy and then the next thing you know, I'm not writing. I made myself start another one, though I wasn't sure which direction to go. I decided to stick with the characters I've already invented, for the most part.
I do know about getting busy lately, eek. I'll see you when you can.
Hugs and prayers,
Rhonda
Comment from prettybluebirds
You have done a marvelous job of making that girl look like a spoiled brat. I enjoy the stories you write. There are few stories written about God's everyday lives. Nice work. I will follow this story.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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You have done a marvelous job of making that girl look like a spoiled brat. I enjoy the stories you write. There are few stories written about God's everyday lives. Nice work. I will follow this story.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Hi!!!! Yeah, thank you so very much for getting back on board. I always appreciate your perspective. It's still in a sort of prologue phase, but will adjust to familiar territory soon.
I did notice there are few who go for Greek Mythology. They tend towards fairies, werewolves and vampires. I've written about them, too, but I've sort of hit a stride with the gods.
Hugs,
Rhonda
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Oh wow, she's a spoilt one isn't she? And Phoebus is so dignified and patient. You've got us right back into your world, Rhonda, with these two vividly portrayed characters. Fun and games ahead, I predict.
I don't quite understand - 'drew a person in even when he was exhausted' and felt, perhaps, a better description could have been utilised. Also
'He blew out (his?) breath as he search(ed) for the right words.
But I like this. Excellent dialogue with modern speech and a great introduction, full of potential, to your prequel. Well done, Rhonda. Debbie xos
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Oh wow, she's a spoilt one isn't she? And Phoebus is so dignified and patient. You've got us right back into your world, Rhonda, with these two vividly portrayed characters. Fun and games ahead, I predict.
I don't quite understand - 'drew a person in even when he was exhausted' and felt, perhaps, a better description could have been utilised. Also
'He blew out (his?) breath as he search(ed) for the right words.
But I like this. Excellent dialogue with modern speech and a great introduction, full of potential, to your prequel. Well done, Rhonda. Debbie xos
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Hi Debbie,
Thank you for the six stars and for the comments on the new book. I actually think you reviewed the prologue years ago, lol. I had to reread it myself. Anyway, thanks for everything.
Yes, much fun ahead, maybe for some more than others. Eudora is more trouble than she's worth.
Thanks for finding the mistakes!! I shall get right on it.
Hugs,
Rhonda