A Spoon in the Sink
a poem12 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Yes, there's a certain unreality about dreams, so much so, people will look for readers of dreams, and I've never been satisfied by their interpretation of dreams. Where are the dream readers as in the bible, Joseph and Daniel, etc. beautifully written Bill, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Yes, there's a certain unreality about dreams, so much so, people will look for readers of dreams, and I've never been satisfied by their interpretation of dreams. Where are the dream readers as in the bible, Joseph and Daniel, etc. beautifully written Bill, blessings Roy
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Roy
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Welcome
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed the rhymes here but I didn't quite get the story Bill. Having said that, dreams can be disjointed and non-sensical, so I expect you didn't understand it either, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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I enjoyed the rhymes here but I didn't quite get the story Bill. Having said that, dreams can be disjointed and non-sensical, so I expect you didn't understand it either, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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In my dreams I think that being lost in Detroit with a knife is better than any main street in Pakistan.
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I never thought of Pakistan as a dangerous country Bill, but maybe you are right!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. You kept my attention until the final word. Your rhyming scheme was excellent. Good luck with the contest.
my cousin's first wife Beverly. (wife,)
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. You kept my attention until the final word. Your rhyming scheme was excellent. Good luck with the contest.
my cousin's first wife Beverly. (wife,)
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Thank you , Barbara. : )
Comment from lyenochka
Oh my! That's quite a dream. I guess the cousin is battling some other nightmare with a knife in Detroit. It seems the dream is calling the narrator to feel the need to help that cousin.
woke me from my revery; (reverie?)
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Oh my! That's quite a dream. I guess the cousin is battling some other nightmare with a knife in Detroit. It seems the dream is calling the narrator to feel the need to help that cousin.
woke me from my revery; (reverie?)
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Either spelling is accepted.
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The French would have a cow...
Comment from Sugarray77
Your humor always makes me smile. Great job on this piece, Bill. I love your fantastical theme and you handled it very well with good flow and choice of end rhymes. Great read.
Melissa
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Your humor always makes me smile. Great job on this piece, Bill. I love your fantastical theme and you handled it very well with good flow and choice of end rhymes. Great read.
Melissa
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Thanks, Melissa
Comment from ESOSTINE
This makes a very interesting read. The story line is captivating and keeps me trapped from the first line to the end. I love the twist at the last verse, and pray your dreams stay clear of your cousin's wife before it turns to reality. Remember, he is now closer in Detroit with a knife. Well done, dear Bill.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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This makes a very interesting read. The story line is captivating and keeps me trapped from the first line to the end. I love the twist at the last verse, and pray your dreams stay clear of your cousin's wife before it turns to reality. Remember, he is now closer in Detroit with a knife. Well done, dear Bill.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Thank you, ESOSTINE
Comment from 3rd Sight.
Dreams can seem so real sometimes - it's scary: Although, I don't understand - how someone could wake up and wake up so many times in one night, knowin' the out come each time. Even though, most of this poem - I enjoyed, it still needs work though.. Sorry!
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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Dreams can seem so real sometimes - it's scary: Although, I don't understand - how someone could wake up and wake up so many times in one night, knowin' the out come each time. Even though, most of this poem - I enjoyed, it still needs work though.. Sorry!
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Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Thanks for giving this a look.
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Wow, I have to share that I had just asked for a sign from my mom not five minutes before reading this poem, and then I saw her name, Beverly. Just amazing. Anyway, the way you've crafted this story, with the sharp clanging sound and the mysterious visit from Beverly, really drew me in. The mix of the dreamlike quality and the surprising twist at the end was both intriguing and a bit eerie.
It left me with a smile and a sense of wonder and of course a sign. Thank you!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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Wow, I have to share that I had just asked for a sign from my mom not five minutes before reading this poem, and then I saw her name, Beverly. Just amazing. Anyway, the way you've crafted this story, with the sharp clanging sound and the mysterious visit from Beverly, really drew me in. The mix of the dreamlike quality and the surprising twist at the end was both intriguing and a bit eerie.
It left me with a smile and a sense of wonder and of course a sign. Thank you!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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Cool, Patty
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This has a dreamlike quality. It's an interesting story told in a poem. The shift from Pakistan to Detroit was interesting. The rhyme works so well and really enhances the story. What an engaging read!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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This has a dreamlike quality. It's an interesting story told in a poem. The shift from Pakistan to Detroit was interesting. The rhyme works so well and really enhances the story. What an engaging read!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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Thanks, Michael
Comment from jim vecchio
At least you got a pain in your head. I wake up to find nothing in my head. The best doctors in this area could find nothing. I guess that's why my writing has been going downhill lately.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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At least you got a pain in your head. I wake up to find nothing in my head. The best doctors in this area could find nothing. I guess that's why my writing has been going downhill lately.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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Jim, you will eventually need something in your head.
