The Conquest
She Came, I Saw and Was Conquered8 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Tom,
This is a well told romantic story. It is sad when you first love is unrequited. The story reminds me of the song "My Eyes Adored You" by
Frankie Valli
Joan
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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Hi Tom,
This is a well told romantic story. It is sad when you first love is unrequited. The story reminds me of the song "My Eyes Adored You" by
Frankie Valli
Joan
Comment Written 06-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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Amen
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Glad you liked the comparison.
Joan
Comment from jake cosmos aller
Great poem about how you met your wife and and have been married almost 40 years I meet my wife at age 26 after serving in the Peace Corps and teaching ESL overseas However, I first met her in my dreams and she walked out of my dreams eight years later. Details can be found on my portfolio or my blog the world according to cosmos
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Great poem about how you met your wife and and have been married almost 40 years I meet my wife at age 26 after serving in the Peace Corps and teaching ESL overseas However, I first met her in my dreams and she walked out of my dreams eight years later. Details can be found on my portfolio or my blog the world according to cosmos
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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This story is about a girl met as a freshman who befriended me only whereas I dreamed of a date
My wife of 44 yrs was met in college I was 29. Myra was nineteen and our engagement was 30 months until she graduated
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a sweet natured poem and I hung onto your every word here and I enjoyed your love story with a happy ending. A talented post from a skilful pen, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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This is a sweet natured poem and I hung onto your every word here and I enjoyed your love story with a happy ending. A talented post from a skilful pen, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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It's hard to imagine how those three plus formative years aided in my adoring women in a special way. Appreciate your time and review.
Comment from Sarah Probe S.
"better to have loved and lost
Than never to have loved at all"
a lot to say about this quote, i would personally invest feelings in friendships, or in the love of God, or of a child, there is much less to loose, than to love a man. I have not found my other half yet, maybe in another life, my poetry is in fact imaginary, but thank you for your beautiful poem, it's very inspiring, well done. Best regards. Sarah
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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"better to have loved and lost
Than never to have loved at all"
a lot to say about this quote, i would personally invest feelings in friendships, or in the love of God, or of a child, there is much less to loose, than to love a man. I have not found my other half yet, maybe in another life, my poetry is in fact imaginary, but thank you for your beautiful poem, it's very inspiring, well done. Best regards. Sarah
Comment Written 30-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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I was single til 31. Relationships were nil in h.s., not much better while being in the military ten years, and unheard of in college as I was an interesting subject for coeds in their teens and early twenties but being 27+ generally was off limits
Keep the faith
My life turned out great
Comment from royowen
One could say you were an unusual person to say the least, although there is really no story, none of the things that spark continuity, just isolated incidences of engagement. The notes might have helped, I think it might have been better as an article, well done though, it's not quite poetry, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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One could say you were an unusual person to say the least, although there is really no story, none of the things that spark continuity, just isolated incidences of engagement. The notes might have helped, I think it might have been better as an article, well done though, it's not quite poetry, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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The challenge read any form, but it was originally written as a story before I was informed the instructions was to be poetic. Thanks.
Comment from pome lover
well, you did a good job turning it into free verse, but I was stunned after she showed you the little hearts on her bloomers, it didn't mean anything?
Well, as they (some) say, all's well that ends well. I'm glad you found a love for you. Young love can really be painful.
Good story, well told.
Katharine
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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well, you did a good job turning it into free verse, but I was stunned after she showed you the little hearts on her bloomers, it didn't mean anything?
Well, as they (some) say, all's well that ends well. I'm glad you found a love for you. Young love can really be painful.
Good story, well told.
Katharine
Comment Written 30-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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I guess my earlier reply failed. The exposure given was no flash but a simple tease as the bloomers in the sixties came to her knee and her hem on the uniform a little further but to me the act was like a puppy exposing his underside.
Purely innocent just like the boy she taunted.
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I didn't infer anything untoward, I didn't say it was a flash. I was just surprised that she didn't maybe have some feelings for him, after the little flirt with the hearts. You called it a "taunt", which I believe is not innocent. But there are innocent flirtations.
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I understand
My pursuit lasted 3.5 years and with graduation forthcoming she may have given me a due reward for staying the course. 😗
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as well she should! )
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Thanks once more
Comment from gansach
I enjoyed reading about your precious memory. It has a nice presentation and tells a sweet story. Good descriptive writing. I believe, though, the contest entry rules state it should be in poem form. I mention it because one of my pieces was disqualified when I missed that part of the rules and wrote a prose entry instead. I don't know if you can change it or want to? Nice piece though.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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I enjoyed reading about your precious memory. It has a nice presentation and tells a sweet story. Good descriptive writing. I believe, though, the contest entry rules state it should be in poem form. I mention it because one of my pieces was disqualified when I missed that part of the rules and wrote a prose entry instead. I don't know if you can change it or want to? Nice piece though.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Aah. That explains why I paid for what I thought was a story with poem points. I'll have to check, but if a DQ comes about, so be it.
I am glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is a lovely account of all the pains of being a teenager in love, at a Catholic school, where it was difficult if not impossible to even flirt. On the plus side, the years of waiting helped the speaker get ready to meet the right one later. Nice share.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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This is a lovely account of all the pains of being a teenager in love, at a Catholic school, where it was difficult if not impossible to even flirt. On the plus side, the years of waiting helped the speaker get ready to meet the right one later. Nice share.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Thank you. Seems you may have been familiar with parochial schools. It was a godsend and a challenge wrapped in a taco shell.
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I worked as a Spanish teacher once in a Jewish elementary school. The school had two kitchens to keep the kosher food rules. Pizza was just cheese and sauce or vegetarian, for example. We do have at least a couple of Catholic schools in the Salt Lake City area and one way out south of where I live.
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I'm familiar with SLC. My investments are stationed there. Again, I thank you for pointing out my faux pas. I made amends and hope you will comment on the end product. I think it will pass, and if so, I owe you more than a reviewer nomination. Are you LDS?
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Yeah, I am a returned missionary. I lived in Puerto Rico for nearly a year and a half as a missionary. But it's been 32 years since then, ha ha.
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I went to sell insurance door to door in '83 and knocked on the mission home door in Roanoke Va. Instead of closing the deal I was offered an eternal gateway to kneel at the Savior's feet. Forty years and counting.
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That's a neat story.
