Denial
There is Denial when a husband doesn't come home9 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Kristen,
Welcome to the site.
This is great first post. It is full of images and emotion. Even with the different rhyme schemes among the stanzas the poem flows well.
I guess that you are saying anger at the death are bringing on feelings of betrayal. The cup of the table and the socks on the floor are sure reminders of his absence.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a nice day.
Joan
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Hi Kristen,
Welcome to the site.
This is great first post. It is full of images and emotion. Even with the different rhyme schemes among the stanzas the poem flows well.
I guess that you are saying anger at the death are bringing on feelings of betrayal. The cup of the table and the socks on the floor are sure reminders of his absence.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a nice day.
Joan
Comment Written 29-Sep-2024
Comment from Aiona
Yowie. What a poem. It rhymes. It has some meter. It is an amazing word portrait of a woman in denial, just like the title says. Heartbreaking. Is it based on truth? Well, even if it's not based on YOUR experiences, I know it's happened in the world somewhere. I can see why it placed in the contest.
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Yowie. What a poem. It rhymes. It has some meter. It is an amazing word portrait of a woman in denial, just like the title says. Heartbreaking. Is it based on truth? Well, even if it's not based on YOUR experiences, I know it's happened in the world somewhere. I can see why it placed in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2024
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You are very brave to attempt a contest for your first milestone post. Congratulations!!! I enjoyed reading and your rhymes were very good. Good luck with the contest.
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You are very brave to attempt a contest for your first milestone post. Congratulations!!! I enjoyed reading and your rhymes were very good. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
Comment from jake cosmos aller
a powerful and moving poem about dealing with the lost of a husband in a a car crash finally coming to terms with that he is not coming back that death has claimed him.
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a powerful and moving poem about dealing with the lost of a husband in a a car crash finally coming to terms with that he is not coming back that death has claimed him.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
Comment from jessizero
Congratulations on your first milestone post! This was a great (though sad and tragic) rhyming poem for the contest. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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Congratulations on your first milestone post! This was a great (though sad and tragic) rhyming poem for the contest. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2024
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Rhyming Poem contest and a wonderful first post. Welcome to Fanstory! Your poem told a clear story with good flow and rhyme to it. I look forward to seeing more of your writing. good luck in the contest.
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An excellent entry for the Rhyming Poem contest and a wonderful first post. Welcome to Fanstory! Your poem told a clear story with good flow and rhyme to it. I look forward to seeing more of your writing. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a sad poem about the realisation of death and how final it is. We can't quite believe it when it happens, a sad and melancholy poem and I welcome you to Fanstory, love Dolly x
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This is a sad poem about the realisation of death and how final it is. We can't quite believe it when it happens, a sad and melancholy poem and I welcome you to Fanstory, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
Comment from gansach
First off, congratulations on your first post milestone and welcome. Your poem tells a very sad story of a woman trying to find a small piece of hope to hold onto and fight against the fear of the worst that's happened. Your rhyme scheme is good. The varied lengths of each line make it a little difficult to get a consistent rhythm, but that could be adjusted with a little re-working. You might consider using a photo or artwork from the selection available to add another dimension to your poem. All in all, a good start. I hope you keep writing and sharing your work. Good luck!
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First off, congratulations on your first post milestone and welcome. Your poem tells a very sad story of a woman trying to find a small piece of hope to hold onto and fight against the fear of the worst that's happened. Your rhyme scheme is good. The varied lengths of each line make it a little difficult to get a consistent rhythm, but that could be adjusted with a little re-working. You might consider using a photo or artwork from the selection available to add another dimension to your poem. All in all, a good start. I hope you keep writing and sharing your work. Good luck!
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
Comment from pome lover
I am hoping that this is fiction, and not personal.
All the thoughts that a wife has when her husband is late, then the news of his having been in a fatal accident. A very sad but well described poetic account of a tragic event.
Welcome to Fan Story!
Katharine
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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I am hoping that this is fiction, and not personal.
All the thoughts that a wife has when her husband is late, then the news of his having been in a fatal accident. A very sad but well described poetic account of a tragic event.
Welcome to Fan Story!
Katharine
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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Thank you- unfortunately it is personal.
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Oh, I am so terribly sorry!I know that would be terribly hard to go through.
Was it recent?
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It was January 2023
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Bless you. Take care of yourself.