Inside My Dreams
A modified rondeau25 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I know everybody dreams, but I very rarely remember mine. Your rhyming scheme if very good and I wish you luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I know everybody dreams, but I very rarely remember mine. Your rhyming scheme if very good and I wish you luck with the contest.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much Barbara for your review. Be glad you don't remember your dreams. Mine are not only bad/bizarre bur the haunt me during the day.
Take care
Luv&stuff Katiemae1977
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
You're always allowed some exaggeration, Katherine. But how well you've conveyed the horror of bad dreams here! I'm about to go to bed so, hopefully, my night will be somewhat better. But the modified rondeau works well for this theme with that echoing line beginning the first stanza and ending the last two. Rhyming is excellent and unforced. I like the imagery of the cage and the way in which those remnants and memories of the day become warped and tainted. All very vivid and a strong entry. Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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You're always allowed some exaggeration, Katherine. But how well you've conveyed the horror of bad dreams here! I'm about to go to bed so, hopefully, my night will be somewhat better. But the modified rondeau works well for this theme with that echoing line beginning the first stanza and ending the last two. Rhyming is excellent and unforced. I like the imagery of the cage and the way in which those remnants and memories of the day become warped and tainted. All very vivid and a strong entry. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 28-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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Thanks so very much Debbie! I hope you sleep fine tonight!
Thanksbfor your lovely comments and review!
Katherine
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Well done with your rhyming poem, katiemae, on the dreams that haunt your nights. I used to have graphic nightmares as a child so I van understand how wearying they are. I loved this read, and wish you luck in the contest.
cheers
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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Well done with your rhyming poem, katiemae, on the dreams that haunt your nights. I used to have graphic nightmares as a child so I van understand how wearying they are. I loved this read, and wish you luck in the contest.
cheers
Comment Written 28-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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Thanks so very much Pearl for your lovely comments and review! Sorry you had nightmares as a child. Hope they stopped.
Katherine
Comment from estory
Your poem captures the anxiety, the uncertainty, the trauma, of nightmares, in colorful images and a stretched, tense voice. There's this jumble of images here, from the faces of demons, to the face of Mona Lisa, warped roads and unnamed streets, that create a feeling of being neither here nor there. It is like hanging in limbo, tossing and turning. estory
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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Your poem captures the anxiety, the uncertainty, the trauma, of nightmares, in colorful images and a stretched, tense voice. There's this jumble of images here, from the faces of demons, to the face of Mona Lisa, warped roads and unnamed streets, that create a feeling of being neither here nor there. It is like hanging in limbo, tossing and turning. estory
Comment Written 28-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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Thanks so very much estory for your comments and review! They are much appreciated.
Katherine
Comment from jessizero
This was a great rhyming poem for the contest. I enjoyed your rhymes and the repetition of "inside my dreams." Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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This was a great rhyming poem for the contest. I enjoyed your rhymes and the repetition of "inside my dreams." Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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Thanks so very much for your lovely comments and review!
Katherine
Comment from Aussie
Have you tried meditation before bed? There is a reason why these bad dreams are haunting your rest. Look back at the past and count the number of times you have experienced hell on earth. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
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Have you tried meditation before bed? There is a reason why these bad dreams are haunting your rest. Look back at the past and count the number of times you have experienced hell on earth. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
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Thanks so very much Aussie for you kind words and review. I exaggerated a bit for poetic sake but I will try meditating before bed although I don't sleep too much these days. Thanks again!
Katherine
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Katherine, There are two reasons. One you under psychic attack. 2. You have things you haven't dealt with in the past. Do you read yourself to sleep?
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a wonderful poem as one can easily imagine the trauma of bad memories filling one's dream.
Your imagery is vivid and the struggle to maintain sanity, visceral.
Good to see you back again. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
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This is a wonderful poem as one can easily imagine the trauma of bad memories filling one's dream.
Your imagery is vivid and the struggle to maintain sanity, visceral.
Good to see you back again. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 28-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
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Good to be back Gloria. Thanks so very much for this honor. So glad you liked the poem.
Katherine
Comment from mermaids
I am sorry to read that you suffer from chronic bad dreams. My dreams are mostly pleasant. Excellent use of words that well captures images in your dreams that are scary and come alive for the reader. I am sure there are others who can relate to your words.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
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I am sorry to read that you suffer from chronic bad dreams. My dreams are mostly pleasant. Excellent use of words that well captures images in your dreams that are scary and come alive for the reader. I am sure there are others who can relate to your words.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
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Thanks so very much for reading and reviewing!
Katiemae1977
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Lovely modified rondeau with good rhyme and meter that doesn't sound forced.. when I was a little girl I had horrible nightmares. I was afraid to sleep. The nightmares don't come anymore.... maybe one once in a while, but not the way it used to be. To this day I suffer from insomnia.
Great entry for the Rhyming Poem contest.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
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Lovely modified rondeau with good rhyme and meter that doesn't sound forced.. when I was a little girl I had horrible nightmares. I was afraid to sleep. The nightmares don't come anymore.... maybe one once in a while, but not the way it used to be. To this day I suffer from insomnia.
Great entry for the Rhyming Poem contest.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
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I'm sorry you suffer from insomnia Gypsy. So do I. The dreams when DO sleep are a bit better but still disturbing.
Thanks so very much for your review and for sharing.
Katiemae1977
Comment from Barry Penfold
You made me feel your pain. This is an excellent write in my opinion. Rhyming pattern is good and the image is spot on. I am not sure what I can say to ease your pain and health difficulties. Probably nothing. Thanks for sharing and please keep writing.
Take care
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
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You made me feel your pain. This is an excellent write in my opinion. Rhyming pattern is good and the image is spot on. I am not sure what I can say to ease your pain and health difficulties. Probably nothing. Thanks for sharing and please keep writing.
Take care
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
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Hi Barry
I exaggerated a bit for poetic sake but yes, I have a chronic nightmare problem.
Thanks for your review and for your well wishes.
Katherine
