2024 Gypsy's Haiku
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Comment from lyenochka
It's sad that the night is what she is tangled in but not the one she longs to touch. But there is the consolation that she still shares the stars of the nights she had with him.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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It's sad that the night is what she is tangled in but not the one she longs to touch. But there is the consolation that she still shares the stars of the nights she had with him.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Yes, all humans share the sky, it's a heartwarming thought.
Thank you very much, big sister. I appreciate your kind review and feedback.
❤️ love
Marival
Comment from Bill Schott
This senryu, Tangled in the Night, has the proper formatting and recalls the person who shared a physical as well as a spiritual relationship. Some parts still resonate.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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This senryu, Tangled in the Night, has the proper formatting and recalls the person who shared a physical as well as a spiritual relationship. Some parts still resonate.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review.
Well done!
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wouds inflicted by reason" -- Novali
Comment from RJ Heritage
Your words are strong and delicate at the same time. She seems to be "willingly" trapped or tangled in a relationship or love affair that has her uncertain. Nicely illustrated and written.
RJ
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Your words are strong and delicate at the same time. She seems to be "willingly" trapped or tangled in a relationship or love affair that has her uncertain. Nicely illustrated and written.
RJ
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much, RJ
Gypsy hugs
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My pleasure
RJ
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I like the idea of being tangled in the night. Even when not together you will share the stars. This poem flows smoothly but I am wondering about the second line, remembering a touch would indicate that this couple isn't together. That could be problematic. Great poem. Thank you.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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I like the idea of being tangled in the night. Even when not together you will share the stars. This poem flows smoothly but I am wondering about the second line, remembering a touch would indicate that this couple isn't together. That could be problematic. Great poem. Thank you.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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The couple is not together anymore but they both see the stars from where they are.
Thank you very much, Barbara
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
Some things in life, like the seasons or the ebb and flow of the seas and the stars at night, are common to all, but the intermingling of life and common bonds can change, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Some things in life, like the seasons or the ebb and flow of the seas and the stars at night, are common to all, but the intermingling of life and common bonds can change, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much, Roy
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
aw so much bittersweet emotion weaves through this...
great imagery of sharing the stars
smooth flow throughout
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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aw so much bittersweet emotion weaves through this...
great imagery of sharing the stars
smooth flow throughout
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
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Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy 😊