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Summer Sizzle 🔥

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Comment from Carlos' girl
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It's ok if you think bra and spa rhyme. They aren't even slant rhymes though. So I guess I'd rewrite this poem so it qualifies as an essence poem

But I'll leave that to you...

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 14-Aug-2024
    Hi there, thanks for stopping by and for the generous rating. English is my first language, and I'm familiar with its pronunciation across a number of countries and regions, although I am continually surprised to discover new accents, particularly in rural parts of the US (I am also from a rural area that butchers words like "Worcestershire", no pun intended, as that is the name of a type of sausage). That being said, if you look up "bra" and "spa" on Rhymezone or any dictionary in the world, I believe you will see that they do in fact rhyme (completely, and not as a near/slant rhyme) under conventional English pronunciation.

    The word "bra" however is a shortened word that developed from the word "brassiere" (French) where the first syllable is typically pronounced "bruh" (as in "hey bruh, got a light?") so it would not surprise me if there is some area of the US that speaks it that way (like perhaps in Louisiana which had French influence?), or maybe a different way. If you're willing to share where in the US you are from and how it's pronounced in your region, I would be grateful to hear about it.

    Kind regards,

    🦍
reply by Carlos' girl on 14-Aug-2024
    Ok. I'm not interested in explaining how these words do not rhyme
reply by Carlos' girl on 14-Aug-2024
    In none of the English speaking world do these word rhyme.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2024
    They do in mine, and the CEC apparently agrees with me, but you are welcome to write to them about it.
reply by Carlos' girl on 14-Aug-2024
    What rhymes with bra?
    Law
    Saw
    Caw

    What rhymes with spa?
    Hah
    Fa la la la la
Comment from Pamusart
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Hi

This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!

If it's sizzling hot, why would you be in a spa? Wouldn't that make you hotter?

There I go again being too overly analytical. It's just a poem. It doesn't have to make sense.

I chuckled on this. With the gorilla and the girl in the image that's even funnier.

But I noticed she still has her bra on although it looks like it might be coming off. It doesn't look like it can hold her boobies

I enjoyed reading your poem

Good job. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
    Pam, great question. Maybe it was an artificial heat lamp in the spa? Or maybe hotness was about more than the sunlight. Some member here who has blocked me has some quote on all her reviews about poetry healing the wounds inflicted by reason, which seems like a better answer, haha. Thanks for the great review and glad you enjoyed this.
Comment from RodG
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An amusing image you created here. I can easily understand how this brunette might forget her bra in the spa on a hot day.
You have filled the requirements of an essence poem very well. Rod

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
    Thanks so much Rod. The original pic I had on here was slightly more intimate, but the AI didn't make her quite hot enough so I dialed her up from an 8 to a solid 9. LOL.

Comment from tempeste
Exceptional
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Ciao Harambe!

The format for this specific Essence poem has been clearly modified yet your entry not only follows this odd format but you executed it with flying colours.

The double internal rhyme in each line makes this modified Essence version even more challenging yet you nailed it!

Your poem is sizzling indeed.



 Comment Written 02-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
    Thank you very much Tempeste for the massive vote of confidence. It was a good challenge to have to fit so many rhymes in with so few syllables. Looking forward to more contests like this one.
reply by tempeste on 03-Aug-2024
    Your wee poem was inventive and
    it now has three votes ! 🔥🦍

    Best of luck! 🍀