Repugnant
a take-off on Rapunzel10 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is completely wacky and right up my street! It almost deserves a sequel with this pair of 90 degree nose-whistling soul mates, Repugnant and Repulsive. Well done for inventiveness and off-the-wall imagination:)) Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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This is completely wacky and right up my street! It almost deserves a sequel with this pair of 90 degree nose-whistling soul mates, Repugnant and Repulsive. Well done for inventiveness and off-the-wall imagination:)) Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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thanks, Debbie!
That's me, off the wall, nutty :)
It was fun to write.
Comment from Dr. Nad
I love your fairytale and I am going to vote for it. I found it funny from the beginning to the end. One of the morals of your fairytale that came to me was the moral that there is somebody for everybody. What may be a disability with denial for somebody may bring tranquility and a smile for somebody else. You got my vote
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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I love your fairytale and I am going to vote for it. I found it funny from the beginning to the end. One of the morals of your fairytale that came to me was the moral that there is somebody for everybody. What may be a disability with denial for somebody may bring tranquility and a smile for somebody else. You got my vote
Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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thank you, Dr. Nad! I truly appreciate your words and your vote!!!!
precious baby!
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You are most welcome my friend! I just checked and you are tied for first place. And yes, one of those was my vote.
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for which I am very grateful!!!
Comment from Wendy G
Lol. What an imaginative story. You told it so very well, and I am glad it ended happily for both and that they realised there were indeed some advantages in being a little different. Very well done. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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Lol. What an imaginative story. You told it so very well, and I am glad it ended happily for both and that they realised there were indeed some advantages in being a little different. Very well done. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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thanks, Wendy, for your very nice comments and the good wishes. I had fun writing it.
Comment from lyenochka
You put a very creative spin that that old fairytale. I like how you showed us two young people who were not afraid to keep working on improving themselves despite all the strikes against them. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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You put a very creative spin that that old fairytale. I like how you showed us two young people who were not afraid to keep working on improving themselves despite all the strikes against them. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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Thanks, Helen. It was fun to write. And I very much appreciate the 6!!!!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I love the use of juxtaposition here: "only the witch thought the maiden's nose was much more magnificent than her own, so she imprisoned her to keep her out of sight," Your play on words is effective. "called her Repugnant." this is so excellent I have to give it an A+. I thoroughly enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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I love the use of juxtaposition here: "only the witch thought the maiden's nose was much more magnificent than her own, so she imprisoned her to keep her out of sight," Your play on words is effective. "called her Repugnant." this is so excellent I have to give it an A+. I thoroughly enjoyed it.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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thank you so much, Liz, for your comments and for the 6!!
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I was a teacher so you know that six did not come easily
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well however it came, It is much appreciated :)
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I hope you did well
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thanks! haven't heard anything.
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Do you know where the voting spot is You can see how well you're doing on that.
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I just checked & voted...you have 4 votes..the top is 5...make sure you vote for yourself...that'll bring you up to 5
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thank you! You're so kind!
Afraid I already voted, earlier. Fingers crossed!
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yep. thanks.
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SMILE
Comment from Begin Again
Oh, I wish I had a six! This was absolutely hilarious and entertaining. Poor Rapunzel has lost her spot in fairytale land to Repugnant and Repulsive and the witch has met her match. Quite the humor! A great entry for the contest.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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Oh, I wish I had a six! This was absolutely hilarious and entertaining. Poor Rapunzel has lost her spot in fairytale land to Repugnant and Repulsive and the witch has met her match. Quite the humor! A great entry for the contest.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much, Carol. You made my day!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is hilarious, inventive and I enjoyed the read. It is about time we embraced something ugly in life as we live in a world where we are all supposed to be pretty to get on. I thoroughly enjoyed this post, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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This is hilarious, inventive and I enjoyed the read. It is about time we embraced something ugly in life as we live in a world where we are all supposed to be pretty to get on. I thoroughly enjoyed this post, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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thanks, Dolly! the older I get, the more I empathize :)
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Nice, happy, & silly, my 3 bears is going over like a lead balloon. You never know what people will like, do you? Unpacking occupies most of my time. Karen :-)
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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Nice, happy, & silly, my 3 bears is going over like a lead balloon. You never know what people will like, do you? Unpacking occupies most of my time. Karen :-)
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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silly is right. thanks for reading.
Comment from LJbutterfly
Bravo! I loved this delightful retelling of Repunzel. Especially creative is the names Repugnant and Repulsive. I smiled when I read the songs the Young married couple sang. Great job. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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Bravo! I loved this delightful retelling of Repunzel. Especially creative is the names Repugnant and Repulsive. I smiled when I read the songs the Young married couple sang. Great job. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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thank you so much. I appreciate your very nice comments!
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Love love love this!
Your story is a charming and imaginative fairy tale with a delightful twist. The playful and detailed descriptions of the characters, especially their unique traits and the humorous resolution, make it engaging and entertaining. The progression from the maiden's initial predicament to the whimsical ending with the pub and new wave songs is creative and well-developed.
There are some areas that could be improved with punctuation edit.
Here are two examples
1. "She skipped around her circular room, singing 'Zippity Doo Dah' and other perky songs." (Added single quotes around the song title.)
2. "Repugnant couldn't believe her ears; she raced to the window, leaned out, and stared down at the young man." (Replaced comma with a semicolon for correct clause separation.)
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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Love love love this!
Your story is a charming and imaginative fairy tale with a delightful twist. The playful and detailed descriptions of the characters, especially their unique traits and the humorous resolution, make it engaging and entertaining. The progression from the maiden's initial predicament to the whimsical ending with the pub and new wave songs is creative and well-developed.
There are some areas that could be improved with punctuation edit.
Here are two examples
1. "She skipped around her circular room, singing 'Zippity Doo Dah' and other perky songs." (Added single quotes around the song title.)
2. "Repugnant couldn't believe her ears; she raced to the window, leaned out, and stared down at the young man." (Replaced comma with a semicolon for correct clause separation.)
Comment Written 01-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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punctuation has never been my strong suit, so thanks.
I'm glad you liked my story and appreciate your comments.