thoughts and feelings in poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 54 "A stroll through the zoo"poems reflecting my thoughts and feelings
23 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading this contest entry. It flowed smoothly and I enjoyed reading. Good luck with the contest.
But I knew that that little boy would be alright. (You can omit a 'that' if you need it for syllable count change the second one to 'the')
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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I enjoyed reading this contest entry. It flowed smoothly and I enjoyed reading. Good luck with the contest.
But I knew that that little boy would be alright. (You can omit a 'that' if you need it for syllable count change the second one to 'the')
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate it. I will go in amd make the change thanks.
Comment from Shirley Ann Bunyan
You gave a great poetic account of your brave monkey business at the zoo. I do love a poem that tells a story and you did this very well adding in a dash of humour. Well done.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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You gave a great poetic account of your brave monkey business at the zoo. I do love a poem that tells a story and you did this very well adding in a dash of humour. Well done.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your review and kind words. I do appreciate it.
Comment from ESOSTINE
This poem is very hilarious and painted an act of bravery. Creativity and imagination become one in this poem. Consider reviewing the syllable count and the pace to improve the flow. Well done, dear S.M., and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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This poem is very hilarious and painted an act of bravery. Creativity and imagination become one in this poem. Consider reviewing the syllable count and the pace to improve the flow. Well done, dear S.M., and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your review and comments. I do appreciate it.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Haha, this made me laugh about your reasons for the zoo not being much fun anymore.
About the rhyming contest. The flow is a little bit uneven, detracting from the rhyming of the piece.
But overall this is humorous and fun to read.
The picture is a great choice for this and it adds to the humorous nature of the poem.
Thanks for the laughs.
Jesse
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Haha, this made me laugh about your reasons for the zoo not being much fun anymore.
About the rhyming contest. The flow is a little bit uneven, detracting from the rhyming of the piece.
But overall this is humorous and fun to read.
The picture is a great choice for this and it adds to the humorous nature of the poem.
Thanks for the laughs.
Jesse
Comment Written 03-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your time reviewing this I do appreciate it. Glad it made you smile. hope you have a great day.
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Have a good weekend.
Jesse
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Oh wow!!! What a hero you were, S.M. I admire the way you just reacted without thinking and held onto the monkey until help could come. And, a free pass for a year!! Of course, now you're not so sure you want to go.
Well written poem that flowed so well it seemed like prose. Your rhythm and rhyme were spot on.
Hugs,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Oh wow!!! What a hero you were, S.M. I admire the way you just reacted without thinking and held onto the monkey until help could come. And, a free pass for a year!! Of course, now you're not so sure you want to go.
Well written poem that flowed so well it seemed like prose. Your rhythm and rhyme were spot on.
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment Written 03-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your review and comments. I do appreciate it.
Comment from Neonewman
Monkeys are pretty clever problem solvers. Zoos are wonderful, but captivity is not. All the animals may long for their original homes. This is an excellent piece you have delivered.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Monkeys are pretty clever problem solvers. Zoos are wonderful, but captivity is not. All the animals may long for their original homes. This is an excellent piece you have delivered.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Steve I am thankful for your review and comments. I agree with you that all the animals would want to be in their own natural environment. But if it were not for the zoos some of would not really see how wonderful and beautiful God's creatures are. God bless you also.
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I agree, and love to go myself.
Comment from gramalot8
Zoos can be a fun and entertaining experience... but a lit of the times it's on the sad side. Are those animals really happy and content in their caged environments? Even if not csged, is their areas to roam sufficient and safe?
Your words definitely bring these questions to the forefront. Thanks for sharing your thoughts with us.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Zoos can be a fun and entertaining experience... but a lit of the times it's on the sad side. Are those animals really happy and content in their caged environments? Even if not csged, is their areas to roam sufficient and safe?
Your words definitely bring these questions to the forefront. Thanks for sharing your thoughts with us.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your review I do appreciate it. I am sure they would rather be in their natural environment. Hope you have a good day.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, A Stroll Through the Zoo, presented with four AABB-rhymed quatrains, presents either a fictional or more terribly an actual monkey scare in the zoo. It would really put me off my zoo going.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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This poem, A Stroll Through the Zoo, presented with four AABB-rhymed quatrains, presents either a fictional or more terribly an actual monkey scare in the zoo. It would really put me off my zoo going.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your review and yes, I love going to the zoo with my grandchildren. This is fiction. I hope you have a great day.
Comment from LJbutterfly
I enjoyed your delightful story in a poem describing courage and bravery. It sounds as though the zookeepers were not vigilant in recognizing dangers to the animals or the guests frequenting the zoo. This is a very imaginative story. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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I enjoyed your delightful story in a poem describing courage and bravery. It sounds as though the zookeepers were not vigilant in recognizing dangers to the animals or the guests frequenting the zoo. This is a very imaginative story. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much for your review comments and best wishes, I do appreciate it. Have a good day.
Comment from royowen
That poor monkey, he made his escape, but he prevailed because he was caught again, but let's face it he would never have made it if he had made it into the wide world. Wrtitten in a slightly varied meter in sabbath rhyming, great theme and language, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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That poor monkey, he made his escape, but he prevailed because he was caught again, but let's face it he would never have made it if he had made it into the wide world. Wrtitten in a slightly varied meter in sabbath rhyming, great theme and language, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 01-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Thank you.