The Missing Pieces
When everyone is gone14 total reviews
Comment from LaDana Taylor1
Once again I'm somewhat confused and yet find myself drawn to your work it encourages me to continue my writings while learning different genre of writings and what's excepted and what's not again good work from your newbie friend.
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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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Once again I'm somewhat confused and yet find myself drawn to your work it encourages me to continue my writings while learning different genre of writings and what's excepted and what's not again good work from your newbie friend.
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Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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Since you rated it four stars, do you mind helping me out on what you would have changed? It's difficult when the story is limited to only a certain amount of words such as this one. It was about a woman who felt she'd been left alone when her grandmother died and by some miracle, she discovered a woman wearing the same necklace...it was her mother who had left years ago.
Smiles, Carol
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I wouldn't change a thing it's your writing your thoughts and I'm not here to judge any writer we all see things differently just because we don't always view something the same doesn't mean it's wrong truth beign said I myself don't like writing reviews because we all have our own perspective and how we view things even in our writings you're a very very good writer and probably probably been a writer many more years than me lol and who is the student to correct the teacher again I'm learning the pros and cons to beign a writer and even from running out the gate I know that not all my writings will be seen with the eyes and intent I wrote them again my thoughts was that a four rating was good please don't change your writings it's how you see things and not about how I see them.
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Not a problem at all. Everyone sees and hears what they read in their own way. I don't have a problem with that all all. My only suggestion was that it is hard to judge the book by only one chapter. Thank you again for understanding and for commenting.
Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from pome lover
I have read this several times, trying to understand it. So, her grandmother , before she died, gave her a locket that had belonged to her mother, who for some reason, she had never known. And the mother arrives,joins her, overlooking the sea, bent on suicide, and finds her daughter? That is probably not right. It's a fascinating story but I need a bit of help.
Anyway, congratulations for winning!
Katharine
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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I have read this several times, trying to understand it. So, her grandmother , before she died, gave her a locket that had belonged to her mother, who for some reason, she had never known. And the mother arrives,joins her, overlooking the sea, bent on suicide, and finds her daughter? That is probably not right. It's a fascinating story but I need a bit of help.
Anyway, congratulations for winning!
Katharine
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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It's hard to get a full story into so few words...You are right thought that was the basis of the story I was trying to tell. Thanks again...
smiles, Carol
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ah. good :)
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Congrats, Carol, on your contest win! What a charming and spiritual theme of reunion between mother and child! The image is also perfect and enhances the haunting quality of the flash/dash:) Well done! Debbie
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Congrats, Carol, on your contest win! What a charming and spiritual theme of reunion between mother and child! The image is also perfect and enhances the haunting quality of the flash/dash:) Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Debbie! I appreciate the review and the best wishes on this flash. It was a feel good moment that just happened to come to me. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word story, The Missing Pieces, has the proper word count and brings two together, previously separated by life's unfair turns. This is a miracle by anyone's standards.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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This one-hundred-word story, The Missing Pieces, has the proper word count and brings two together, previously separated by life's unfair turns. This is a miracle by anyone's standards.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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I like miracle's and happy endings. I hope you do too! thank you for the review and the comments. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a lovely ending! God did listen to her, the older woman was her mother, aww. She was wearing a locket the same as Jesse. I really liked this one, it was so uplifting. Well done and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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What a lovely ending! God did listen to her, the older woman was her mother, aww. She was wearing a locket the same as Jesse. I really liked this one, it was so uplifting. Well done and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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thank you, Sandra. I guess my thoughts are stuck in sappy mode and wanting people to unite.... miracles do happen. Appreciate your kindness and best wishes. Have a great day!
Comment from Kaiku
Excellent. One of those little stories that carried the impact of the ocean's fury and brought a smile of wonderment upon its crashing beauty. Well done and a simple but very moving end.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Excellent. One of those little stories that carried the impact of the ocean's fury and brought a smile of wonderment upon its crashing beauty. Well done and a simple but very moving end.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much for stopping by to read my flash and to enjoy it. The ocean or any body of water has always been my thinking place, somewhere to connect. Have a great day and thank you for the awesome stars.
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Of course
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Interesting take on things. Succinctly put. The picture is divine. Waves crashing, overcast or at dusk. The figure with head down slightly looking at the enormity of life. Very well done.Karen
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Interesting take on things. Succinctly put. The picture is divine. Waves crashing, overcast or at dusk. The figure with head down slightly looking at the enormity of life. Very well done.Karen
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Karen. It was one of those moments when a life thought passed through and became words on my page. Appreciate the review and comments. Have a great day!
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You too. Karen
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, interesting. I guess the frail woman was or may be Jesse's mother. But, I think Jesse's pain would be more understandable if she wasn't mourning the death of her Grandmother. I mean, how long do people live for? Why feel forsaken? It is not a shock or a surprise when the old die. That's what is supposed to happen.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Hmm, interesting. I guess the frail woman was or may be Jesse's mother. But, I think Jesse's pain would be more understandable if she wasn't mourning the death of her Grandmother. I mean, how long do people live for? Why feel forsaken? It is not a shock or a surprise when the old die. That's what is supposed to happen.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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True but when it is your last connection to family, it's very difficult. Lose your entire family and life becomes very different. thank you for your thoughts and review. Have a great day!
Comment from Wendy G
A great short story, and it leaves the reader wondering about the backstory for both of these characters, and the significance of the locket for each. And one wonders about the future too, for each one and for them together. Well done.
Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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A great short story, and it leaves the reader wondering about the backstory for both of these characters, and the significance of the locket for each. And one wonders about the future too, for each one and for them together. Well done.
Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Thanks, Wendy!
I think I see another story looming on the horizon! LOL
thank you for your kind review and thoughts.
Have a great day!
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is an engaging flash fiction story of uncertainty, confusion, and love. Your introduction and story development established Jesse's challenge. Your resolution was satisfying, while you artwork paired perfectly. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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This is an engaging flash fiction story of uncertainty, confusion, and love. Your introduction and story development established Jesse's challenge. Your resolution was satisfying, while you artwork paired perfectly. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much, LOrraine, for your kind and accurate review. You have a knack of picking up on the character's emotions and enjoying the flavor of the moment. Thank you! Have a great day!