You Love Poem in 15 words
You love Poem3 total reviews
Comment from royowen
A beautifully written entry in this poetic contest, and I think you've done it, it's jot easy to expound the virtues of love in fifteen words but by gad you've done it, good luck my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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A beautifully written entry in this poetic contest, and I think you've done it, it's jot easy to expound the virtues of love in fifteen words but by gad you've done it, good luck my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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thanks a lot
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Welcome
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Your poem beautifully captures the ongoing enchantment of love with its concise and evocative imagery. The lines "love sparks from heart to heart" and "your love mojo working overtime" convey a sense of timeless connection and admiration.
To enhance the poem, you might consider adjusting the verb tense for clarity and consistency. For example, changing "still mesmerized me" to "still mesmerize me" aligns the verb tense with the present focus of the poem, making the sentiment feel more immediate and vivid. This slight tweak helps maintain a consistent tone throughout.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Your poem beautifully captures the ongoing enchantment of love with its concise and evocative imagery. The lines "love sparks from heart to heart" and "your love mojo working overtime" convey a sense of timeless connection and admiration.
To enhance the poem, you might consider adjusting the verb tense for clarity and consistency. For example, changing "still mesmerized me" to "still mesmerize me" aligns the verb tense with the present focus of the poem, making the sentiment feel more immediate and vivid. This slight tweak helps maintain a consistent tone throughout.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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thanks for the suggestions
Comment from CornishChick
You say a LOT with the given challenge of 15 words! Kudos for that! Your choice of words is quite creative. Makes me wish I had what you have! Ah, well... maybe someday! Not sure if you should have the "d" on mesmerize. It's always hard to tell with poetry as that genre bends rules in every direction!
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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You say a LOT with the given challenge of 15 words! Kudos for that! Your choice of words is quite creative. Makes me wish I had what you have! Ah, well... maybe someday! Not sure if you should have the "d" on mesmerize. It's always hard to tell with poetry as that genre bends rules in every direction!
Comment Written 25-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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thanks a lot