The Peasant Bethany
75 Word Flash Fiction contest entry14 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. I would say this King's daughter had the final say. I enjoyed reading and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. I would say this King's daughter had the final say. I enjoyed reading and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Thank you for the kind review, Barbara. Yes, I'd say she sure did. Lol. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have yourself a great night.
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Ron
Comment from Bill Schott
This seventy-five-word story, The Peasant Bethany, has the proper word count and brings the cast-out Bethany back to the throne with an "in your face" acceptance of her earned crown.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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This seventy-five-word story, The Peasant Bethany, has the proper word count and brings the cast-out Bethany back to the throne with an "in your face" acceptance of her earned crown.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Lol. Thank you for the great review, Bill.
Ron
Comment from Begin Again
Girl Power! My father never thought I was good enough because I wasn't a boy....His son let him down but I was there till the end. Don't ever count us out.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Girl Power! My father never thought I was good enough because I wasn't a boy....His son let him down but I was there till the end. Don't ever count us out.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 19-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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That's for sure. Thank you for the great review and stars, Carol. Have yourself a great rest of your weekend.
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Ron
Comment from Gloria ....
I think you adhered to the contest rules brilliantly. It is fiction, and it is a story told in 75 words. There was no mention anywhere that it had to be prose.
So definitely a six star work. Wishing you great luck with the contest committee. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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I think you adhered to the contest rules brilliantly. It is fiction, and it is a story told in 75 words. There was no mention anywhere that it had to be prose.
So definitely a six star work. Wishing you great luck with the contest committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 19-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Hey, Gloria, hello. Thank you so much for the fantastic review and big sixer. I really did it this way for more of a challenge to myself, to use exactly 75 words and still have it in meter while trying to say what I needed. Lol. I dearly appreciate the kind review and rating, G. Have yourself a great rest of your weekend and thank you again.
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Ron
Comment from Natureschild
This is a well-crafted narrative poem with strong imagery and a compelling theme. The imagery is vivid, particularly in the lines "a peasant raised in dirt" and "her men drew swords and charged the kingdom's throne." It does tell a complete story. Nicely done. - Terry
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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This is a well-crafted narrative poem with strong imagery and a compelling theme. The imagery is vivid, particularly in the lines "a peasant raised in dirt" and "her men drew swords and charged the kingdom's throne." It does tell a complete story. Nicely done. - Terry
Comment Written 19-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Terry. I really appreciate the generous stars and stop in. I'm glad you liked this little tale. Have yourself a great night.
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Ron
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You are most welcome.
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written and I enjoyed very much listening to it. It is hard to tell a complete story and 75 words, but you have done a beautiful job with this. May you have a blessed weekend. Patricia.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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This is very well written and I enjoyed very much listening to it. It is hard to tell a complete story and 75 words, but you have done a beautiful job with this. May you have a blessed weekend. Patricia.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Thank you for the kind review, Patricia. The hardest part was getting exactly 75 words to fit into meter and still tell the story. I really appreciate the gracious stars and stop in, Patricia. I'm glad you liked this little tale.
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Ron
Comment from Liz O'Neill
A very important concept. I'm glad you're addressing this issue. This becomes a good role model for women. Especially after the way her father treated her and regarded her. Well done.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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A very important concept. I'm glad you're addressing this issue. This becomes a good role model for women. Especially after the way her father treated her and regarded her. Well done.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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Thank you for the great review and generous stars, Liz. I'm glad you liked this short piece.
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Heavy duty
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Heavy duty
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine poem, loved the rhymes and flow and I enjoyed the story, good luck with the contest. A clever and skilful post. Greed and power is more highly regarded than family at times, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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A fine poem, loved the rhymes and flow and I enjoyed the story, good luck with the contest. A clever and skilful post. Greed and power is more highly regarded than family at times, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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Thank you for the great review, Dolly. I appreciate the stars and stop in. I'm glad you liked the piece.
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Ron
Comment from Wendy G
Very intersting twist to the normal conventions for a flash-fiction - but why not? You told an imaginative story with rhyme to boot. I enjoyed the twist, that although being a girl and hence a disappointment she took the crown and moved from peasant to royalty. Obviously a very strong young woman. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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Very intersting twist to the normal conventions for a flash-fiction - but why not? You told an imaginative story with rhyme to boot. I enjoyed the twist, that although being a girl and hence a disappointment she took the crown and moved from peasant to royalty. Obviously a very strong young woman. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Wendy. I really just wanted to challenge myself a bit more than just a 75 word story. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked this dark, little piece.
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Ron
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Joan,
This is such an exquisite poem; I love all things medieval and Renaissance and you've created an ambience of old with 75 words!
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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Joan,
This is such an exquisite poem; I love all things medieval and Renaissance and you've created an ambience of old with 75 words!
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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Thank you for the kind review, Cindy. I think you might be confusing me with Dragonpoet. I'm pretty sure her name is Joan. I appreciate the kind review and generous stars. I'm glad you liked this dark piece.
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Ron