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Comment from Tim Margetts
Damn, Karen.
That's a pretty awesomely gruesome and strangely satisfying tale.
I can see why you won the contest.
My, my. What a marvellously twisted woman you are.
Remind me never to cross you ;-)
Tim x
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Damn, Karen.
That's a pretty awesomely gruesome and strangely satisfying tale.
I can see why you won the contest.
My, my. What a marvellously twisted woman you are.
Remind me never to cross you ;-)
Tim x
Comment Written 12-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Wise thinking there pally. Pick a few of yours for me to read. I did two pieces for Halloween " Halloween Hijinks" and "A Room of my Own", take a gander.
This is fun. Karen
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If you havent read them yet, I was particularly happy with "The Midnight Hour" and "A playground for all the family."
Only having been on here a short while I don't have a lot on here yet but these are 2 shorts that I enjoyed writing.
Mostly though I post poetry and my book.
Tim x
Comment from karenina
Okay, so it's tough when I'm not notified of a contest entry and I think that's what happened here. So, belated congratulations on the win, first of all!
I often skip by the sexual warning stuff... Knowing your talent I had to take a peek.
After eons of women being used and abused by men from every class, country, age, religion, race, etc. -- It is gross --but satisfying to see Karma enter your story and give one man what he deserves.
May he be a metaphor come to life for all the sexual predators out there!
Your writing was tight and crisp. Alliteration added to the thrill. Mostly?
After working at battered women's shelters as a volunteer for years I've seen the broken women come crawling in...
I say BRAVO to the non-human in bed three paying the piper!
Karenina
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Okay, so it's tough when I'm not notified of a contest entry and I think that's what happened here. So, belated congratulations on the win, first of all!
I often skip by the sexual warning stuff... Knowing your talent I had to take a peek.
After eons of women being used and abused by men from every class, country, age, religion, race, etc. -- It is gross --but satisfying to see Karma enter your story and give one man what he deserves.
May he be a metaphor come to life for all the sexual predators out there!
Your writing was tight and crisp. Alliteration added to the thrill. Mostly?
After working at battered women's shelters as a volunteer for years I've seen the broken women come crawling in...
I say BRAVO to the non-human in bed three paying the piper!
Karenina
Comment Written 30-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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I don't know where it came from. It just poured out of me one day. Hardly any edits at all. Just straight writing.
My body doesn't work good but my brain does, fair trade. Thanks for the six. They are so shiny! Karen :-)
Karen :-)
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Well deserved!
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I was in some mood that day. I have written a few things as blind entires so I tell folks to go to my page to read my stuff. Blind entries are stupid.
All they really do is screw us from being read. :-)
Comment from EeanBlack
Well now. For a moment I resembled one of the big burly guys, but that ended rather quickly. Lol. I cannot say I care for the guy at all. Got what he deserved. You are pleasantly deranged. I like that.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Well now. For a moment I resembled one of the big burly guys, but that ended rather quickly. Lol. I cannot say I care for the guy at all. Got what he deserved. You are pleasantly deranged. I like that.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Am I blushing? Thank You, you gave me a six. gave me a six, thank you. I love that picture. She is so sultry. She looks like trouble. Deranged maybe, but pleasantly??? :-)
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All in fun.
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I wrote "How to Discourage a Guest" read that and seen if you can keep from laughing.
I had some help. Karen
Comment from Ric Myworld
This is Karen at her best! I'm so disappointed that I missed this one when it was posted, but as we know, I don't get notified about the contest entries. Congratulations on your outstanding and very deserved blue ribbon winner! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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This is Karen at her best! I'm so disappointed that I missed this one when it was posted, but as we know, I don't get notified about the contest entries. Congratulations on your outstanding and very deserved blue ribbon winner! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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I had a hard time on this one. I always do when there is no humor. But, the ironic twist on the end, was slinking in the room all the time! I like that part the most. "-)
Comment from nomi338
This alarming tale proves without question or doubt, Karma is very definitely a bitch. If you so desire, she will quickly scratch your itch. Some never get it until it is way too late to change the fate that waits.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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This alarming tale proves without question or doubt, Karma is very definitely a bitch. If you so desire, she will quickly scratch your itch. Some never get it until it is way too late to change the fate that waits.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much for the six. I went to two styles I have used rarely.Sensuousness and ugly revenge. I hope you liked them. Karen
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As a man with a healthy respect for sensuality, I was somewhat turned on, then awakened by the observance of revenge bein enacted upon one who richly deserved it.
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I am glad I did good in both arenas. Let's see if I am any good at scifi"-)
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Bring it.
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I am in a cranky mood these days Saturday I am going to my storage unit in Houston to empty it and give a lot of stuff away.
You can't fit a three bedroom house into a one bedroom apartment. I am mad and sad. Karen
Comment from Begin Again
Karma can be a "b..ch"! Or so I am told.....Quite a graphic bit of a reminder you've told with your words. Good luck in the contest. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Karma can be a "b..ch"! Or so I am told.....Quite a graphic bit of a reminder you've told with your words. Good luck in the contest. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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I find it odd that some people asked what he did wrong to merit Karma. I told them in paragraph two! He had any woman he wanted, even if they didn't want him. I thought that was plain. Maybe I should have said, And Belinda Dowd was a kicker, he had to tie her down. Advice please .
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Well, if it weren't such a horrible pun, I'd write "I guess he got what was coming to him." Thank goodness, I'm too above making a corn-cob...I mean CORNY... joke like that!
This stole the show, for SURE. Ordinarily, I demur from reading stories with the Over Eighteen warning (and not just because I'm just scraping past that age requirement, either...okay; that's a bald-face lie) But my Little Voice told me I should make an exception this time, and I am very glad I did. It was erotic without being vulgar and/or just plain gross, and that can be, well, you know, something hard to achieve.
Anyway, GREAT entry. It's a shame some might not read it because of the warning, but oh well! Their loss. xoxo
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Well, if it weren't such a horrible pun, I'd write "I guess he got what was coming to him." Thank goodness, I'm too above making a corn-cob...I mean CORNY... joke like that!
This stole the show, for SURE. Ordinarily, I demur from reading stories with the Over Eighteen warning (and not just because I'm just scraping past that age requirement, either...okay; that's a bald-face lie) But my Little Voice told me I should make an exception this time, and I am very glad I did. It was erotic without being vulgar and/or just plain gross, and that can be, well, you know, something hard to achieve.
Anyway, GREAT entry. It's a shame some might not read it because of the warning, but oh well! Their loss. xoxo
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Thanks for the read. I appreciate you going over the wall do so.The comings and goings of bad people need to be revealed. Laid bare for all to see. Thanks again.
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You were doing GREAT in the polls last night when I cast ballot for you. 7 to 4 was the first-to-second-place ratio at that point.
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I edited a bit. Some folks didn't get it that in paragraph two I was telling them he raped women. So, I made it clear. Thanks for the kindness.
Karen
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Really? I guess a lot of people aren't up on innuendi.
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I tried to be a lady about it all. However, I reached inside all pulled out a little crudeness. And, it did make it a bit better.
Who knew? Thanks for your thoughts.:-)
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Oh, please! This is no time to start being a lady! xoxo
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you and gretchen are doing a fab job on your story But I sure wish I could have had a picture with you in poo curlers.
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Well, KTC, that's why G-d gave you an imagination!! xo
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it's KTC. And why can't you read Debbie D'arcy's poem? Has she muted you? If so, I am shocked. Anyhoo I sent it to you. people here are seven years old. Karen
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Yes. And yes, they are.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Well, I'm quite glad we had the warning! This was particularly creepy. I don't know what warranted this very unpleasant punishment from Rag, Tag and Bobtail but he was in for a rude awakening! Great build-up. Perhaps more could have come out about his wrongdoings so that the punishment matched the crime. But a well presented and entertaining read. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Well, I'm quite glad we had the warning! This was particularly creepy. I don't know what warranted this very unpleasant punishment from Rag, Tag and Bobtail but he was in for a rude awakening! Great build-up. Perhaps more could have come out about his wrongdoings so that the punishment matched the crime. But a well presented and entertaining read. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Thanks for the read. I appreciate you going over the wall do so.The comings and goings of bad people need to be revealed. Laid bare for all to see. in paragrah two, he said, He had all the women he wanted, even the ones that didn't want him. That is rape. Perhaps even kidnapping. Maybe even forced servitude. Paybacks a bitch. Thanks again for the read.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
You painted a gruesome picture, which ties in with societal mores, ut at the end I became puzzled for what was it Mitchell had done to warrant being abused
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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You painted a gruesome picture, which ties in with societal mores, ut at the end I became puzzled for what was it Mitchell had done to warrant being abused
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Thanks for the read. I appreciate you going over the wall do so.The comings and goings of bad people need to be revealed. Laid bare for all to see. In paragraph tw Mitchell said he ahd the wmen he wanted, even the ones that didn't want him. That is rape, maybe even kidnapping and forced servitude. I did not want to go into the details of that. His comuppance however, that I could manage.Thanks again.
Comment from Jim Wile
Well-written and sensual. It would have made a little more impact, though, if we had some inkling of what the punishment he received was karma for. You wouldn't need much, because the story is mainly in the act of karma itself, but just a little bit to justify it.
Other than that, enjoyable, sexy story.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Well-written and sensual. It would have made a little more impact, though, if we had some inkling of what the punishment he received was karma for. You wouldn't need much, because the story is mainly in the act of karma itself, but just a little bit to justify it.
Other than that, enjoyable, sexy story.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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In the second paragraph he said, he could have any woman he wanted, even if they didn't want him. That is called rape. That is a big nono. How did that pass you by? The picture pulled you in didn't it. The voting is today I hope I did okay. But anyhoo it was fun to write. Thanks for the read.
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Yeah, it just didn't strike me that way as rape, but I can be kind of thick sometimes. Maybe it was too subtle for me. Perhaps if it had said, "He would have his way with any woman he wanted, even if they didn't want him," I would have gotten it.
I just read it to my wife, and she didn't see rape in it either, and she is not thick like me. So, I don't know.
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I edited it a bit. All the way through. See what you think.
Karen
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I like this version much better. Good job!
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I thank you for the push. I hadn't wanted to be so crass and open, But, you pointed out that the story required it. It is a much better story now. Thanks. Karen
