Seven Lines
a six-line poem21 total reviews
Comment from Mintybee
This poem is funny. I liked this humourous lament over what could have been. Congratulations on winning the six line poem contest. You earned it.
Mintybee
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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This poem is funny. I liked this humourous lament over what could have been. Congratulations on winning the six line poem contest. You earned it.
Mintybee
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Mintybee
Comment from Wendy G
Very cleverly written. And yes, all hope is now gone, for the opportunity has been lost. I wish you could have had seven lines. Now I'll never know how you would have solved all the problems. lol. I love your wit. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Very cleverly written. And yes, all hope is now gone, for the opportunity has been lost. I wish you could have had seven lines. Now I'll never know how you would have solved all the problems. lol. I love your wit. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Wendy.
Comment from Dawn Munro
If I had seven lines instead,
I'd put the rivalry to bed!
But then you'd hate me,
wouldn't you -
with one sad star
rate this review.
(Just kidding, of course, but this was so much fun -- great poem!)
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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If I had seven lines instead,
I'd put the rivalry to bed!
But then you'd hate me,
wouldn't you -
with one sad star
rate this review.
(Just kidding, of course, but this was so much fun -- great poem!)
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Dawn, for giving this a look.
Comment from Steve Foreman
This is a great poem that illustrates the frustration we all have - there is just not enough lines for us to squeeze in all we need to say to get the job done! We have to omit some of our favorite and well loved phrases, because they won't fit into these damned six lines! A good subject choice!
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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This is a great poem that illustrates the frustration we all have - there is just not enough lines for us to squeeze in all we need to say to get the job done! We have to omit some of our favorite and well loved phrases, because they won't fit into these damned six lines! A good subject choice!
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Steve
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is very good Bill. Loved that 'the world pines' for that missing 7th line. A fun poem and very cleverly written. Don't wr all have those conversations where we solve the world's problems. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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This is very good Bill. Loved that 'the world pines' for that missing 7th line. A fun poem and very cleverly written. Don't wr all have those conversations where we solve the world's problems. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much, Valda.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We always want more, a bigger wardrobe, a bigger car or house, we are never satisfied as humans and your six lines proves this, an unusual and clever post for the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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We always want more, a bigger wardrobe, a bigger car or house, we are never satisfied as humans and your six lines proves this, an unusual and clever post for the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Dolly
Comment from Deborah Dybowski
This is a good unique poem beginning with, If I had. It could have gone
in many directions. I think you found the best way for it to go because
it deals with "today." You also have good rhyme.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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This is a good unique poem beginning with, If I had. It could have gone
in many directions. I think you found the best way for it to go because
it deals with "today." You also have good rhyme.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Deborah
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Hahaha. This is funny and clever - and what a wonderful rhyme scheme and meter you chose to use to with which to amuse us. Very cute, indeed. I hope it does well for you in the polls. xo
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Hahaha. This is funny and clever - and what a wonderful rhyme scheme and meter you chose to use to with which to amuse us. Very cute, indeed. I hope it does well for you in the polls. xo
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Rachelle
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My pleasure! xo
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My pleasure! xo
Comment from jessizero
This six line poem about seven lines was fun, and I liked your rhymes. I personally would love to know what could have been in those seven lines. :) Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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This six line poem about seven lines was fun, and I liked your rhymes. I personally would love to know what could have been in those seven lines. :) Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Seventh line:
Bada bing! Ya got ya thing!
Comment from A.Z. Schott
This is a cute poem. I like your rhyming and rhythm. Now, I wonder how he would've saved the world had he been given that seventh line.
Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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This is a cute poem. I like your rhyming and rhythm. Now, I wonder how he would've saved the world had he been given that seventh line.
Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Seventh line:
Bada bing! Ya got ya thing!