The Coyote Boys
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Blackberries"Story about two brothers who change their destiny.
18 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It's a shame it couldn't stay peaceful, and perhaps their dad could have an accident and shoot himself, LOL. I have this nasty feeling that the peace they are experiencing will disappear in the morning. So, where did he go with that gun? I've got another chapter to read, so I'm off now! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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It's a shame it couldn't stay peaceful, and perhaps their dad could have an accident and shoot himself, LOL. I have this nasty feeling that the peace they are experiencing will disappear in the morning. So, where did he go with that gun? I've got another chapter to read, so I'm off now! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Sandra. He probably did go off into the woods to go hunting, but used it as an excuse to get away from the family. Lol. Thank you so much for this. Gretchen
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Gretchen,
I'm glad the boys got a reprieve from the anger that their father seems to carry with him constantly. I'd love to be able to pick some blackberries. There were tons of them by the railroad track down in Charleston, but I had heard that the railroad sprayed the tracks to keep the weeds down, so we never picked them unfortunately. There were a bunch at a friends house in Sequim Washington too, but the bushes were all covered with spider webs, so I never picked those either.
I wonder where their dad was that he came home in such a good mood. It's hard to imagine he was up to anything good. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Hello Gretchen,
I'm glad the boys got a reprieve from the anger that their father seems to carry with him constantly. I'd love to be able to pick some blackberries. There were tons of them by the railroad track down in Charleston, but I had heard that the railroad sprayed the tracks to keep the weeds down, so we never picked them unfortunately. There were a bunch at a friends house in Sequim Washington too, but the bushes were all covered with spider webs, so I never picked those either.
I wonder where their dad was that he came home in such a good mood. It's hard to imagine he was up to anything good. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Tom. I think people who pick Blackberries should be combat pay. This prickly bushes are no joke. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Jim Wile
Even in this idyllic scene, you manage to give us such a sense of foreboding, Gretchen. This is so well written to build the tension between the rest of the family and Daddy. I fear this is only a brief respite and that they will soon come under the yoke of his wrath again.
And the only time we see him behaving decently is because he wants to have sex that night. What a total heel you have created with that character.
Looking forward to seeing if the boys, or Huck anyway, will at some point stand up to Daddy. Great writing. - Jim
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Even in this idyllic scene, you manage to give us such a sense of foreboding, Gretchen. This is so well written to build the tension between the rest of the family and Daddy. I fear this is only a brief respite and that they will soon come under the yoke of his wrath again.
And the only time we see him behaving decently is because he wants to have sex that night. What a total heel you have created with that character.
Looking forward to seeing if the boys, or Huck anyway, will at some point stand up to Daddy. Great writing. - Jim
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Those boys are ticking time bombs. Thank you do much for this awesome review and the extra star. Means a lot. Gretchen
Comment from lyenochka
Well, that compliment over the cobbler has gotten the rusty bed springs going! I don't know much about the rest of the book but I like the relationship of the brothers. It sounds like Huck has more sense than Dewey but seems to be a caring big brother who isn't going to try to explain the metaphor of the mountain to him.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Well, that compliment over the cobbler has gotten the rusty bed springs going! I don't know much about the rest of the book but I like the relationship of the brothers. It sounds like Huck has more sense than Dewey but seems to be a caring big brother who isn't going to try to explain the metaphor of the mountain to him.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much. I appreciate this encouraging review. Gretchen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a wonderful time for them when they are picking blackberries. I remember coming home from blackberry picking with poison ivy. Anyway, they should maybe worry with their father comes home without any game and he is nice to their mother. Very strange.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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This is a wonderful time for them when they are picking blackberries. I remember coming home from blackberry picking with poison ivy. Anyway, they should maybe worry with their father comes home without any game and he is nice to their mother. Very strange.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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I seriously doubt he was hunting. Just looking for mischief. Thank you so much for this nice review. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
Yes, daddy might interrupt things, but God allows the devil to shape, he makes bends in the road, one of the paradoxes I've discovered in life, God rules the roost, but we decide what and whom we serve, God is ultimately good, I think Dewey and Huck are finding, a godly mother shows the way, beautifully written Gretchen, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Yes, daddy might interrupt things, but God allows the devil to shape, he makes bends in the road, one of the paradoxes I've discovered in life, God rules the roost, but we decide what and whom we serve, God is ultimately good, I think Dewey and Huck are finding, a godly mother shows the way, beautifully written Gretchen, blessings Roy
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Thank you Roy. I felt the boys needed a slight reprieve. Gretchen
Comment from Brett Matthew West
From the pleasures of simple living and cobbler, to listening to the sound of "rusty bed springs" while the folks make baby number three.
Makes one wonder what got into the father character?
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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From the pleasures of simple living and cobbler, to listening to the sound of "rusty bed springs" while the folks make baby number three.
Makes one wonder what got into the father character?
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Who knows. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I have a feeling this is the calm before the storm. You're doing a great job telling this story.
I think I could stay here forever," he sighs. (forever." He sighs. Sigh isn't a speech tag.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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I have a feeling this is the calm before the storm. You're doing a great job telling this story.
I think I could stay here forever," he sighs. (forever." He sighs. Sigh isn't a speech tag.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Barbara. Gretchen
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written, and I enjoyed listening to it very very much your sin structure of your paragraphing and your punctuation is all very good. I wish you the very best with all of your writing and I also wish you a very good week. Patricia.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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This is very well written, and I enjoyed listening to it very very much your sin structure of your paragraphing and your punctuation is all very good. I wish you the very best with all of your writing and I also wish you a very good week. Patricia.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed this. Gretchen
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Poor Huck; the perfect day ruined by them damn grown-ups in the next room.
You painted such a lovely picture of a perfect day for two simple boys who want only to have no hassles. Even they understand that it's temporary, but they take the happiness as it comes.
Excellent work, Gretchen. xoxo
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Poor Huck; the perfect day ruined by them damn grown-ups in the next room.
You painted such a lovely picture of a perfect day for two simple boys who want only to have no hassles. Even they understand that it's temporary, but they take the happiness as it comes.
Excellent work, Gretchen. xoxo
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Thank you! Glad for the nice review. Gretchen