The Fix
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "The Fix - Chapter Seventeen"A mother fights to prove her son's innocence
10 total reviews
Comment from Daylily
This is a good account of the personal investigation underway, Jacob. You might think about adding the name: DI Dominic Hitchens to the character listing as I cannot place who it is. I am enjoying your story very much.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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This is a good account of the personal investigation underway, Jacob. You might think about adding the name: DI Dominic Hitchens to the character listing as I cannot place who it is. I am enjoying your story very much.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Thank you, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It does sound like she believes Tracey now. Why was Susannah in such a good mood that her workmate noticed. She had to be meeting someone. And whoever it was, must have killed her. But why? Hmm, there are more questions than answers. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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It does sound like she believes Tracey now. Why was Susannah in such a good mood that her workmate noticed. She had to be meeting someone. And whoever it was, must have killed her. But why? Hmm, there are more questions than answers. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Thank you Sandra.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Jacob, I really enjoy this story which is now taking a new direction I wonder why Susannah is so excited. Also, congratulations on your 100 posts milestone. All best, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Hi Jacob, I really enjoy this story which is now taking a new direction I wonder why Susannah is so excited. Also, congratulations on your 100 posts milestone. All best, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Thank you Ulla, I'm really pleased that you liked it.
Comment from tfawcus
Nicely maintained tension in this. You give the characters a titbit to chew over, then leave them to it for a while. A little hope to cling to, but not too much.
Love that expression 'she could talk for England'! I haven't heard it for ages.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Nicely maintained tension in this. You give the characters a titbit to chew over, then leave them to it for a while. A little hope to cling to, but not too much.
Love that expression 'she could talk for England'! I haven't heard it for ages.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Thank you Tony, I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Ruth is a little ruthless with her remark, "they're a bloody murder" - the things we say without thinking.
back to that time and find out what what was going on" (drop one "what")
I can understand Stacey being excited as there might be something here to exonerate her son. It sounds like the three are grasping at straws, or they could solve the case.
A good chapter, Jacob. Congratulations on post #100:-)
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Ruth is a little ruthless with her remark, "they're a bloody murder" - the things we say without thinking.
back to that time and find out what what was going on" (drop one "what")
I can understand Stacey being excited as there might be something here to exonerate her son. It sounds like the three are grasping at straws, or they could solve the case.
A good chapter, Jacob. Congratulations on post #100:-)
xo
Pam
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Thank you Pam, I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from BethShelby
They are only getting dribbles of new information to go on. I would think if her son is innocent he would want his mother to all she can to get him out of jail. Good writing.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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They are only getting dribbles of new information to go on. I would think if her son is innocent he would want his mother to all she can to get him out of jail. Good writing.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Thank you Beth.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Hey, congrats on your 100th milestone! You've beaten me to that one:) I like the way your story is going. It's taken a new turn which is very interesting if they can find out why Susannah was so excited and who she was meeting. My mind's considering all sorts of things now. I like that touch of cinnamon too in the cafe, setting the scene. Well done, Jacob. No edits noted. Debbie
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Hey, congrats on your 100th milestone! You've beaten me to that one:) I like the way your story is going. It's taken a new turn which is very interesting if they can find out why Susannah was so excited and who she was meeting. My mind's considering all sorts of things now. I like that touch of cinnamon too in the cafe, setting the scene. Well done, Jacob. No edits noted. Debbie
Comment Written 09-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Thank you Debbie. I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
this chapter is rich in action and revealing of character traits. It works well to have the group meeting in a cafe, but I think I would have played more on their fears of being overheard. kay
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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this chapter is rich in action and revealing of character traits. It works well to have the group meeting in a cafe, but I think I would have played more on their fears of being overheard. kay
Comment Written 09-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Thank you, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Congratulations on your 100th milestone post!!! This is an excellent to receive it on. Stacy has some new information that could help. Too early to tell yet. I couldn't find any way to improve this post.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Congratulations on your 100th milestone post!!! This is an excellent to receive it on. Stacy has some new information that could help. Too early to tell yet. I couldn't find any way to improve this post.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Thank you Barbara, I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Lindsey Russell
I'm really interested in this story. I don't see any major revisions needed and the glossary of characters is very helpful. Thanks for sharing and good luck with your writing endeavors.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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I'm really interested in this story. I don't see any major revisions needed and the glossary of characters is very helpful. Thanks for sharing and good luck with your writing endeavors.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Thank you, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.