The Tainted
Viewing comments for Chapter 42 "Short Rest"A fantasy story following hunter Taya
3 total reviews
Comment from jim vecchio
Many of your scenes deal with eating. You are doing well with them. Make sure something happens at those points, or something is said, as you do, or they would otherwise be wasted scenes. You are moving the tory ahead well.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2024
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Many of your scenes deal with eating. You are doing well with them. Make sure something happens at those points, or something is said, as you do, or they would otherwise be wasted scenes. You are moving the tory ahead well.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2024
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I didn't notice. Thanks for the advice
Comment from Lindsey Russell
Very good work. One piece of advice: could you please make the font a bit larger. It would make the work much easier to read. Thanks for sharing this!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2024
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Very good work. One piece of advice: could you please make the font a bit larger. It would make the work much easier to read. Thanks for sharing this!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2024
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Thank you for reading and for your advice!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
The story continues to well! The dynamics between the characters, especially between Taya and Demi, are so well written. The dialogue feels natural, and the details about their surroundings and actions help me picture everything.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2024
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The story continues to well! The dynamics between the characters, especially between Taya and Demi, are so well written. The dialogue feels natural, and the details about their surroundings and actions help me picture everything.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2024
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I'm really glad to hear that, thank you :)