The Tainted
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Apology"A fantasy story following hunter Taya
3 total reviews
Comment from jim vecchio
Very good. You know how to make fight scene seem entertaining and interesting and how to evolve characterization through narrative and dialogue. What will the future hold?
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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Very good. You know how to make fight scene seem entertaining and interesting and how to evolve characterization through narrative and dialogue. What will the future hold?
Comment Written 02-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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I appreciate you saying that :)
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I look forward to each chapter.
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That's good. We're getting there. You guys have almost caught up to what I've written so I'm working on it now.
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Post it, and I'll be there to read it!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nice chapter. Good work.
... changing opponents every twenty minutes. - I think I'd use a different reference. I doubt they knew 'minutes' by looking at sundials or at the sun's position in the sky. Maybe just say 'frequently changed opponents'.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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Nice chapter. Good work.
... changing opponents every twenty minutes. - I think I'd use a different reference. I doubt they knew 'minutes' by looking at sundials or at the sun's position in the sky. Maybe just say 'frequently changed opponents'.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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Thank you, I appreciate you pointing out things I haven't thought of
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Nicely done again! Another strong chapter. The training scene is well written showing intense combat sequences and strategic use of elemental powers. The dialogue flows naturally. I like how you have a shift from intense combat to personal reflection and budding romance with Demi. You've shared an enjoyable scene that kept me engaged with its well paced plot and interesting character interactions. Well done!
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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Nicely done again! Another strong chapter. The training scene is well written showing intense combat sequences and strategic use of elemental powers. The dialogue flows naturally. I like how you have a shift from intense combat to personal reflection and budding romance with Demi. You've shared an enjoyable scene that kept me engaged with its well paced plot and interesting character interactions. Well done!
Comment Written 02-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much! I really appreciate your thoughtful review :)