2024 Gypsy's Prose
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Eastern Winds".
15 total reviews
Comment from Thesis
You told a story of full evolution with your Dad. It was filled with emotion and details about your family, and how it devolved once your Dad married again. It's a sad story, but you kept yourself sane and finally found peace. Good for you!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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You told a story of full evolution with your Dad. It was filled with emotion and details about your family, and how it devolved once your Dad married again. It's a sad story, but you kept yourself sane and finally found peace. Good for you!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from patcelaw
This is a beautifully written story that you have presented us with about your relationship with your father. I am glad that you have that kind of an attitude even though there were some things that were bad. God bless you and may you have a wonderful week. Patricia.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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This is a beautifully written story that you have presented us with about your relationship with your father. I am glad that you have that kind of an attitude even though there were some things that were bad. God bless you and may you have a wonderful week. Patricia.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from joann r romei
This was wonderful the only comment I have is I'd love to hear more about you and your family, how was Spain? and your aunt? I'm glad you were able to forgive your father, most children never recover,
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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This was wonderful the only comment I have is I'd love to hear more about you and your family, how was Spain? and your aunt? I'm glad you were able to forgive your father, most children never recover,
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Joann, thank you for the exceptional six stars review and kind words.
My Dad and Mom are dead. I have three children and three grandchildren. They are my treasure, the best thing in my life. I would never give my children up for a man. I have a bachelor's degree in business administration. I worked in the social field and teaching most of my life I love to teach. I am disabled but with medication I live a normal life. I am divorced but I like being single, I don't need a man to complete me. I am a poet and artist. I love writing Japanese poetry and stories. Poems are easy to write but I need to practice my writing. I would like to write a story of my life in the future. I'm at peace and happy. I love Fanstory, I have learned a lot and made wonderful friends. I had a challenging life but I wouldn't change anything, my life made me who I am, not perfect but whole and at peace.
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You are welcome, and Fan story is such a great place to express what ever it is, so glad you are on the site. Every life is worth a story, this past year was traumatic for me, I don't think I've recovered or ever will, many family problems, life changing ,
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello Gypsy. I enjoyed reading this verse/haibun and applaud you on a creative and well-written piece. You delighted me when you were so open and honest about your Dad and how you dealt with the ups and downs of your relationship. Such a fine piece that I can relate to with my own relationships. :)
Melissa
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Hello Gypsy. I enjoyed reading this verse/haibun and applaud you on a creative and well-written piece. You delighted me when you were so open and honest about your Dad and how you dealt with the ups and downs of your relationship. Such a fine piece that I can relate to with my own relationships. :)
Melissa
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, Melissa
Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this Haibun with us. I enjoyed reading. I've never understood how a parent, whether mom or dad, can allow a new spouse to dictate their love for their own children. Nothing would come in the way of my children. Oh well, that's me. I enjoyed reading and you did a good job writing this.
A favor: My new post has some Spanish words, please make sure they're correct. My Spanish is rusty.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thank you for sharing this Haibun with us. I enjoyed reading. I've never understood how a parent, whether mom or dad, can allow a new spouse to dictate their love for their own children. Nothing would come in the way of my children. Oh well, that's me. I enjoyed reading and you did a good job writing this.
A favor: My new post has some Spanish words, please make sure they're correct. My Spanish is rusty.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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I will go check your Spanish words in the new chapter.
Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review and kind words. I have two daughters and a son, I would never chose a man over my beautiful children, no matter what the situation may be. They are my treasure, my blessings and I will never understand why my dad went along with her decision. I didn't mention that a couple of years later I went to Spain to see him and my siblings, my stepmother didn't allow him to see me. She was evil.
Hugs,
Gypsy
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This lady will eventually get what's coming to her.
Comment from GWHARGIS
This is what I'm talking about. The prose is a vulnerable undertaking but for this reader, so worth it. It gives me a deeper insight into the poem. Keep it up. This was great. Forgiveness is so hard, but rewarding. Gretchen
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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This is what I'm talking about. The prose is a vulnerable undertaking but for this reader, so worth it. It gives me a deeper insight into the poem. Keep it up. This was great. Forgiveness is so hard, but rewarding. Gretchen
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thank you for your encouragement, I will right more so I can improve. So far I only had one correction but I'm sure there's more than that.
I am grateful for the exceptional six stars review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy. Good for you for forgiving him. If you were unable to do so you'd be hurting only yourself. People are complex and capable of stunning decisions, bad decisions.
You can drive yourself mad trying to undersand them and why they chose such a terrible path. Sometimes the best thing to do is to realize you'll never undersand them.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Another fine poem, Gypsy. Good for you for forgiving him. If you were unable to do so you'd be hurting only yourself. People are complex and capable of stunning decisions, bad decisions.
You can drive yourself mad trying to undersand them and why they chose such a terrible path. Sometimes the best thing to do is to realize you'll never undersand them.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Yes, I cried many nights after I moved to America. I called him several times but she didn't approve and my dad told me to stop calling. He was a coward and she was evil.
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
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That must have been a hard thing to hear
Comment from shelley kaye
a long <-- i think this should be one word (along)
cute pic with a happy kid and proud dad - goes well with the haibun story
good well-written story with a great ending haiku about the winds of change... maybe have another haiku at the start that's opposite the ending one? eh just a thought lol
nice work - thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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a long <-- i think this should be one word (along)
cute pic with a happy kid and proud dad - goes well with the haibun story
good well-written story with a great ending haiku about the winds of change... maybe have another haiku at the start that's opposite the ending one? eh just a thought lol
nice work - thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and help with grammar.
Gypsy
Comment from RJ Heritage
I think that this is very moving and heartfelt writing that is well expressed and presented. I am so happy that you found the strength and wisdom to forgive your father. When I was a child, my mother raised three kids who had a similar experience. They grew up to e fine adults.
I think your poem brings out the theme of your poem as it, in my mind, shows how the wind clears your rough experiences, and the fresh apples, give you a fresh start. Very well done.
RJ
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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I think that this is very moving and heartfelt writing that is well expressed and presented. I am so happy that you found the strength and wisdom to forgive your father. When I was a child, my mother raised three kids who had a similar experience. They grew up to e fine adults.
I think your poem brings out the theme of your poem as it, in my mind, shows how the wind clears your rough experiences, and the fresh apples, give you a fresh start. Very well done.
RJ
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review and kind words.
Gypsy
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You?re welcome
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I really like this combination of prose and haiku. The verse conveys, in this wonderful imagery you paint, the essence and revelation of the narrative. How sad that his marriage to the so often archetypical 'stepmother' ended up tainting your relationship with your father, one that had started so well. A couple of minor edits: and(,) after five years...; dad went (along) with her decision.
Thank you for sharing this poignant write, Gypsy. It's never an easy process to delve into ones background like this and balance emotions. Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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I really like this combination of prose and haiku. The verse conveys, in this wonderful imagery you paint, the essence and revelation of the narrative. How sad that his marriage to the so often archetypical 'stepmother' ended up tainting your relationship with your father, one that had started so well. A couple of minor edits: and(,) after five years...; dad went (along) with her decision.
Thank you for sharing this poignant write, Gypsy. It's never an easy process to delve into ones background like this and balance emotions. Take care Debbie
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Debbie, I appreciate the exceptional six stars review and help with grammar... it's not my forte.
Gypsy hugs