The Tainted
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "Tyler's Bootcamp Pt 2"A fantasy story following hunter Taya
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Comment from jim vecchio
This chapter continued another very well written (practice) battle scene. You are very good at writing this. Again, to keep your writing perfect, here is a small typo: "Who knew I'd fight a women with no empathy"-should be "woman" and end with a question mark.
There! Now it's perfect!
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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This chapter continued another very well written (practice) battle scene. You are very good at writing this. Again, to keep your writing perfect, here is a small typo: "Who knew I'd fight a women with no empathy"-should be "woman" and end with a question mark.
There! Now it's perfect!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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Thank you :)
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You're doing very well with your story!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Great job again! The interactions are engaging. I enjoyed the blend of tension and camaraderie among the characters. For me what stood out was the sparring scenes. That's got to be hard to write but they are particularly well done!
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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Great job again! The interactions are engaging. I enjoyed the blend of tension and camaraderie among the characters. For me what stood out was the sparring scenes. That's got to be hard to write but they are particularly well done!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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They are when multiple people are sparring different people. The battles at the beginning of the novel were a bit easier